A Not Quite So Daring Dash

After a tough run-in with a giant rock golem Rainbow Dash is feeling a little less confident than usual. It's up to Fluttershy to help her friend get her groove back.

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Needing Comfort · 6th Jun 2015 · 1,006 words
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Still Not Ready · 9th Jul 2015 · 3,606 words
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Escalation · 15th Jul 2015 · 3,557 words
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Confessions · 26th Jul 2015 · 3,827 words
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Deeper · 16th Aug 2015 · 4,168 words
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sunnybun

sunnybun #1 · Jul 3rd, 2015 · · · Needing Comfort ·

She never in her wildest dreams would have thought the current situation was even remotely possible.

Taylor Swift must've broken me, because I immediately started humming her song, "Wildest Dreams" when I saw that line.

The beginning started off a little rocky punctuation-wise, but towards the end it was pretty good. The emotion seemed a little flat near the end, and I think that's because you wrote, "RD" instead of just "Rainbow" or "Dash". For me, personally, abbreviations of any pony's name used in a story just sort of kills the mood. Other than that, pretty great story!

Pauszed

Pauszed #2 · Jul 5th, 2015 · · · Needing Comfort ·

You should post more. This story should NOT be a oneshot.

darbselah

darbselah #3 · Jul 9th, 2015 · · · Still Not Ready ·

6184233 No, I think you're right. I'll take a look at it. Thanks for reading. :)

ZeroSpawn

ZeroSpawn #4 · Jul 14th, 2015 · · · Still Not Ready ·

viewing from the list in the "FlutterDash" group the description reads:

Usually it's all the other ponies boosting and lifting up Fluttershy, but when Rainbow Dash isn't feeling quite herself how will Shutterfly do on the other end.

The Queen Baby

The Queen Baby #5 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · · Needing Comfort ·

Hey there. I'm really liking the first chapter so far. It was a little slow in the beginning, but once we got the story of the Golem, it picked up a lot. I also enjoy Fluttershy's inner thoughts, can't wait to read more!

The Queen Baby

The Queen Baby #6 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · · Still Not Ready ·

Another good chapter. Poor Dash, feeling alone is awful. Hopefully she learns opening up to the right people will help.

The Queen Baby

The Queen Baby #7 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · · Escalation ·

Escalation is right. Another good chapter. Rarity could have perhaps, been more tactful. And dang, did Dash over react, which is believable for her.

darbselah

darbselah #8 · Jul 28th, 2015 · · · Confessions ·

6249804 Once again you were spot on. Hopefully it looks better now. If you wouldn't mind I would love to send you the next chapter before I publish it. I understand if you don't have time for that or whatever, but I'd love a second set of eyes before I publish.

Ninebreaker