Changelings have been depicted as cruel, heartless, love stealing monsters. Multiple ponies across Equestria would love to watch the race burned from the earth. But nopony ever realizes that changelings too wear masks. And behind them, is a broken soul.
Queen Chrysalis is the only surviving member of the Changeling race. After killing her starved race in a mad attempt at food by invading the famed Canterlot Wedding, Chrysalis has to look for a mate in a nearby town, hoping to stay hidden long enough that she could start to not only rebuild her race, but the valley she had created between Changelings and Ponies. The problem is, she never expected her most likely mate to be the one who had helped her race meet their deaths.
This story is a REDUX of an old popular fic that was unfortunately cancelled and deleted by myself when keeping up with it and other stories became to much. It then received a small reboot by a fan, that soon ended after three chapters. Now you guys get to read the still in progress ECWM REDUX! The original story plot is different, so old, hardcore fans will receive scenes that are from the original, but others that are different. I will also be trying to make this longer than before, (Then again, it died 1/4 of the way through.) So I do hope you guys enjoy this enchanced blast from the past that I will try to work on when I can along with all my other stories that are sitting collecting dust.
Haven't I seen this before or am I thinking of another story?
5852419
I wrote the original story over a year ago on this site. I deleted it along with a few others after inspiration died. watermane2000 tried to continue the fic here but failed in giving it the same type of style that fans loved in the first place.
5852424 Thank you.
I love this story! Is the next chapter coming soon?
Nice start.
Like to see what will happen next.
5852424
other than the confusing back story im digging it.
5854003
How is it complicated? Love blasted changelings from canterlot Team Rocket style, injuries are sure to occur. Plus the hunger that would follow. Not really confusing.
5854240
Yup I should of been more specific. I mean about luna and celestia manifestations. What do you by they were manifested? That is the confusing backstory I was talking about XD.
5854445
Manifested, they were born into the world as a full sentinent adult. :v
5880789
*trips over lifesupport cord and unplugs it* Oh shit sorry, my bad.
5880852 Plug it back in, Putitbackputitbackputitback!!!!
No offence to the author, but in reading this chapter I noticed a rushed entry, multiple spelling/grammar errors, unjustified character interactions and a lot of forced information. In the future try and focus on slowing down the character introductions to allow more information on what the character is supposed to act like to the reader, it will help the reader understand what you are portraying your characters emotions and thoughts as. This will solve the rushed entry and some of the unjustified actions. It will also give you more time to space out the information that you need to give to further the story, but be careful that you don't start repeating information. I would suggest putting valuable information in between dialogue to keep the reader at a nice and slow pace, still being careful of dragging it out too long. For grammar and spelling, you should either try going through and checking the final product more thoroughly or get an editor to help. An editor might also be a good way to get a better idea on how the reader will view the story and give you another perspective to work with.
Ooops.
Not good (for Chrysalis).
If they don't catch Spike in time, he would probably call direct for Celestia by using the DragonFire-MailService.
Also:
Too cute to imagine!
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I remember you reading the first one, so you know how well that goes.
I love how the story is progressing thus far! I do appreciate stories were Chrysalis is a maternal figure
I also like that you left the origins of Celestia and Luna as "manifest"; I always saw them as equivalents of the valar/maiar (JRRT's Simmarillian)
My only complaint is that Chrysalis herself admits to being at fault for the Canterlot Wedding blunder. My own headcanon was that her actions were deliberate (see joshscorcher on ze youtubez)... but this is your story and I look forward to reading more!
She put that situation perfectly. Also, I loved the original so I'm gonna follow the redux quite closely.
Let's hope that this is not going to die a third time.
Not enough Twisalis on this site...
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Third?
6303822
Your first , ultimately deleted , version.
The version adopted by Watermane.
This one.
3 versions of this story ; two of which were discontinued. If this one was too , this would thus be the third time.
6304576
Only a second since the only thing that this was affiliated with was the title and a vague plot resemblence.
6304958 so any news on when this will be updated?
Aight, finally got to read it, the (supposedly) remastered version of the fic that had shown me the ChryLight.
All I can say is... It doesn't feel as good.
Maybe it's me, gloryfing the original version (I cannot re-read it and compare after all), maybe it seemed better when I was just a newfag lurker, compared to having read dozens of fics by now, and even starting writing my own... Because I'd imagine you'd be better writer now, than you were all that time ago.
Nevertheless, the story feels rushed so far, that's the first thing you can feel. Too much stuff happening in too small amount of time. Twi recognising Chrissi in the very first chapter also took away a great opportunity at character development (check out Queen of Hearts, it was done oh so well there).
The second thing would be lack of explanations, exposition, decorum and feelings. Everything's served straight into reader's face, without much of the accompanying elements.
Last thing would be grammatical mistakes and composition errors, like repeating the same word combination twice in the same sentence. But nothing a somewhat competent editor wouldn't be able to handle.
My tip would be to get a proofreader and a prereader or two. I'd highly advise you visit the Proofreaders Group and acquire them.
Hell, I can even be your prereader. Anything for the sake of this fic coming out decent.
It is vary interesting to read keep up a good work update more soon.
6304576 Well, looks like you jinxed it.
7321248
It's cancelled when I say it's Cancelled. There is an option for that in the ediotr, even. I just haven't had the time or brain power for this or other stories.
7431591
There's also an option to put a story on hiatus.
Because no updates for over 15 months most definitely doesn't grant a story the status of being "in progress".
7431591 update?
7431591 so is it cancelled for good? Or will you continue it at some point?
Sigh there go a series with so much hope if some one could just give it time
8182031
Sometimes they just don't have the time sadly.
8271498
and that why im not blaming any one at lest not trying to
8271645
You weren't, at least not in my opinion.
8271808
Cool
I was so interested in this too...