Trixie Lulamoon was not a happy pony. It had been only a week since her shaming at the hooves of that wretched Twilight Sparkle and her despicable friends.
"I will NEVER forget the humiliation", Trixie thought to herself. Twilight and her friends had exposed Trixie as a sham before all of Ponyville. News of Trixie's defeat had spread, and now she was finding it hard to obtain even small audiences for her magic shows. Trixie shuddered at her last attempt to entertain a small town. Just a few hours before, Trixie had entered a small town, all glitter and sparkles, and had actually managed to get a small crowd to gather around too see her spectacle. At first, all had gone according to plan. The ponies had oooohd and aaaaghd at her performance, until a young colt had taken it upon himself to intervene.
"Boo!" "Sham!", the colt had shouted. He had then began to throw garbage at Trixie. the crowd had then joined in, pelting the showmare until she was forced to leave. Insolent curs, thought Trixie. After her escape, she had parked her trailer in a clearing in the Everfree Forest, and after spending hours brushing the filth from her mane, had proceeded to take the 'relaxing' stroll she was now on.
" The Great and powerful Trixie shall get revenge on that vile Twilight Sparkle, and her pathetic friends, if it is the last thing that I do," Trixie promised herself. However, thoughts like these had been going through Trixie's head ever since the 'incident' back in Ponyville, and she had yet to formulate her revenge plan. At that moment, a chill breeze picked up, causing Trixie to wrap her cape tighter about herself. " Great, now even the weather hates me...", Trixie muttered sarcastically. As if on cue, the skies darkened, and a slight drizzle began to fall. The Great and Powerful Trixie REFUSES to accept a soaked mane just after she has cleaned it, Trixie thought to herself. without further delay, she headed back towards the Everfree, and her trailer.
After awhile, Trixie came to the clearing where she had parked her trailer, and was shocked by what she saw before her. the spot where she had parked her trailer was now empty, with only pressed grass showing where it had once been.
"Now the Great and Powerful Trixie has been robbed....", Trixie muttered to herself. Her eyes began to water as she hung her head low. All of the stress from the recent events in her life now boiled over, and Trixie could only scream to let it out.
"IT'S NOT FAIR!", she shouted. "It's not fair!"
The tears began to come in torrents now, and Trixie collapsed to her knees.
" I know it is not fair....little pony", said a chilling voice as smooth as the night.
Trixie looked through her teary eyes at her surroundings, trying to locate the speaker.
"Who are you?" Trixie asked
"A friend...", the voice said. "An ally"
Trixie was now becoming rather frightened, but she tried to muster up her courage. Whatever this thing was , she would not show it fear.
"Show yourself!", Trixie shouted, trying her best to add a commanding tone to her voice in an attempt to mask the fear she very much felt.
"As you wish....", the voice said. Trixie was shocked to see a ball of shadow appear before her eyes, only 10 feet in front of her.
Trixie stared into the black mist, but could see nothing but blackness.
"What...what are you?", Trixie asked in a trembling voice, her brave façade finally braking. "What do you want with me?"
" We simply wish to help you...", the shadow said. " As for what we are...."
Trixie was shocked to see the black mist take on the outline of a mare. The shadow mare just gazed at Trixie with nonexistent eyes.
"Just...Just stay away!", Trixie shouted, starting to back away.
The shadow mare let out a blood curdling chuckle, causing Trixie to freeze in her tracks. The shadow mare began to pace around Trixie, seemingly taking up the unicorn's measure.
The shadow mare came to a stop in front of Trixie and spoke." There is nothing to be afraid of little pony", said the shadow mare in a now strangely soothing voice. Trixie suddenly became more relaxed . "Like you, We too have been wronged by the Elements of Harmony, and We also seek revenge", the shadow mare stated.
Realization dawned on Trixie, and she immediately grew terrified once again.
"Nightmare Moon?", asked Trixie, her heart pounding in fear.
"Indeed", spoke Nightmare Moon. "Sadly, We must greet you in this diminished form, rather than in Our full glory."
"How do you want to help?", asked Trixie, her curiosity temporarily overcoming her fear.
" Power, little pony, power", stated Nightmare Moon. " We offer the power to destroy the Elements."
Trixie was shocked. Nightmare Moon wants to help me?, Trixie thought to herself. Still, Trixie thought back to all those times in her life when her desires had been denied her due to her lack of power.
" That does sound nice.....", Trixie admitted.
" So you accept my offer?", Nightmare Moon asked.
"I....I will have to think about it", Trixie decided. Nightmare Moon nodded her head.
"Do not tarry too long my little pony, for a storm is coming that will destroy the pathetic power of friendship", said Nightmare Moon.
"If you decide to accept my offer, travel to the ancient ruin deep in Everfree", spoke Nightmare Moon. The shadow form dissipated, leaving Trixie to look for shelter from the steadily increasing downpour.
Hope u guys enjoy
Alright, just going in and I'm knocked out at the second paragraph. Typically, thoughts are done with italics, rather than bold. This is especially problematic because Nightmare Moon's words are also bold, creating some confusion between the two. Additionally, commas belong inside the quotation mark, not outside, but that's an easy fix.
The next issue that jumps at me is the story of the little colt. Everything is going well, ponies are wowed by Trixie's shows, then one snot-nosed brat throws a tomato at Trixie and suddenly it's an all-out garbage fest? The frig? That escalated quickly.
And Trixie's cart gets stolen, just to further prove that Trixie's life is now in the crapper. Nice.
I did enjoy the talk between Nightmare and Trixie. That felt appropriately ominous.
5967448 yeh. I was kinda rushed while writing this earlier. The only part i was really able to focus on was the nightmare moon conversation. What i was going for with the colt story was that some of the crowd already knew about trixie, but didn't want to be the first to run her out. That took an immature colt. Thanks for your read:) Appreciate the assistance for a rookie bro:)
Alright guys:). Already 49 views in about a few hours time for my first story seems good to me. I appreciate u guys taking the time to read my story. I especially want a give a shout out to my "Homie" Meester, who i spent a long time having an interesting "conversation the other day. Also, thanks to obsolescence for approving my story. Lastly, tommorows chapter will focus on twilight and two of her friends, with the third chapter to be released tommorow or a day after, will provide some Trixie backstory.
When you said a storm is coming I couldn't help but think of the dark knight rises.