After things began to settle down in Ponyville the mane six began to find themselves settling down into a domestic life. Pinkie-Pie opened her own party shop, Fluttershy began to go professional with her animal talents, Rarity moved part-time in Canterlot, Rainbow Dash became a Wonderbolt, and Twilight Sparkle settled into her role as the Princess of Friendship. Life seemed to settle for the mane six.
Spike and Rarity's younger sister, Sweetie Belle, have grown closer. Now in a exclusive relationship Spike has gotten more possessive over the young mare. Spike's possessiveness over Sweetie Belle is concerning Twilight, so Twilight turns to books to understand why this is happening. It all comes to a head when Spike nearly kills a Pony when he was out with Sweetie Belle. Seeing this Twilight decides he needs to get out of Ponyville. So with Spike and Sweetie Belle in tow she sets off on an adventure across Equestria.
Pretty good so far! You got a like and a follow!
5978520 *hugs* thank you!
I'm attempting to make it so where readers can explore Equestria along with Twilight. I also want to add background to it.
5978798 the ship?
5978975 Which Ship?
5979080 what's the story ship?
5979098
I have:
Spike x Sweetie Belle (I did this because I've always thought that Rarity was too old for him.)
Rarity x Fancy Pants (I did this ship because Rarity spends most her time in Canterlot and it just seems plausible. I plan on making Fleur Fancy Pants's odd sister or something.)
Applejack x Caramel (I didn't really know who to ship Applejack with. I originally going to do Rarijack, but it would mess with the plot line. So I just decided against it. So if you have any other ideas, I'm all ears.)
Fluttershy (up in the air)
Rainbow Dash (up in the air) has a foal as to who is the foal daddy, I don't know.
Twilight Sparkle is kinda in the air and kinda not. I plan on her meeting a stallion on her journey.
Ahh, those effects huh? I've always like SpikeBelle for some reason.
5979098 I meant to add Pinkie Pie, but it slipped my mind. With her I might do Pinkie Pie x Cheese Sandwich or Pinkie Pie x Pokey Pierce, I'm not really sure.
5979938 With me it just made sense because Spike is a bit younger than the rest of the Mane Six. I also figured he was around the Cutie Mark Crusader's ages, maybe a wee bit older but not much.
Story is nice, and as for Luna's colt? How about Orion?
5987103 That name didn't cross my mind. I think it fits so I'll call him that.
I think you meant to say sister there.
Otherwise, nice little chapter, Rarity isn't my favourite either, though that's personal on my part because I just think she treats Spike like a pack mule despite knowing about his crush on her, you know in addition to letting things get to her head.
5988895 Thank you for catching that. I naturally don't like divas and overly preppy people, that's only because I was bullied a lot. I don't like or dislike Rarity...I'm just Meh about her.
No, but he will have to apologize for the acers he destroyed [ acres ] God don't you just love spell check
Hmm, the princesses did that did they? I always found that an odd thing since there's no greater tragedy than outliving your offspring, and since Celestia and Luna are immortal, well...
Hmm, that was always the reason I liked Momlestia and Spike, it implies she adopted him because he could live as long as she would. Well, not the case here. Your story though, write what makes you happy.
Just a little pacing issue for me, it feels like it went back and forth a bit. Last chapter Twilight mentioned that Spike was being a little rebellious, yet they still interact as if no such thing happened in this chapter.
I would've thought that after his incident with his greed Spike would've gotten better at controlling himself. Now he's just destroying other people's property because of a misunderstanding? For a race of apex predators, it seems odd that they'd be such slaves to emotions.
5989917 Good Lord I'm horrible aren't I? Thanks for catching that!
5990873 I know I have a terrible time Pacing myself, it's one of my Achilles heels in writing. When I finish a chapter I want to get it done and posted, I don't want to wait. Like I've always said, I'll edit it later once it's completed. One of my teachers told me that...can't remember her name though. Another Achilles heel is my spelling, naturally I royally suck at spelling. The last one is run ons, when I get an idea I just write it down and keep going. Those are some of the reasons why I'm so open to letting people edit and correct me.
I would've thought that Spike would react more to the fact that he destroyed the property of others.
6000346 Well that's another thing I have trouble with, displaying emotion in stories. I myself have trouble displaying emotion so that translates into my writing. I often joke saying that I am a robot and these "emotions do not compute".
Treatment? What?
Otherwise I'm enjoying this. Shame it's got so few views.
6003700 Where did you see that? My neck and head is seriously hurting so I'll look over it later.
6003700 Rarity was getting treatment because Spike slashed at her and she has a minor wound that will need treatment. What I am thinking is that most or some Dragons are naturally aggressive to a certain point. Now Pony raised dragons are naturally less aggressive and more passive, but they still have that aggressive streak in them. Like in my story where a couple years back, maybe when Granny Smith was still a foal or just born, when the Dragon trading was at it's peak and was a commodity. What I'm basically getting at is all the dragons that are in Equestria (except Tezcacoatl) are descendants of those dragons that were originally raised by Ponies or were born with Pony ideals. I think that because the Ponies used eneutero magic on the Dragons while they were developing in their eggs to remove the naturally aggressive side the dragons had.
Spike on the other hand I'm not too sure about. I don't know how I want Celestia to discover his egg. Did she steal it? Did she find his egg by his dead mother? Was his egg abandoned? Did she get him off the black market? I'm not sure. If you have any ideas send me a private message. I don't want to spoil it for the readers.
6003812 Your story, use whatever backstory you like most.
Also, if I gave you ideas, you might listen to them and change your story accordingly. This isn't my story so I don't think I have much right to do that. If it was just minor stuff that doesn't really change much, then yeah, maybe, but nothing like that is on my mind at the moment.
AJ's crying in the inside.
Wow, that was quite a whiplash. You have a comedic scene of Bloom and Scoots interrogating Sweetie, then...
It's not crying, it's just liquid pride escaping your eyes.
Confusing. Was that supposed to be flashback?