When the Royal guard, Flash Sentry, is given three weeks off of duty, due to stress, he travels to his once home, Canterlot , where he meets the newest princess in Equestria. He immediately falls for Twilight, but knows it's not right. The two become close companions, closer than they'd ever expect them to be.Maybe even, to close, almost to the point of sharing their secrets.
This is not suitable for kids(6-9, or people under 13). It includes foal language, some gory scenes(SOME. I will warn you when that part happens),some sexual scenes(I will warn you about that, too),and yes, it includes Flash Sentry, so if your not a Flashlight fan, or a Flash fan at all, then you might wanna get out. Don't bother to comment, or dislike. If you do comment something rude(talking to everyone here), I will remove that comment, and hope that you won't comment again like that. Anyways,Hope you enjoy!
Hope you like!
A part of me just died from the amount of errors....
Need to go back and retread- I have no idea who these people are. Lol!
Great story so far. =D
6105861 Lol. Thank you for reading this, and commenting your thoughts!
Have you thought about getting an editor?
6278319 in a matter of fact, I have!
6395804 I will try to update the chapter tomorrow. I will try. Btw the way, thank you for reading my story, and commenting!
Just some feed back that I have a bit, the story it's self is really good I can see where you're going to be taking it.
The detail in the story has a good start to it, tho I have found some spelling mistakes.
In chapter one the paragraph near the end of the chapter.
Flash, Midnight,and Silver walked "tword" the exit.
I pretty sure that you mean towards*
But over all the story is exciting I'll keep you posted if I find any more mistakes just to help you.
P.S just a side note when you're ending a sentence maybe add space between the period and the next starting line. Just cleaner.
Loved this chapter, but a spelling mistake for
SUPPER AWESOME BAD ASS MOTHA FUCKA!
Supper lol ------> "super"
I'm not trying to be nit picking but it's something good to fix mistakes in your stories heh.
-Black
First, it's Canterlot, not Canterot. And second, well, there isn't any second thing. But I didn't understand your idea yet.Whatever...