Alternate ending
"Now you listen to me, ya little waif!" Applejack was really getting annoyed now. "Ma hair is just fine! And delicate?! Where ah come from it's another word for weak! Ah know what hard work is, unlike you! UGH! Ah dunno why ah’m friends with ya sometimes, y’all're nothin' but a - AH!!!" Applejack cried out in surprise as she suddenly tripped, grabbing onto Rarity’s shoulder for support but only pulling her down with her.
The two of them landed on Rarity’s work table, Applejack landing on her back with Rarity ontop of her, both of them wide eyed and blushing madly.
There was a moment of silence that seemed to stretch on for about an hour or so, then finally the silence was broken as Rarity stammered. “O-oh dear!” she squeaked bashfully.
"Ngh..." Applejack grunted slightly, unsure of what to do or say.
“U-um well… Th-this is awkward.” Rarity said chuckling nervously.
"Y-yeah." Applejack agreed as the two simply stared at each other. "Uh R-Rare." the currently paralyzed cowgirl stammered.
"Y-yes Applejack?" Rarity stammered back the two locking eyes and neither daring to look away or even blink.
"Y-yer hands on mah shoulder... A-and yer grippin me aweful tight."
"Oo!" Rarity, realizing what she was doing, quickly retracted her hand, placing it on the desk and then rethinking, takes the opportunity to lift herself upright and take a few steps back from Applejack. "I-I am dreadfully sorry darling I-I didn't hurt you did I?"
"H-hurt? me?" Applejack asked as she slowly lifted herself to her feet. "N-Nah, o'course not." she assured her friend pulling her Stetson down to cover her eyes, face still as red as a shiny ripe apple "Y-y'all know me sugar cube, heheh... T-tough as nails." she bragged or tried to, failing at hiding how awkward she felt as she rotated the shoulder Rarity had been leaning on.
"Ah." Rarity replied, hands behind her back and face a soft pink, equally uncomfortable about what had just transpired. "W-well then um." she cleared her throat and took a step to the side gesturing to the door. "Ahem w-well that's all i need from you Applejack, y-you can go. I-if you want that is!" Rarity added rather panicked, not wanting to make the situation any worse than it already was.
Applejack gave a subtle nod of her head as she lifted her hat up to see where she was going. "R-right." she made her way towards the door hesitantly, each step felt like someone had slipped a heavy weight into both of her boots. Applejack paused only briefly as she passed Rarity, noting the discomfort that showed on the fashionista's face and in her body language. "Uh.. say Rare?"
"Hm?" Rarity lifted her head to look at AJ. "Y-yes, Applejack?"
"W-we don't gotta tell nobody about this... right?" she asked timidly.
Rarity gave a soft, forced chuckle. "Y-yes, hmhm... I-I mean no, no no ofcourse not heavens no eheheheh." if it was physically possible Rarity swore she felt more awkward than anyone in the history of the human race. "W-well i'll see you later Applejack." Rarity said, panicking and jsut eager for AJ to leave before this day got any weirder.
"R-right." Applejack replied with another nod. "See ya around sugar cube." she said tipping her hat with a rather Fluttershy style smile in the corner of her mouth.
as the bell above the door sounded Rarity breathed a sigh of relief and fell back onto her fainting couch located in the corner of the room. "Uuugh! good heavens that was dreadful." she said feeling all the energy flee her body, leaving her limp and exhausted, sprawled out on the elegantly designed piece of furniture. "I should hope nothing like THAT happens when Rainbowdash comes in tomorrow for her measurements." Rarity gave a long exasperated sigh. "Who am i kidding?" she asked no one in particular, her palm colliding with her face, covering her eyes. "If i can even get her to hold still long enough it would be a miracle."
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Now I want to see Rarity and Rainbow have an awkward moment like this.
6291356 XD i might do that XD
Whaaaaaat!??!?! why change the final?!?!did you didn't read what i wrote D: THE WORLD NEEDS MORE FICS RARIJACK
...pleaseeeeeee
6302524 I know the alternate ending was because a few people were complaining
6302524 but rest assured more Rarijack is on it's way
6303257 its your fic, you can do whatever you want...
6303799 precisely
that's why i made the alternative ending
the fic is intact and unchanged but for those who don't much care for the origonal their is an alternative ending
Had a little romp in the hay with this piece of text.
Results are found here:
Enjoy!
6303943 true true.....Will you write another?
6307947
oh just try and stop me XD
could use some help though
6308704 hahaha yeah!!! That's the spirit!!... Just, my English it's bad quality XD but I can give it to you some ideas...maybe AU's
6308754 hmm i'd apreciate that
6308964 enjoy mah friend
http://simplykorra.tumblr.com/post/120798118832/guess-who-loves-aus
http://simplykorra.tumblr.com/post/120950060907/aus-i-really-really-want
http://gurukorrasami.tumblr.com/post/125433949747/aus
6309003 hm? i... i don't get it
6309042 hehehehe
these are alternate universes to help you to expand and be more...you know creative. put your characters on different situations and so
You didn't need to change your endin. But you could add the rainbow dash not holding still at the end part. Just not as dreamy because... RariJack. :)
I actually think this is much better than the original!
The argument they were having at the start still feels too mean spirited for them, but I can ignore that. The biggest issue was that the pacing basically sky rocketed at the end of the last with the sudden declaration of love. As in, it was so out of nowhere that I was fully expecting to see, "and then Rarity woke up" near the end. Or that it ended up being a story written by one of them poking fun at the typically horribly cliched romance fics.
This ending fixes that issue completely. You still clearly get the idea across that they have feelings for each other, but ends it with them being flustered and slightly hopeful. In other words, the pacing is much more believable and even could lead to a nice sequel.
6781375
well you know what they say, the eyes are the window to the soul that show what beauty lies within
8011496 sure so long as you link the video so i can watch XD
8622599
It's done! :) I hope you enjoy! Youtube Reading
Howdy 0/ I just create this account to tell I prefer the original ending and dont understand why people dont like
I stayed a little confuse because Rarity just sleeping in the midle, but I think was cute too
#Rarijack Simps Live 0/