Rainbow Dash flies east.
this is interesting, although i must say there is a certain lack of plot so far, but it seams like your saving up for something
Seems to be running away. Something to do with Loyalty? Apples and, even though it was just a description, Emerald may imply has something to do with Applejack.
Yeah, I'm gonna stop jumping to conclusions and just follow for now.
Beautiful, but I really hope this goes somewhere soon.
Still beautiful, still don't know what's going on
It's a little sad...
I have resolved to simply accept this as a collection of beautiful moments. Imploding Colon, you are currently writing our fandom's guidebook to beautiful simplicity.
Let's see where this story goes, shall we? It's very exciting so far- definitely something new.
I'm gonna take a wild stab and say she is now in Australia, based on the name...
I have the feeling that Dash is trying to challenge Celestia, or the Sun, in some way related to her friends.
This is awesome
That's a strange illness.
"Rainbow Dash didn't need to see to know that the pendant had stopped growing." Is it supposed to be growing, or glowing?
Damn, as a lover of mountains, the imagery in this chapter was like pornography, awesome story so far!
I love this, so . . . esoteric, I've read works over 100,000 words long, but this tells so much in so few! Amazing work...
Holy dialogue, Batman!
No idea what is going on. Don't care, intriguing premise, following anyway.
Love it, peaceful and interesting.
I'm liking this story still. The expanded cast of characters seem really quite interesting, and it's a very peaceful, good read. I'm wondering if her "episodes" have anything to do with the reason she's left Equestria. Is this a one-way trip? Is it a journey of leisure or necessity? I'm really enjoying everyone's reactions and interactions, and the mystery behind it all only heightens my interest.
Also, ponies eating meat? A bit weird, but makes sense if they lack food (although, can't they eat the vegetation around them?). They must be the kind that can digest it. Keep up the awesome work.
Agreed, "peaceful" is the best word to describe this story, although "lurking menace" seems to fit as well, i'm lovin this story.
Is that a... a tombstone? or in this case a memorial, considering it's wood.
I assume the element necklace of loyalty is doing something to dash. Something bad. I also assume that Twilight and the rest are in some way inconvenienced, or they'd be helping.
You deliberately skipped the explanation. I am sad.
random inexplicable shipping for the plot!
So Rainbow delayed the stream, or did she redirect it?
Actually, I suppose that's not so important. If they could use that info somehow and make a bridge, it might work well. My question is if there's streams and other water there, why drag it to that town from far away?
blasted cryptic backstories and their frinking mysterious enigmas...
Agreed, the little picture I see doesn't look good though...
Every time this story updates, I count down the seconds until I can curl up and re-enter this bleak, haunting journey. It's so vast, so wild, yet without a hint to its purpose... mm. Love.
Giant monster attacking fulltrot!
Interrupting Prismatic Pegasus go!
Ha! Nice action sequence. I like these doses of fiction.
Why do I get the feeling Rainbow Dash is semi-dead?
au contraire, I feel like everyone in Equestria is dead...
>>659139659139 Possible... but not if Celestia sent her out. Then again, that could just mean the mortals are all dead. Interesting theory.
Completely random but we both have sonic rain-nukes as profile pics.
>>660664660664 That is a bit amusing isn't it? I didn't make mine, but I could imagine you making yours.
It wasn't my original idea, but I didn't like the color placement and rearranged it a little, so I only have like 20% of the credit
Ironhoof getting scolded for surviving being eaten by a hydra...
Sounds par for the course on this weird adventure so far. Tell me more.
Oh no. No no no no no.
I like Rainbow Dash! All because of this story!
incoming backstory bomb! Hit the dirt!
Also, just FYI Imploding, I think the chapter limit is 200, and if you have the story planned way off into the sunset I'd consider either combining chapters or writing longer ones, though I can understand if those options detract from your small chapter theme.
Excellent work BTW... now what is this smog I hear of? It sounds like an obstacle to be sure.
Haha, I love the sageness and humor of the elder, specifically the pointing out of the stereotypes!
Ugh! One more chapter, please, just one more! I need to know what happened!
I'm so confused. So intoxicated. I loathe to begin, but... might I beg for more? I'll join the legions of selfish bitches and cry out for more! Pretty please?
You're putting off the reveal as long as you can just to spite your readers aren't you?
He must be, I thought for sure Mr. Exposition was gonna show up finally, maybe by chapter 50 he'll arrive
I for one invite the mystery.
Let's see what transpires! Onward!
...Don't tell me.
She's a marewolf.
Jeez, every time Rainbow jumps around questions of Equestria, I get more and more curious. Onward with the next chapter!
After what happened, eh? That doesn't bode well.
I find this annoying. What the buck happened to the mane 6?!
It is nice to know that the CMC and the rest of equestria are fine, but where are the mane 6?!
wait a second...
OH please tell me that's not true... please...
Okay, so I know at least RD's exploring/adventuring with the consent and knowledge of the Princesses, or at least with Luna as her patron. For some reason the others of the Mane Six aren't mention, while Spike and the CMC are (with Spike delving into his magical capabilities). Also, the 'episodes' are known and becoming more frequent, and the way she asked about the Element of Loyalty makes me think she has it to keep her alive or something.
Either it's an epic quest to help the others of the Mane Six in some way because of something like the illness or related to it, or it's something RD is doing to soul-search or simply because she wanted to explore. She doesn't seem to have a goal beyond "go east". Alternatively, it's "one last adventure" before the illness kills her. However, there is no sad tag and the way they're talking and RD's acting doesn't make me think anything bad has happened to the others of the Mane Six or that she's going to die.
Also, I'm wondering if this is something you've made up as you went along. I mean, at first, it was tagged as "random" and consisted of only wonderful little snippets, but now it's getting a plot. I wonder if the plot was something you tacked on later or if this was originally supposed to be a snippet thing. I do think you should get rid of the "random" tag, as it doesn't really deserve it any more what with a coherent plot slowly, slowly building itself up.
Hmm, some sort of dimensional rift and a sickness that requires the Element to be staved off? What the hell does RD need to get?
and the condition accelerates...
Apparently being awesome AND loyal has its physical drawbacks.
Look at Charlie Sheen, for instance. Tiger blood? Hmf.
Hum. Takes a mare to know a mare.
Da fuuu-... and she had everybody fooled but RD. That is some dang good acting.
Damn, it just sank in now how much Dash actually has left to do...
Oh that's bad. The monsters are coming. Someone get me a shovel and a rocket launcher.
To war my ponies! We must halt the spider-bat-dragon monster invasion!
Awesome chapter! Rainbow would definitely be this witty in battle
Rainbow has developed a wit and no issue with killing things? What is that pendant doing?!
She's not witty! She's gay! This pony is a technicolor fruit! She's a chutney ferret! She's batting for the home team! She's homosexual! Her barn door swings the other way! She's an honorary resident of the isle of Lesbos! She bites pillows! She goes to bars, buys rounds of drinks, comforts heartbroken mares, and has sexual intercourse with them! THIS IS AN EXPATRIATE!!
Oh Dash... you're still as obnoxious and oblivious to injury as ever. I pray they don't try to remove your element though... that seems like it would end... poorly.
Hmm. Stone, Horns. Discord involved, maybe?
Lavender visions. . . ghosts? This is really enigmatic, keep up the great writing!
Why, hello there, Tirek.
Hm. Red iris, yellow whites... horns.
- Okay, let's see... speak my mind. Right. Whatever comes to me, mhm. All right. C'mon brain, think! Mmf!
- Oh! Okay, I know!
- Gold Petals is HAWT! WOO!
Oh hoho! Into the mines then. Let us find out where the heck those spiderbats are coming from!
Hm. I think Rainbow sort of explained the issue as to where the smog and bats come from. Let's see:
- Okay. So the bat things don't live on the mountain - maybe they come from inside it? Like, maybe the smog and the monsters are a byproduct of... what's being done to the mountain itself? Perhaps mining has upset some balance within the rock, and the result is you've disturbed these creatures and they're like so pissed off! So they retaliate for you... upsetting the balance? Maybe?
Huh. Maybe. I dunno, Rainbow isn't the sharpest pony. Still.
Idk, I really don't trust this guy. Sladesteed. SLADEsteed. SLADESTEED. His name sounds fishy.
This is getting more and more mysterious... and this isn't even the main plot just a sideplot! Sheesh... dude unless you're a quarter of the way done with the story in terms of chapters you will have to make bigger ones soon. The limit is approaching.
Oh my... mysterious magic symbols that appear to react to RD alone? Looks like fate has a sidequest for you Dashie.
So many chapters...
I've been quietly promoting this story - through some blogs, on EqD, etc. It's really the best part of my day, when my email reminder comes through, and I want to share that. One of my favourite authors, GingerNutGin, has been notified that he MUST read this. My all-time favourite, KitsuneRisu, has been told as well.
“Oh yes. 'Sparkill Havens' or some nonsense...”
That line. If even coincidence, it made me smile a mile. Thank you!
You have been ambushed. Roll for initiative.
Sweet Celestia! Roll a 20! ROLL A 20!
I had this recommended to me by a friend, and I must say that this exceeded my rather high expectations. You do remarkable work. Everything in this story is perfect, from the length to the pacing to the very essence of Dash herself.
I haven't finished reading yet, but so far this is a brilliant piece. Well done.
Hero Dash to the rescue! Still loving all of this.
awkward dizzy spell is awkward. Now she knows how Ditzy feels.
I positively adore this brave, mature Dash.
- ... hang on kid, i'm coming!
Wow. Rainbow sure has more stamina than I thought.
Blood for the blood god?
Goodness. No update yet.
- SELFISH TEARS!
The plot thickens!
No seriously, if Rainbow eats that I predict a big butt in her future.
Commando mode engaged . . .
Hm. I am confused and loving it.
- Does this mean they've been "horn-swaggled"? HEE!
Edit: Swaggled, thanks for the correction!
This story is interesting so far. I hope there is an explanation for whatever is going on here.
le derp. And so the mystery begins to unravel.
Those rotten, cow-faced lunatics! Swindling, no-good dirty sons of meat packets! Abusing an entire town for what, a decade or so? Stealing their people and forcing them to dig out some infernal machine? Brandishing fear and deception as tools to construct some dark, foreboding horror?
Wait... that almost sounds like non-fiction, if you consider some of the war-torn parts of our own world. Now THAT'S frightening
I LOVE THIS STORY!
And thus morale for the imprisoned was shattered before they operation even began...
I don't think she is going to pull this one off. anyway bad puns aside I saw this fic when it was on the new additions and I though "hey that looks interesting maybe she is migrating". Well now having read the entire thing in about 3 hours I have come to guess is that Rainbow is in serious trouble from the yellow eyes thing, the other mane 5 are more than likely dead killed by the thing hurting Dash, and Equestria is in a sort of Chaos. You sir know how to keep me intrigued by withholding just the right amount of info and having perfect cliffhangers. 5 MUSTACHES FOR YOU
"Stop right there, Pegasus scum, nobody breaks the valve on my watch!"
>>821750821750 I loled so hard...
I swear, this image gets so much mileage. Almost every cliffhanger...
Love the triple turnabout there. Rainbow Dash foiled from cutting off the water supply, then the Minotaur getting trapped in the pipes, then the water enacting some form of karma back on Dashie.
EEYUP... that is why you don't pick a fight with a quadruped.
all I could hear was the skyrim guards " I'll MOUNT YOUR HEAD ON MY WALL"
Oh my goodness. I haven't read this - but 63 chapters?
That is dedication. -claps-