This story seems to be interesting. I'd love to see more of it whether as clop or as a full-fledge story, it doesn't matter. You'd do a great job in either format.

Dude, this is awesome you've got to make more.

This has the http://i421.photobucket.com/albums/pp300/Sniperjolly/Pony/131414268654.png

I approve.

Hmm... I like this story's potential. Please continue!

Your off to a good start, just don't be like most writers and rush the romance or clop scenes, these things need character development to be effective.

Cool. Please keep going.

Clop or not, this looks to be fucking hilarious!

Need longer chapters.

I love it!

Looks good so far. I'll provide more detailed commentary as your story progresses.
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5909690 Eh, somewhat, I'm not really sure if it should. I was just inspired by an rp and decided to write this.

Looks really promesing, looking foward to the next chapter.

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...if you get that reference...1500 brownie points to ya.

Sweet start! Quite sexy yet sensible! Though I didn't get the Cutie Mark Crusader reference.

9 feet tall? That's one tall woman...

5930818 there was one time the crusaders said that when they find their cutie marks, they would be finding themselves, or shit like that.
(Shitty english ftw)

"I'm not going to lie to you, your highness. I'm not a smart guy, plain and simple. I've jumped from one school to the next, and never really settled down in one place for too long. I'd like to use the opportunities that this academy will provide me in order to pursue my calling"

Nope. That is NOT how you sell yourself. He won't get in like that with his pity party for one so hey may squeak on in.

"From what I can tell, Mr. Barnaby, you're a wonderful young stallion. and from what I can see in your information you have unheard of potential. The only issue is, you need to pass an acceptance exam" Luna informed me, causing me to deflate just a small bit.
"Oh..." I spoke, letting a sigh escape my throat.
Luna seemed to notice my deflation, since she flinched ever so slightly. She thought for a moment before clearing her throat, drawing my attention.
"There is something I can do for you though" she informed me, a smile purging her lips.
"Really?" I asked, my eyes lighting up noticeably.
"Of course there is" Luna responded, her eyes twinkling ever so slightly to my reaction.
"What is it? I'll do anything to enroll- as long as I don't wind up crying and taking me shirt off" I excitedly chirruped, causing the monarch of the night to stifle a soft chortle once more.
"No, nothing like that- I'm assigning you a tutor to help you prepare for the exam, you have more than three months to prepare" Luna responded, taking a drink from her tea.
"This is amazing! I can't thank you enough, really!" I spoke, shaking her free hand enthusiastically.
"Of course, it's the best a princess can do for one of her subjects" Luna replied, smiling warmly.
I quickly released my grip on her hand, smiling sheepishly, casting her an apologetic glance.
"I can't thank you enough" I spoke, sitting down in my seat, a smile spread across my face.
"Your gratitude is most appreciable" Luna grinned, writing something down on a slip of paper.
After a quick minute had passed, Luna handed over the slip of paper that had an address scribbled onto it and instructions on how to get to said address. After looking over the address, I reach over and shake her hand in thanks. After saying our goodbyes, I parted ways with Luna, walking out of her office and into the courtyard.

*pinches the bridge of my nose*
Is this going to be shameless clop?

You could could that Celestia is*sunglasses*a GIANT woman. YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

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This is the first thing when I read that Celestia is 9 feet tall (note that I don't care for Steven Universe;only seen the episode this aong was in.