The Era Of Twilight

The Celestial Era has passed, all that's left is the twilight.

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Unimpressive Chaos Lord

Unimpressive Chaos Lord #1 · May 11th, 2015 · · ·

Not bad, not bad at all! That was indeed quite impressive. It was brief and ambiguous, and I love those stories. The narration was subtle and intriguing, and yet it manifested the perfect touches of desperation and beauty it was supposed to. It was, like you said yourself; finding beauty in the destruction. The characterization of the protagonists seems quite different from the show, but it is fitting for the story´s plot. After all, we don´t even know what happened. What could have possibly killed Twilight´s and freaking Discord´s spirit so harshly? The again, I would have preferred a more laid off Discord, more like his usual self. Bedsides the fact that he is crazy, he is eons old, so one would have expected him to be used to this. You´ve also made the mistake of writing both in past and present tense; something common but which should be fixed. Anyway, it was a great short story nonetheless. Good job