why do I get the feeling ponyville will be attack or something by a army or 9 and if so please let twilight fight to all she really did in crimson night is almost die a lot it would be nice to see the general back in the fight anyway keep it up
awsome use of the oc, i do hope you use more of her at a later date, i would love to see more of how she is in combat, also i kinda expected the bvattle scene with crystal wouldof taken longer, i would of thought that being the daughter of chrysilis she wold be on equal ground with dawn? but the way you used her was cool too.
please please please use her more at a later date.
718065 well not being an enemy would mean she wouldn't fight back, so there wouldn't even be a fight scene. what happened would be what would really happen, all of her energy going into defending herself while trying to get Dawn to stop attacking long enough to explain herself.
ahhhh that was you reasoning then , i see, goood job then. but still if its possible can you includer her in a few more chapters if possible, if not oh well. maybe have dawn and crystal team up to go infiltrate a den where they will learn who the true enemy is and other useful info, either that or have crystal just tell dawn what is going on, personay i would love to see more of how you envisioned crystal to be fighting style wise. oh and if you could dont have crystal go back with her mother, may e have mirage join the guard instead, witch would prob infuriate or make her mother proud , but maybe have mirage say something like shes got to be her own pony/changling and do this for the good of equestia and the planet. that might work out.
oh AND just a reasoning, this chapter is the longest youve done for this story, witch is good. not too short and not to long is good
What does Spike currently look like in your fic? As in what's your bio for him? is he immortal because he's a dragon? How old is he? Has he grown since the last fic? Your character Dawn's helper has been described; since you updated what twilight looks like a few chapters back, I think you should update us on how you see spike now! He deserves some characterization, don't you think?
720601 hm...well of course he's older, if I have a reason to put him in the story as more than just "Spike is doing this" or "Hey spike what's up!" then I'll describe him in more detail
So by reading this story and seeing Dawn and Dusk are somewhat immature in their behaviour, means they are getting caught sooner or later?
With Dawn venting off so much and Dusk trying to help her in those moments it wouldn't suprise me if they actually get caught in a ghoul den like suddenly bursting into a level 5 or higher den.
Then Twilight Sparkle needs to step in to save them both. But first Twilight gotta tell princess Luna and Celestia. Which both decided to come with her and they mentioned to take the school students with them aswell to show Twilight in action and what a 'dawn gaurd' can do.
But when she arrives Twilight felt her anger that she was hiding trying to push out. which after a few moments just snapped. Twilight went against the hordes of enemies alone into a violent battle where Twilight wipes out everything (could make it a huge battlefield which twilight just takes on alone with her abilities making everyone gasp And shows them the true power of a general which has all the powers from every race).
Afterwards when the battle is over Dawn and Dusk got yelled at in the cave by Twilight for acting like little fillys which every1 heard outside. Dawn and Dusk both declined it all and said they were just trying to vent off. Those words made Twilight blow up the cave above them considering thats what she was angry about and they didn't understand her. And soon she was actually scolding at them running off like ponies without a brain. So after their little scuffle Twilight decided to expel them both from school for one month cause of their stupid behaviour which could have gotten them killed. and on and on :D
jeah something like this was swimming in my mind. Perhaps cause i like Twilight showing of her powers and all.
so i just calculated i just passed 60k views across all of my stories...so here's a chapter of crimson dawn!
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Nice. I like it so far. Keep up the good work.
Excelent We Are Most Pleased With Thy Dedication
why do I get the feeling ponyville will be attack or something by a army or 9 and if so please let twilight fight to all she really did in crimson night is almost die a lot![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
it would be nice to see the general back in the fight
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anyway keep it up
awsome use of the oc, i do hope you use more of her at a later date, i would love to see more of how she is in combat, also i kinda expected the bvattle scene with crystal wouldof taken longer, i would of thought that being the daughter of chrysilis she wold be on equal ground with dawn? but the way you used her was cool too.
please please please use her more at a later date.
Yay! You updated! I was getting worried that the zombies got you!![:raritydespair:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritydespair.png)
Excellent, as always. Five moustaches out of five.![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
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718065 well not being an enemy would mean she wouldn't fight back, so there wouldn't even be a fight scene. what happened would be what would really happen, all of her energy going into defending herself while trying to get Dawn to stop attacking long enough to explain herself.
ahhhh that was you reasoning then , i see, goood job then.
but still if its possible can you includer her in a few more chapters if possible, if not oh well. maybe have dawn and crystal team up to go infiltrate a den where they will learn who the true enemy is and other useful info, either that or have crystal just tell dawn what is going on, personay i would love to see more of how you envisioned crystal to be fighting style wise. oh and if you could dont have crystal go back with her mother, may e have mirage join the guard instead, witch would prob infuriate or make her mother proud , but maybe have mirage say something like shes got to be her own pony/changling and do this for the good of equestia and the planet. that might work out.
oh AND just a reasoning, this chapter is the longest youve done for this story, witch is good. not too short and not to long is good
719402 she's going to be joining the team at one point in the future so worry not my friend
was going for 8 pages...only managed 5
coolio. i do hope you included her ranged attack, in her repetuar if not oh well gotta stick to fand to neck fighting i guess hehe.
Bravo good sir bravo, I was going pinkie crazy on boredom![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
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What does Spike currently look like in your fic? As in what's your bio for him? is he immortal because he's a dragon? How old is he? Has he grown since the last fic? Your character Dawn's helper has been described; since you updated what twilight looks like a few chapters back, I think you should update us on how you see spike now! He deserves some characterization, don't you think?![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
720601 hm...well of course he's older, if I have a reason to put him in the story as more than just "Spike is doing this" or "Hey spike what's up!" then I'll describe him in more detail
720809 seem legit. also figured out how to reply......... LIKE A BOSS!!!!
oi, I'm following you, and for some reason i didn't get an update. must stalk out of paranoia.
my face is here
Cult of the Damned? yep.. WE GOT ARESELFS A LICH KING BABY!! a white pony with long silver hair and blue glowing eyes. Arthas Manethil :P
796964 ...while warcraft 3 was badass no
loved the first one loving this one excellent work, can't wait for the next chapter
Blah, waiting for chapters now!
Dark you're ine of my favorite autors (i can't decide who is the best),you are AWESOME
So by reading this story and seeing Dawn and Dusk are somewhat immature in their behaviour, means they are getting caught sooner or later?
With Dawn venting off so much and Dusk trying to help her in those moments it wouldn't suprise me if they actually get caught in a ghoul den like suddenly bursting into a level 5 or higher den.
Then Twilight Sparkle needs to step in to save them both.
But first Twilight gotta tell princess Luna and Celestia.
Which both decided to come with her and they mentioned to take the school students with them aswell to show Twilight in action and what a 'dawn gaurd' can do.
But when she arrives Twilight felt her anger that she was hiding trying to push out. which after a few moments just snapped. Twilight went against the hordes of enemies alone into a violent battle where Twilight wipes out everything (could make it a huge battlefield which twilight just takes on alone with her abilities making everyone gasp And shows them the true power of a general which has all the powers from every race
).
Afterwards when the battle is over Dawn and Dusk got yelled at in the cave by Twilight for acting like little fillys which every1 heard outside. Dawn and Dusk both declined it all and said they were just trying to vent off. Those words made Twilight blow up the cave above them considering thats what she was angry about and they didn't understand her. And soon she was actually scolding at them running off like ponies without a brain. So after their little scuffle Twilight decided to expel them both from school for one month cause of their stupid behaviour which could have gotten them killed. and on and on :D
jeah something like this was swimming in my mind. Perhaps cause i like Twilight showing of her powers and all.
Gah so little updating to this story. But your two newest are pretty cool.