Stay tuned for the second chapter, and a little something that features Smartypants.

Hmmm. I want to see were this goes. I'm tracking it.

This was beautiful you loveable shipper you.

Sexual Tension.

6757896 I... I am looking forwards to seeing you do that, the first chapter was rather delicious though i must say.

O.O

Quite fascinating, always wondered what the pony version of kismesissitude looked like.

This concept entertains me to no end.

And also for the record this isn't me spread the wonders of Homestuck, just commenting on some similarities that i see.

Neat

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You win the entire internet

Stop whatever it is that you're doing and write more of this now.

This was hilarious. :3

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~Skeeter The Lurker

This was hot as fuck.
Also, thank you for actually having the ponies swear instead of using the word "buck". Christ that's been getting on my nerves a bit lately.

This was pretty damn hot. Thanks for the orgasm!

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I so very second that.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Have a fucking good day, sir.

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TwiDash wasn't and still isn't my thing, but I can see the appeal now that I have this story pretty much done. In fact, I may have discovered why Rainbow is shipped with others so much more frequently than the other cast. I don't have any other ship for them in the foreseeable future, but I'm going all out on this one while it lasts. Next chapter's currently standing at 8k and i expect it to reach at least 10k. Writing Fluttershy was more difficult than their dialogue together.

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Already have 8k in the bank. Don't worry, this is currently at the top of my priorities, just as soon as I make PIzor eat his words.

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I'll have a commentary up hopefully by tomorrow explaining a lot of what went into this story, and more specifically this chapter. Wanton angry sex fascinates me to no end. I believe I am the first to write it with them still as ponies and not human or anthro. A lot of things new things to take into account.

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To one and all, I write a clop for every Christmas. Good tidings, maybe some good strokings, but have good feelings. This is the season for crass commercialism, fishmen, and many other things, but for me it's about flipping my boss the bird and doing what I want. That, and crying that my iPod died not even four hours ago and won't wake up.

Goodnight, Sweet Prince.

Let angry sex between cartoon ponies teach you that friendship stands the test of time for some profound reason I haven't thought of just yet. Good tidings to all, and good night, my fans.

Goodnight.

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6759391 Was I supposed to have the melody of Fresh Prince of Bel air going in my head as I read that?

6762392 Ok just making sure i wasn't going crazy.

This is fucking hot. I love seeing Twilight act like a total bitch. The two of them could never be sweet and tender all the time.

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It's not healthy to keep all those issues bottled up. I imagine Dash to be the one to beat around the bush and just give ponies a general "fuck you" if someone pisses her off. Twilight feels like she'd be far more direct, but also much less likely to admit she's wrong. I like her being a little more bitchy than normal.

She still doesn't know how to swear properly.

6759553 Bill cipher! How are you doing? Would you like a biscuit? ( holds out a plate of biscuits.)

Fluttershy needs to broaden her definition of how good relationships should go. This definitely doesn't qualify, but it looks like she's over-idealized love and sex.

Interesting, but disturbing. I can get BDSM relationships and sadomasochism, but I never understood the eroticizing of... demeaning one another, of real humiliation and genuine insult. Probably the only reason I added this to a library was because of the proof that they still cared for each other in the gentler post-Twidom.

Although it looks like the problems between them are very real. Aside from the sheer, rather shocking harshness of the exchange between them, the angry friction has been carrying over into the outer world. Her fears about everyponies' friendships falling apart is understandable, though (but wrong... at least some of that anger, in hindsight, was faked, but too much wasn't). Hatesex happens, and won't destroy a relationship... but healthy love can't rely on it, nor be built upon it.

Not entirely sure what the problem prompting this argument was, but it looks like it was Dash's fault (probably deliberately, considering that this has been going on for a while).

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I was wondering when someone would bring this up.

The one thing I wanted out of Flutters was her own narrow definition of a... I don't want to say happy--stable seems to be the best word--relationship. The reason why she's causing fuss isn't solely because she doesn't like what she sees, as a part of her is clearly disgusted, but she simply doesn't know any better. Her language is that of someone clearly ignorant of the more common BDSM intricacies.

I researched BDSM as far as I could when making this story. I pre-selected their kinks, why they acted the way they did, and carefully crafted their dialogue for each situation. The point of demeaning partners varies widely and deserves something all on it's own, but for those that do practice it to some extent, the two questions that must be asked are why does it occur, and when does it stop? I write commentaries on everything I do. Here's part (unfinished as of this post) of it:

I heard a story once where a girl visited a local BDSM dungeon to—there is no way to step around this fact—recreate her rape. Yes, she had been raped, and wanted to reproduce the trauma. I don’t have too many specifics, but the others in the dungeon yelled at her, but the real kicker was that they mocked drowned her during the session as well.

I can understand that you may be feeling some level of disgust or incredulity, but here’s the real kicker. Throughout this terrible experience, she had a little red rattle in her hand. The rules were very clear beforehand that the experience was to continue as long as she held it. Should she drop it, for whatever the reason, the session is halted. When she dropped it, everything stopped. It was a powerful experience for her because, unlike her rape, she had the power to say no.

In that story, the physical act of being able to stop torment was strong to make the entire experience worthwhile. To her, and other stories I researched, having that control was akin to a religious experience. Again, the why is far more important.

I give a contextual hint in this chapter, but the full story isn't explained until the next chapter, but you can see, even if Fluttershy doesn't, that Dash and Twilight have clear boundaries they are obeying. This is of critical importance because the number one rule in BDSM circles is crystal clear communication; blind experimentation is how people get hurt. Google 50 Shades of Grey sex injuries and you'll see why. Even Flutters noticed some clues, even if she didn't recognize their meaning: Twilight didn't use her magic as much as she could have, Dash would win in a straight fight, and the mood suddenly shifts when the sex starts.

Notice at the end that their issues with each other evaporate once their attention focuses on Fluttershy? That Rainbow Dash bothered to put on a show rather than keep her intimacy away from Fluttershy? Why is that? Because their relationship with Fluttershy was more important than any beef with each other. She kept the sex going because it was part of the ritual, and Dash didn't mind being watched.

Thus is the price of reading a half finished story. No doubt there are others that have made the snap decision that the two hate each other through and through. I already have 8,000 words of the next chapter typed up, including the entire explanation for why this is occurring. The fact you're displaying similar shock signs of Fluttershy means I accomplished what I set out to do with this chapter. You'll be surprised why this is happening.

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WHY THANK YOU!
*takes your arm with the plate of cookies*

6771026 If I didn't read this comment, I probably wouldn't have this on my RIL shelf. This sounds like it will be interesting and I look forward to reading it

Well that was fun. Good portrayal of angry sex.
And its time for my favorite game "Out of Context"
Today's out of context line is:

Sardonic squeaking.

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I couldn't find a way to include the line "Racist squeaking". Believe me; I tried.

That was a great read, really great. Angry sex is hot

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I can see this as both Twi and Dash are in a secret relationship they are hiding from everypony, and that they are going though a book on kinks and fetishes. they just happen to be on the subjet of hate sex and fighting all the time, and the reason why they havnt gone to the other chapter is that they now have a way to express some negatives about their love in a way that it not as hurtful if they just said it out any other time that may make their love feel like they might be breaking up, and also that angry sex can be so much fun

Why does angry sex exist?

um...that was honestly pretty good

This was interesting. Very interesting indeed. No, I didn't masturbate to this. I wasn't even aroused. That's not to say it was bad, in fact, it was excellent. I found myself enthralled with this story in a manner that was not sexual... which is strange because I'm a bisexual with a high libido and a wide array of fetishes.