[humanized] A side Fiction/Prequel to GTVS by Mariacheat-Brony (with his partnership).
As Vinyl is rising in the music business; Rarity is having her first real challenge of her career as a fashion designer. Faced with the blank sheet syndrom, Rarity begins to run in circles and falls in a state of panic and neglect. Just as Rarity's moral hits bottom Patty, a good old friend, gives her the only good advise she can : have fun ! Forget about work for a night and start from scratch again !
And what better place to have fun than Vinyl's gig... But who's that stuning blonde on the dance floor?
Chapters (2)
Ooh, looks fun so far
i think i'll give the next chapter a shot....
Indeed, a good start. Wording/phrasing feels a little off at a few points, but I'm a writer myself so it may just be my style of writing is different than yours, so it's probably all good.
Again, good start, and already have my interest, you get a favorite
This shall be interesting to see how it goes 
Looks like a good start.
Waiting for more updates
Continue.
Hmmm you have my interest, please continue
Liking it so far!
very good start just have to see how it develops
This is a great start to what i think will be an even better story. If this is your first time writing, then i'm a muffin. Which i might be. Anyway favorite and liked complete. P.s great cover art. i look forward to updates.
You may need some proofing :3
Well, most errors you have are like this. Punctuation and capitalisation. Not the worse I've seen, but fixable :)
So much potential can't wait.
Needs a bit of polish in the hands of a decent editor, but you've got a good foundation here.
consider me intrigued
Thank you all for the early support !
My work's still rough around the edges but I'll do my best to improse it (I just need more practice); so feel free to point out my mistakes (english isn't my first language)
next update's coming in the last days of october.
Ya a little rough but , an editor plus us who are following you I'm sure will more then happily help you out ^_^ just keep going , I'm rather interested in seeing where this is going .
Mane Medic
I just found this a minute ago, and I like what I found. But that's it I'm afraid, like. You tend to tell us what's going on a lot more than show us, and we don't know little details that matter a lot, like the weather, time of day, cloths being worn, emotions, what the place the characters are in actually looks like ect. ect. Don't let my harsh words get you down though, it's still bloody good, you got my like and fave after all. It's just that it could be better...
If you ever need a hand with editing and all of that, you can send me a PM. I'll be more than willing to help.
Update really good story but from what I can guess is that its been awhile sense its been updated
I like how Rarity and Applejack's first contact started off bitter just like how it was in that episode, "Look Before You Sleep." Though I wish their drinking game was extended in more detailed; the game ended too quickly in just a couple sentences. They could have been some witty banter between each shot they take. Anyway, great start! Can't wait for what's to come next!
Also, I really like Pinkie Pie's character in this chapter!
She's funny, cheerful, and quite smart when it comes to solving problems, such as bribing the bouncers, and settling business matters with Applejack! Hmm... I wonder if she will play as matchmaker in this story?
The pacing felt a little fast and perhaps could use some more details on where they where, the surroundings, interactions, etc. But overall not bad at all and I rather liked it.
Considering Aj and Rarity's personalities, it makes sense that their first encounter is pretty bad, makes how they finally get together all that much better.
Glad to see that the writing spirit is coming back a little. 
I believe you deserve this.
Haven't read any chapters, but here's something from the description: 'an good old friend'
Take the n off of an. 'an' is only used when the word after it starts with a vowel.
Sorry, but my mind points stuff like that out and bugs me until I point it out to other people. It's a curse, I tell you.
Chapter 3 is getting checked by the editors.
Chapter 4 should be up by late february and chapter 5 will be written during Easter so there'll be some waiting to do (sorry)
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Actually, the fourth one is fine. It is dialogue. Most people don't speak like robots and occasionally skip over unnecessary words.
Lookin' forward to chapter 3!
3842494 Ummm.... I hate to impose, but its april now... Might I ask how those chapters are coming along.
There needs to be another chapter to this like now
4217223 deader than shit
As Vinyl is rising in the music business, Rarity is having the first real challenge of her career as a fashion designer. Faced with blank sheet syndrome, Rarity's thoughts run in circles and she falls into a state of panic and neglect. Just as Rarity's morale hits bottom, her good old friend Patty, gives her the only good advice she can - have fun! Forget about work for a night and start from scratch again!
And what better place to have fun than Vinyl's gig... But who's that stunning blonde on the dance floor?
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And now it's been over a year. Love the story, just wish it continued.
4861890 Deader than a fucking doornail
3842494 I don't think there's any cattle farm out there that has more bullshit in it than this comment has.
UPDATE! ;-; Please, this is so good!
Is this one still alive?