Fluttershy's son deals with many odd things on a daily basis. Such is the life of a teenaged colt living on the edge of the Everfree Forest.
However, as odd as Ponyville is, nothing is more odd than the events that surround the Elements of Harmony. Seeing as his mother is one of them, one must be certain to expect odd events occurring around the individual.
But when Fluttershy becomes "indisposed" for a day or two, can Choir Wings cover for his mother, without letting anypony know her secret?
Contains Flutterbat.
This story seems interesting.
Quick note, the story is completely in italics after this sentence:
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Fixed. Thanks.
Callin' it. If this isn't featured I'll cry. Have a like, follow, and a fave.
"Appalled."
This was different and actually pretty interesting.
~KBO.
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Fixed. Thanks!
It's got an interesting premise, but I'm not sure if heavy does of comedy are really necessary. More emphasis on the slice of life seems prudent.
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It's gonna be a hard contest. It's competing against other stories with at least a thousand views here.
Will we find out who the Daddy is? I see no other tags...
Well, this is a delightful concept. The catalyst for Fluttershy's relapse was an especially clever idea... assuming I'm not confusing cause and effect. And I loved Choir Wings's highly improbable moment of anxiety. Definitely looking forward to more, especially who Choir's father is.
I saw this: i.imgur.com/NlyqxId.png
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I KNOW!
Oh dear, Fluttershy's relapsed. This is truly an interesting idea. I think I'm following this now.
I'm on a Fluttershy binge, as I'm working on three stories that feature Fluttershy as a prominent role, so seeing this is truly a treat.
Now I just need to hide all of my apples and I'll be good.
This is great, but there's a noticeable lack of comedy
5723433 I bet you're grinning like a stupid motherfucker
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Great story with a great idea I applaud you mate
The entire genus of equines do not work that way.
In fact, unless Twilight got stuck at Canterlot High for long enough to suffer thirty moon-flows to use a horrible pun and have told everypony within earshot of 'the horror it really shouldn't be a word in the pony dictionary at all.
The closest mares have is 'estrus,' and it actually happens during spring/summer, so you might want to change that one word.
That way you get to keep that joke, and have it be biologically accurate!
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Darn. Completely forgot. Thank you for the suggestion.
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Fair enough. Glad to have helped.
So, we have the hero's friendly foil, the adorable sidekick, and the villagers awaiting news of the monster. Everything's shaping up for a truly epic quest. Or, at the very least, something that neither Fluttershy nor Choir will ever want to talk about again.
That has to be the longest title I've seen in a while.
Wait, a min, Choir Wing sounds like it's happened before...
Wow, you really done goofed Twilight
Other than that, please carry one.
I think that your mother is more than capable of destroying anything she wants, Choir Wings!
I thought I faved this thing when I originally read it. Guess not, well here you go!
lowercase second i.
Same with
also, who is who's kid?
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Noted. I'll fix all instances in the morning. Thanks. Had no idea that was the proper grammar to use.
And you'll find out who's who in due time.
Great chapter.
kid it would be better just to tell the truth
I've gone batty
Those brats lied to me
Spikey why is Fluttershy eating my apple shampoo?
cause she coulden't find any real poo?
Dude my apple cider's gone!
YOU ARE GOING TO FEED ME!
And so the search for Flutterbat continues...
Very good tale so far. Enjoying the character Choir Wings, hope to see more of his friends personality, too. Congrats again, and keep up the good work
Welp, Choir's dug his own grave. Nice knowing you, kid. Of course, if he confesses fast enough, he may survive. May. In them meantime, the town's apple supply certainly won't.
Choir, You done goofed in perfect foal folly stile.
And when Applejack makes up two plus two: "TWILIGHT!" "CHOIR!!"
Choir appears to have contracted a rather serious case of "Idiot Kid Syndrome".
Why is all the cider gone?
Wow, the ending of the chapter was intense. Anyhow, great chapter.
like likey
8/10
And this is why it's best to be honest with your friends. That way, they aren't surprised when your magically mutated mother pounces on them, an aura of black malevolence swirling around her like carrion flies as she exsanguinates a victim before their very eyes. That kind of thing can just wreck your whole day without proper warning.
This can only end with the death of countless fruit bats, and Applejack going "Dear Celestia, what have I done" once the truth is reveled.
Ok Choir, it is time to get a hold of the remaining Mane Six before some well meaning pony decides to go Van Helsing on your Mother.
...that "estrus" joke has been done so often at this point, it has become foreshadowing.
Big Macintosh: "The last time Fluttershy relapsed during the day was 11 months before Choir was born."
I can just imagine some of the things Choir and his father said on pervious relapses
Or something along those lines...
So, this still lives? Neat.
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Very neat-orino
Wow, I mean, wow.
Always good to see an unexpected update. The chapter itself does a good job of ramping up tension.
Huzzah life!
The bat binge continues! Or resumes, I don't know. The Bon Identity got me started on bats and now I'm here.
Funny how life works like that.