A guard arrived not long after they arrived at Silver's quarters. "Princess Luna is ready to see you."
Silver groaned at the timing of it, but Jake looked excited. "Can I go with you? I want to meet Luna."
Silver tensed as images flashed in his mind of how this could go, then an idea came to him. He grinned a little before nodding, "Follow me." He trotted out into the hallway with Jake following behind, and the guard leading the way to Luna's quarters. "To remind you, this is royalty. You should treat her like you would the President, if the President had the authority to have you killed or banished without a trial."
"Harsh," said Jake, "She wouldn't do that, right? She likes videogames and being liked by other ponies."
Gamer Luna? "She's only seen one video game, ever," advised Silver. "Just be polite."
They entered her room, with the guard waiting outside. Luna was in her pose that Silver had learned meant 'come over here and do as a stallion is built for.' He blushed at the open invitation even as Jake ogled the sight, "Uh, hi."
Luna rolled to her hooves quickly in alarm, "Who is this? Silver, my invitation to you does not extend to friends."
Jake pointed at himself, "I'm Jake, and you are best princess."
Luna gave a slow blink, "Thank you." She looked to Silver then, "Well?"
Silver gestured at Jake, "Jake is having a hard time learning the cultures and customs of Equestria. I know you can learn everything about a person with their consent, but can you give knowledge?"
Luna tilted her head slightly, "Celestia frowns on it. She says ponies should learn the old-fashioned way, so that they prize the information."
Jake pointed out, "I'm not a pony."
Silver nodded, "This is true. I doubt it will change his basic nature, but at least knowing the rules gives him the option of following them."
Luna raised a brow, appraising the new biped. A sly grin came over her, "Do you want to be?"
"Want to be what?" asked Jake.
"A pony. Perhaps a strong earth pony?" asked Luna. Silver knew this wasn't permitted, but kept this to himself. Luna might be testing him, or maybe she'd break the rules. Either way was her decision, not his.
"Seriously? Like Silver here?" asked Jake, pointing at Silver before patting him on the head, "My OC is a pegasus. Flying would be crazy awesome."
Luna set her head on her hooves, "Oh, do tell us of this 'Oh See' of yours."
Jake began to enthusiastically explain, "She's a--"
"She?" asked Luna with a raised brow.
Jake turned a little red, "Well... kinda, yeah? I mean, Equestria's run by mares, right?"
Luna nodded slowly, "Yes."
Jake flashed a smile, "So who wants to be the lesser sex?"
Luna raised a brow, "Would you not miss being male?"
Jake shrugged softly, "Let me have a mare before you zap me and we'll call it even."
Luna turned her head towards Silver, "Your friend is quite... interesting." Her attention slipped back towards Jake, "Converting genders requires a great deal of energy. Such a boon would have its prices. What would you give to become as you imagine?"
Jake frowned a little, "What'd Silver pay to become his OC?"
Silver raised a hoof, "My OC was Rough Draft, you met him before. This," He gestured at himself, "was made for me. I didn't design it."
Jake grinned all the wider, "You mean my OC exists? Dude, that's awesome. We can be, like, sisters or something."
Luna raised a brow, "Our question remains. Silver gave thirty years of his life for an equal feat of magic, though he has repaid the crown in blood and pain and continues to serve. We wonder if you would serve as faithfully?"
Jake fell to his knees, "I'll do anything for you, best princess."
Luna's voice whispered in Silver's mind, ~We think he knows not what he agrees to.~
Silver tried to think back, ~He probably has a very romantic vision of being your friend or lover.~
Luna smiled at Jake gently as her thoughts echoed for Silver, ~He doesn't seem that useful, and Celestia will chastise me most dearly if I strip away his species as I did you.~
Silver tapped a hoof on the ground, ~I'm not suggesting you do change him, or not. I do think he needs help learning before he gets himself put in jail forever.~
Luna set a hoof on her chin, "Very well, we have decided."
Jake stood up, "Really? Will you do it?"
Luna nodded, "Yes, on a condition to be met before we finalize the deal."
Jake raised his brows, "What would that be?"
Luna gestured out of her chamber, "You will attend a finishing school of etiquette. When you have learned how to stand before us with dignity, you will then decide what you want, and we will give it all due consideration."
Jake looked disappointed, but Luna continued, "This will give you a chance to learn the city, and its people. If you wish to call them sisters and brothers, you should know them. If you are unwilling to do even this, then you are not ready for the sacrifices I require." She turned her head to the door, "Take this one away, our business is done."
A night guard slipped into the room and began nudging Jake out, who wasn't ready to go. "Wait! I still want to talk with Luna!"
The guard had little sympathy, "She has dismissed you. Time to go." The guard was well-trained and fit, able to pry Jake's feet from the ground and hurry him into the hallway. The door closed behind them.
Luna gestured for Silver to step forward, which he did swiftly. She gently pet over his head with a hoof before softly tapping him, "Why did you bring him? I do not envy you if that is your ward."
Silver shrank a little, "I wasn't sure what else to do. I was hoping you had an idea."
Luna smiled, "I have several. It pleases me to know you trust me." She drew Silver up, curling around him. "If he has the same knowledge you do, he will be easily manipulated. I will send him to Twilight. She will adore the subject for her studies, and he will learn to acclimate in Ponyville. Perhaps she can divine how he came to be here." She whirled a hoof, "Or, we could throw him through the mirror portal. The human world there is close enough to yours that we should feel little guilt, and he will delight in the human versions of the ponies he fetishizes."
Silver wrinkled his nose as he cuddled with Luna, "I think the first one is the kinder of the two, and we could learn more from it. Were you really considering making him a pegasus?"
Luna tapped her chin, "If he was more polite and less groveling, perhaps. Making him female would require much more worth than I think I could take from him. Speaking of..." She rolled over onto her back, moving Silver into position, "You may begin."
Silver huffed loudly, "I am not your... sex toy..." He nipped at her belly, "I don't want that. I want to be a lover, and a friend."
Luna gave a low snarl before poking Silver, "It is your duty to pleasure me."
Silver shook his head, "Actually it's your job to pleasure me, but I don't want either. I... we were close, before. I want you, as you, as Luna. Not as a sex object, or to be a sex object." He slid down from her, blushing gently, "Though it does good on my self-image to know I'm good enough to be called on for that, I'd still rather have Luna as a friend than to be looked at with the same eye as a battery-operated toy."
Luna sat up slowly and looked at Silver, "You are a defiant colt."
Silver flashed a bright smile, "I am your defiant colt." He held up his forehooves, sitting up and balancing, "And I want a hug and conversation more than I want to mate with you."
Luna's expression cracked into a little smile, and she pulled him up, giving him that hug he requested. A matter popped into Silver's head, "My first wife, Night Watch, has specifically requested I give her a foal first. I... don't know what to look for, so..."
Luna tilted her head, "It is fortunate you spoke of this."
Silver's ears perked, "Are you, now? Soon? Oh god, have you had foals before?"
Luna shook her head, "Not in a very long time. Being banished does that."
Silver nodded hesitantly, "Would they also be alicorns?"
Luna's expression fell, "It is very unlikely, to say we have never witnessed an alicorn birth outside our own. Celestia and I remain unique. Any foal I birth will live a normal life, and die."
Silver went rigid, "Uh... this... is going to sound..." He flopped to the ground, unable to continue. Luna prodded him until he relented, "Did you make the lunar pegasi?"
"Make?" asked Luna, "In a fashion. They are my children."
Silver blinked, "No way."
Luna frowned, "Do you doubt my word?"
Silver shook his head quickly, "I mean, a whole species?"
Luna shrugged gently, "It was long long ago. My relation to any single lunar pegasus is faint at best."
Silver squirmed in place, "Did... you plan to make lunar unicorns?"
Luna flashed a smile, "Don't forget I know you. You have your own fetishes, though you sit on them and smother them, rather than thrust them in other's faces. Does that excite you, imagining my belly swelling with the result of your trysts?"
Silver's blush couldn't burn brighter. He didn't answer, but Luna thought he answered well enough. "Give your first wife her foal. It is her right to request it." She gestured at the door with a wing, "Begone."
Silver perked an ear, "We won't play today?"
"Begone," repeated Luna firmly, but she leaned in and kissed him between the eyes. "I will call when it is prudent."
Silver made his way back to his room at a relaxed pace. He didn't see Jake, nor was he in a special hurry to do so. When he pushed open the door to his room, he saw Fast sitting on his bed with a paper in front of her. She was grinning. Silver tilted his head at her as he approached, "What's up?"
Fast nudged the paper, "Homework for you."
Silver hopped up onto the bed beside Fast and began reading over the assignment, subconsciously rubbing alongside Fast. Besides being a ready snuggle target, she offered helpful advice when he hit rough parts of the classwork. He would earn his graduation, ambassadorial duties or not.
The next day, Luna sat beside Jake, "I have decided that you are worthy of a great honor."
Jake's eyes went wide, "Really? Am I going to be a knight?"
"Close," said Luna, "You will assist royalty, namely one Princess Twilight Sparkle."
"The Twilight?" asked Jake, getting excited.
"The one and only," agreed Luna with a smile, "She wishes to learn more of humans, their culture, and how they have entered Equestria. You will do your best to assist her while learning pony culture in Ponyville."
Jake clapped his hands together, "Great! That mean I get to meet the rest of the Mane Six?"
Luna nodded, "They are drawn to Twilight, so there is no way you can miss them. Do try to be polite. Twilight has enough trouble with her new abode. Also, I'm afraid I can't name you #1 assistant, as Spike, the dragon, already holds that honor."
Jake gave a dismissive wave, "Nah that's OK." He looked clearly distracted, envisioning meeting Twilight and the others. "When do I go?"
Luna extended a wing with a train ticket, "Now. Your train leaves in twenty minutes. Be prompt."
And so Jake was banished from Canterlot, with a big grin on his face.
Nah, Typos reproduce like parasprites. There are enough of them to spawn infestations in both places.
Bye Jake. May fate and fortune be with you. Considering season 5, Equality Town should be a fun place for him.
I think now would be a good time to say that our stories have officially parted and gone into different universes.
5756693 I was pretty sure that'd happen. We sailed as ships in the night.
5756683 I'm pretty sure we can do a quick search and find a few fics that describe what happens to him.
Well I hope we don't see Jake again. He was boring as hell.
5756725 He's off bothering some other fic. I do hope his brief entrance wasn't offensive.
there is no way that this will end well for Jake. At list until he stops his fangasum and understands that this universe dos not revolve around him and that he will hast to hurn his keep just like in the real, plus rules to follow. I think this could be interesting if Silver make some letter correspond with Jake to keep being apprise of his situation and could help mis adjust more easily and could. this could be funny as long as it keep at a distance from Silver, I am not rely interested that he contently plays damage control for the brat, this coup be use as en excuse to make a form of friendship report for him like Twilight and Celestia.
5756772 Goodness, the pure loathing directed at this character who didn't do anything but be a bit annoying for two chapters.
Maybe I should have gone with my first hunch of going with a female human just to mess with Silver's head as hard as I can.
me thinks jake should work for applejack. give the fat one labor
I'm relatively confident that you should capitalize both instances of "president," since he's referring to a specific person.
While "oggle" is a popular misspelling, the word is actually "ogle."
Put an "h" on that "yeah."
There's no real error here, but I'm surprised that someone who's that much of a brony would even think to ask to be made female, considering Trixie's comment about gender-changing magic being "impossible" in Magic Duel.
The guard "had" little sympathy.
The guard is "well-trained."
It does his "self-image" good to know that he's not a "battery-operated" toy.
She's never "witnessed" an alicorn birth.
5756872 All fixed! Are you also squarely in the death to Jake camp?
5756912 The short answer is "yes."
The long answer is that I'm having a hard time seeing what he brings to this fic. As a supporting character, he's meant to lend new dimension to the main character of the story, that being Silver. The problem is that he's a one-trick pony (pun intended) in that regard - his acting like a jerk doesn't seem to do much else besides throw Silver's actions into stark contrast, and as I said before, Silver shines brightly enough on his own.
The worse problem, however, is that that Jake tends to grab the spotlight. Partially, this is because of how he acts - he is, rather ironically, apparently convinced that he's the main character in his own story. That means that he makes everything all about him, and so when he's in a scene, it has to fight to make things not be about what Jake is doing and how everypony is reacting to that. In essence, he bends the metaphorical "arc" of this fic away from Silver and towards himself.
What's worse is that Jake has several narrative tropes on his side in this. Leaving aside the fact that his being there throws new light on the question of "how are humans coming to Equestria?" he also presents a new take on the "stranger in a strange land" plot for this fic. Until he gets settled in, he comes with plot-strings attached, in that his presence alone is enough to be an adventure - how many chapters did David have just getting acclimated to Equestria? Now it's like that, but for Jake...and we (or at least, I) prefer to see more of Silver instead. Even his attitude seems to imply a more immediate dynamic - we almost want to keep watching him be a jerk to everypony, if only for the schadenfreude when he finally gets slapped down. Beyond the immediateness of his rudeness, that seems to imply a "zero-to-hero" arc in his future, or at least a plot thread of watching him grow as a character.
In short, Jake seemed like an interloper in Silver's story. Now, that's not entirely fair - I suspect that you have the writing chops to dance around that particular bundle of issues - but insofar as what Jake immediately brought to the table, I couldn't see anything else.
5756959 Well.. I sort of just gave him a one way ticket out of the fic, only to appear in letters or other missives from Ponyville, which Silver has no reason to be at. What did you think of the chapter beyond his undesired presence?
5756981 Notwithstanding Jake, the majority of this chapter was Luna continuing to thaw towards Silver.
In that regard, I initially thought this was something of a large step forward for them, what with Silver telling her that he's not just her booty-call. All the more so for the fact that they then embraced and had a conversation. Upon reading the scene over again, however...I'm not sure how much progress was really made. Silver made an earnest entreaty to Luna, but I'm far less certain how much she responded to it. True, she smiled and embraced him back, but her part in the conversation was largely either her dispensing facts ("Yes, I'm the progenitor of the lunar pegasi") or being coquettish ("Does the thought of impregnating me turn you on?"). It's notable that Silver ended their last conversation by telling her flat-out that he loved her, whereas she's still stuck in "temptress mode."
Not that I'm complaining - conflict is the lifeblood of a story, after all, and romantic drama is fun!
5757006 Attempting to forge an equal relationship with somepony that knows all your buttons is a hard game to play. In Luna's defense, she did respect Night's wish and sent Silver off instead of continuing.
Minor issues - three days and a fair number of ponies may die without water.
Celine would have been the centre of attention at school - there needs to be some reason why she is not - for example others can't perceive her wings, or there is a 'ignore the Alicorn in the room' field over her.
5757034 Cadance did not cause traffic incidents in school, nor even much attention beyond two stallions liking her and her picking one over the other.
I vary good chapter and a interesting turn of events with Luna I am not sure she knew how to react to silver telling her no, at first that is as of now I think she has a deeper respect for him.
and jack going to stay with twilight do I see a story in the works at some point?
or just a open spot for some one else to pick it up.
Harts Fire
5757052 I'll probably not introduce another human again unless an actual person wants to shower me in adulations (and a few bits) and get themselves worked into the story.
Jake was quite annoying with fangasming, but hey, I guess it's not easy to switch from "lel pones hurses hawt iwtcird lolsorandum pankerpoi came in for the show stayed for the porn" to "they are actually living breathing beings, not my
barrelfreight car of fetishes".lol, i see someday in the future, twilight visiting Canterlot and complaining about her new human test subject X3
maybe Jake can be redeemed by super rainbow lasers, if not that maybe he'll stumble into the mirror and find it doesn't translate him into a EqG human, but a critter of some sort, that would amuse me somewhat, I imagine him as a lemur of some sort. but I never got the utter hate people throw around, he's just a nuisance, no reason to go all off with his head.
5757343 Heh, I can only be senselessly cruel to myself, hence why Silver gets the short end of the stick applied to his flank so often. He grows from it though. It builds character! Er, his character. Am I being literal or figurative at this point?
5757369 It's very true, and part of why Silver didn't flip out, just got uncomfortable. But he also... asked, and kept his mitts to himself around those he didn't ask or refused. Rough Draft was the first one to say 'yes', and much petting occurred.
I'm ambivalent on Luna. It's common enough that you see a Luna that is archaic and focused on her position over others... but she's very nearly childish in this fic. She cannot stand not getting her way, and it reflects very poorly on her, when most of her motivations are well-justified by canon (isolation, guilt, expectancy of a class society that has at least partially fallen apart.)
I didn't like Jake, he was annoying. Despite that, I suspect that if he was in the story at all he'd either continue to be an annoying one dimensional static parody, or the subject of just as much torment as Silver, and hit an emotional wall, and come out an actual reasonable person in the end. Unless Twilight Sparkle's exaggeratedness rubs off on him.
And I'd want him to come out a reasonable person, even if he annoyed me.
I also have far-too-specific ideas on how he'd be a typical MLP internet fan around Spike, either in the "Spike is swag dragon" or "Spike is a comedic prop" mode, and how that conflict would progress because Spike would be logically unhappy at this acerbic jerk being appointed as the new assistant to Twilight.
5757448 Put it in another light. Most of the time Luna gets childish, it is a defense. Silver threatens her, from trying to stand as her equal up to the very emotional and real fact that this jerk of a unicorn has the temerity to want to be in a loving relationship when he'll be dead and buried before long. This would be much easier to deal with, emotionally, if Silver didn't keep pushing past her barriers and trying to be intimate. Intimacy is hard. Intimacy is dangerous.
Hell, Silver's been burned pretty good by intimacy, why isn't he getting a hint?
away
drew
5771545 Fixed! I hope you're enjoying the trip.
Jake clapped his hands together, "Great! That mean I get to meet the rest of the Mane Six?"
Correction:Jake clapped his hands together, "Great!Does that mean I get to meet the rest of the Mane Six?"
Maaaan, dumping a raging brony on Twilight OCD Sparkle? You are evil.
6325434 What could go wrong?
6325582 noooo! don't tempt fate that way!
If he doesn't improve... I can see Twilight being quite mmm upset with Luna. Let the Chaos commence! /popcorn and sudden comfy chair
6575224 Surely he will learn his place.
Has anyone actually written up a story for Jake? Seeing him fumble his way through punishments as he makes an idiot of himself sounds hilarious.
7061656 I did make a one chapter one-shot with Jake, but that was after he calmed down. If someone wanted to do one when he first arrived, I'd be up for that.
I AM PREDICTING IT NOW!
HE SHALL RETURN AND HAVE MANNERS
YET LUNA WILL BE HESITANT TO CHANGE HIM!
YEAS!
I AM BEST FORTUNE TELLER!
Damn Luna, what did Twilight ever do to you?
Is every persons OC in this Equestria or just Silver's?
Ring ring, canon calling, wants to ruin everyone's fiction
7237022 Canon says 'We have never seen an alicorn born IN EQUESTRIA'. The book says they're not from Equestria.
OMG #GAMERLUNA
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I hope that my of will be there... I is alicorn
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I'm late here but technically the Crystal Empire isn't "Equestria" even though Cadence holds ties to Celestia and Luna.
Wow. That's super sexist (unless you ask a man-hating femenist)
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Warp her hot human so badly he ended up unicorn colted
As a side note, Jake is a human template, meaning if they'd waited a bit, Silver could have been human again.
she just lost her home and now they thrust 'once upon a zeppelin' upon her
i feel bad for twilight...