"SO," Dash yelled, "so you think that just because your foster father does this to YOU, that you can just do it to any other pony?"
okay why does she suddenly know this? If she would know this, she would probably still be angry, but she would understand it a bit better, why Scootaloo was maybe so meesed up.
"Scootaloo, NO!" Dash yelled, "STOP!" But Scootaloo didn't listen — she jumped off the cloud city and instinctively buzzed her little wings, but to no avail. She plummeted down to Canterlot, slamming into the ground.
If Rainbow Dash is still a fast flyer in your story, and Cloud city? isn´t just a few feet above the ground, i think she could still catch her.
Still a good story, i mean it is not that kind of story i usually read, but it works somehow.
5881957 Texus i appreciate your comments!! I appreciate that you point out little things, that's telling me you pay attention. Thank you ps remember that Scoots told her about it
The end? I especially like this chapter. So saucy! Guilt is a big fetish for me, so what happened after the saucy part only makes it better in my opinon.
If Rainbow Dash is still a fast flyer in your story, and Cloud city? isn´t just a few feet above the ground, i think she could still catch her.
Scootaloo had a head start, and Rainbow Dash has just woken up, so might not be at peak performance yet. Never underestimate the importance of a good breakfast to set you up for the day!
Cloudsdale is high enough that in Sonic Rainboom the Wonderbolts considered Rainbow Dash to have saved their lives by rescuing them when they were falling from it. It's quite possible that its exact height (and location) may vary as it floats around.
5882029 hhhhmmmmm yeah i can accept that, she would need to get some speed first, and well if i just wake up i don´t even want to talk at first if i am still sleepy, another thing is Scootaloo had .....raped her? Does work rape like that too? I am not sure if she would really not be able to get her, but i give in this time, it isn´t that hard to believe.
I hate myself for liking this... but I can't not like it... Though the last scene did feel... Rushed... I'm still interested in what happens next though, so kudos.
Seriously though, I love the deep emotions you've written into this story. It's dark, it's deep, and it's well expressed.
I know most people are against rape in stories, and for the most part, I am as well. However, you handled this in a way that makes sense. It's there for story purposes, and not as pure senseless clop. It advances the story, and gives the reader a more pronounced emotional connection to the character, and the horrors she's been forced to endure.
All in all, good job. I can't wait to read more of this, so long as you continue to keep up the current trend of story over sex.
5891740 You most certainly did! Though, my opinion may be ever so slightly biased given as how I've written a similar story, at least when it comes to emotional and dark situations.
I really like your story, and can't wait to read further chapters. Here's hoping it doesn't tear my heartstrings too much.
5891822 yes one left. Thank you I will read it. I just wrote a " one shot" ( someone tokd me to do it to get known) and its clop. Thinking about ponies having sex is more appealing to me than people. the next one after that will be Clop... As well . Ps I'm not a fellow. Lol . I'm a middle aged mother. Lol
5891848 A middle-aged mother writing clop... Yeah, can't say I saw that one coming!
You're definitely getting known around here, at least more so than me. I've been here for a while, written a few well-liked stories, got into the popular list on the home page once, yet I have a super small following of 19. And here you are, writing a single story with controversial subject matter, and you're basically kicking my butt in popularity! Gotta admit, I'm a tad envious.
Anyway, best of luck with your future stories. I'm now watching you, so... keep up the good work!
Oh, and be sure to let me know what you think of my story, if and/or when you ever get around to reading it.
5882004 She didn't say she was sexually abused by her family.
5881957 The assumption could be made by someone with some psychological experience. I'm not saying that Dash has a psych background (and neither do I), but sexually (and mentally) abused children tend to confuse those feelings of love, thinking that there's only one form; sexual.
The first time I saw this in a story was in Jaynaylor's Better Days, which is easy enough to find with a google search. (I would link it if I weren't mobile). It's a really long story, and the individual chapters make so little sense out of context that it's better to start on your own time and go through the whole thing. It took me 2 days to finish it, but it's definitely worth it. 5882262 Rainbow Dash did not give consent. It was rape. Of course, Scootaloo was also too young to give consent as well, or as one might say "too young/abused to know better." Sadly, that means Dash would have to take responsibility for inviting a child she barely knew into her bed. A detail earlier that I couldn't ignore was that Dash didn't know her name, even though in the canon universe, they're very close. That shouldn't have been overlooked for this part and it ended up coming back around.
6224018 1. I didn't know you could reply to comments that way, but that's pretty cool. 2. Which part specifically? The explainations or did you mean Better Days? Because I can assure you Better Days is pretty deep.
Well I am glad the last chapter did turn out to be a nightmare. Now I'm just hoping Scootaloo is alive, Rainbow and Scootaloo become marefriends and live together, Babba gets taken care of, and they rescue Beatrice as she was being raped as well.
okay why does she suddenly know this? If she would know this, she would probably still be angry, but she would understand it a bit better, why Scootaloo was maybe so meesed up.
If Rainbow Dash is still a fast flyer in your story, and Cloud city? isn´t just a few feet above the ground, i think she could still catch her.
Still a good story, i mean it is not that kind of story i usually read, but it works somehow.
5881957 Texus i appreciate your comments!! I appreciate that you point out little things, that's telling me you pay attention. Thank you ps remember that Scoots told her about it
The end?
I especially like this chapter. So saucy! Guilt is a big fetish for me, so what happened after the saucy part only makes it better in my opinon.
What's Dash going to do now?!
5881957
Scootaloo had a head start, and Rainbow Dash has just woken up, so might not be at peak performance yet. Never underestimate the importance of a good breakfast to set you up for the day!
Cloudsdale is high enough that in Sonic Rainboom the Wonderbolts considered Rainbow Dash to have saved their lives by rescuing them when they were falling from it. It's quite possible that its exact height (and location) may vary as it floats around.
5882012 thank you!!!
5882029 hhhhmmmmm yeah i can accept that, she would need to get some speed first, and well if i just wake up i don´t even want to talk at first if i am still sleepy, another thing is Scootaloo had .....raped her? Does work rape like that too?
I am not sure if she would really not be able to get her, but i give in this time, it isn´t that hard to believe.
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Why is this in the M/M Coltcuddlers group?
5884231
5884231 someone suggested I put it there. Should it not be? If it's not appropriate I'm so sorry, how do I remove it?
I hate myself for liking this... but I can't not like it... Though the last scene did feel... Rushed... I'm still interested in what happens next though, so kudos.
5885418 thank you for your comments!
Promised myself I'd never comment here, but screw it. This is good!
5886797 thanks girl!!!
5886891 No problemo
I think I like this...
Seriously though, I love the deep emotions you've written into this story. It's dark, it's deep, and it's well expressed.
I know most people are against rape in stories, and for the most part, I am as well. However, you handled this in a way that makes sense. It's there for story purposes, and not as pure senseless clop. It advances the story, and gives the reader a more pronounced emotional connection to the character, and the horrors she's been forced to endure.
All in all, good job. I can't wait to read more of this, so long as you continue to keep up the current trend of story over sex.
5891574 thank you!! Thank you for reading and commenting!! This is my first story, I hope I did well!!
5891740 You most certainly did! Though, my opinion may be ever so slightly biased given as how I've written a similar story, at least when it comes to emotional and dark situations.
I really like your story, and can't wait to read further chapters. Here's hoping it doesn't tear my heartstrings too much.
5891757 there's only one chapter left and it's at the editors right now. WhAt is your story? I'd love to read it
5891811 Only one chapter left?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/227352/finding-love-in-dark-places
Will you be writing anything else any time soon or are you a one story type of fellow? :P I like your writing style, and really want to read more.
5891822 yes one left. Thank you I will read it. I just wrote a " one shot" ( someone tokd me to do it to get known) and its clop. Thinking about ponies having sex is more appealing to me than people. the next one after that will be Clop... As well . Ps I'm not a fellow. Lol . I'm a middle aged mother. Lol
5891848 A middle-aged mother writing clop... Yeah, can't say I saw that one coming!
You're definitely getting known around here, at least more so than me. I've been here for a while, written a few well-liked stories, got into the popular list on the home page once, yet I have a super small following of 19.
And here you are, writing a single story with controversial subject matter, and you're basically kicking my butt in popularity! Gotta admit, I'm a tad envious.
Anyway, best of luck with your future stories. I'm now watching you, so... keep up the good work!
Oh, and be sure to let me know what you think of my story, if and/or when you ever get around to reading it.
5891923 thank you! I loved your story. I love Scootaloo.
5892046 Glad you liked it! :D
Also, thanks for the watch!
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5882004 She didn't say she was sexually abused by her family.
5881957 The assumption could be made by someone with some psychological experience. I'm not saying that Dash has a psych background (and neither do I), but sexually (and mentally) abused children tend to confuse those feelings of love, thinking that there's only one form; sexual.
The first time I saw this in a story was in Jaynaylor's Better Days, which is easy enough to find with a google search. (I would link it if I weren't mobile). It's a really long story, and the individual chapters make so little sense out of context that it's better to start on your own time and go through the whole thing. It took me 2 days to finish it, but it's definitely worth it.
5882262 Rainbow Dash did not give consent. It was rape. Of course, Scootaloo was also too young to give consent as well, or as one might say "too young/abused to know better." Sadly, that means Dash would have to take responsibility for inviting a child she barely knew into her bed. A detail earlier that I couldn't ignore was that Dash didn't know her name, even though in the canon universe, they're very close. That shouldn't have been overlooked for this part and it ended up coming back around.
o no
This chapter shows how stupid RD can be
@exsnaggerwes
That's deep man...That's deep...
6224018
1. I didn't know you could reply to comments that way, but that's pretty cool.
2. Which part specifically? The explainations or did you mean Better Days? Because I can assure you Better Days is pretty deep.
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Well I am glad the last chapter did turn out to be a nightmare. Now I'm just hoping Scootaloo is alive, Rainbow and Scootaloo become marefriends and live together, Babba gets taken care of, and they rescue Beatrice as she was being raped as well.
damn, that was pretty deep