The heart of a Dragon

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A princess and a beast, what a match that has made. Years have passed since his precious flower has passed and now he's been building slowly with another. But now things have reached a turning point. See how things work out.

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Hillbe

Hillbe #1 · Mar 8th, 2015 · · ·

----> going too as well. <-----

Add a few words here and there to smooth it out...nicely done

dracone

dracone #2 · Mar 9th, 2015 · · ·

It was a peasant evening

I'm pretty sure you meant to say "It was a pleasant evening", it usually means something pretty bad for the writing when the first sentence has a typo. I found a few other errors, but this was the first. If I went through the whole story looking for errors I wouldn't be able to enjoy, so I'm just going to tell you that it would probably be a good a idea to practice some self-checking. A good self-checking method is coming back and reading a work a few hours later, I recommend you do a read through of the story and see what errors you can find. If you have any projects in the works try leaving the unfinished work along for a few minutes, it will actually help in noticing your errors. Also I recommend visiting groups dedicated to helping writers, and also going to visit sites that help with that sort of thing as well.

Jonot

Jonot #3 · Mar 27th, 2015 · · ·

5716525 We are all prone to mistakes. But thank you for ideas and suggestions. I never had a beta reader so I tend to miss some of the grammar and wording. But I intend to find one once I get the chance.

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