After getting married,Copper and Emerald decide to move to Manehattan.After living there for about two years,and after Emerald gives birth to two baby foals,then life gets a lot crazier.
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Emerald Gem
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I tried, but I couldn't get through the story, I don't know what it was about. You need to edit this, please. There are commas where there shouldn't be, missing spaces, missing capital letters, extra capital letters, missing quotes, and a whole bunch more.
5993748 ok,reload the system.Then,the next time you try to read it,I hope all the mistakes will be fixed.Also,if the story didn't work,how do you know there were mistakes?
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I think I was a bit vague, sorry. I meant that I couldn't finish reading it because of grammatical mistakes.
For example, you forgot a quote here, and there a few other places where quotes are also missing. Also you have no spaces after commas and periods. I pushed my way through and I am intrigued by the concept of the story, but I can't help but feel you could make the story much better by editing some of your mistakes.
I hope I don't seem rude, and if I do, I truly am sorry. I did not intend to offend you, but only wished to give helpful advice. If I have failed, then my apologies.
5995920 Oh,I see.Yeah,these mistakes will definitely be fixed.Also, no apologies! I guess it was my fault for not double checking.Trust me,the next chapter will be a lot better.Im not saying there will be no mistakes,I'm just saying that the text will be better.
5995920 Also,Please join my group,The Elements of Harmony;Next Generation.
6426596 Nah, that's fine. I'll just fix it and it will be fine.