It is a retelling, with their perspectives, and it sets up thoughts and feelings of the characters. You don't have to like it, but I thought it necessary for the plot, and setting up the chapters to come.
As no doubt has been said before, the formatting needs a bit of work. I'm so used to paragraphs having a blank line between them that it threw me off, though I suppose it wasn't a major issue. The style and tone are also lacking flair to pull the reader in, but overall I thought this was okay, except for the second-to-last sentence at the end of the first segment suddenly turning to first person. Will continue reading.
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Nice! Hey could you make the next chapter one where Discord breaks free of his prison at the Canterlot Wedding due to the chaos?
This certainly puts a new perspective on things. I'd like to see where you take this!
Thank you everyone! I am working on the next chapter as we speak! <3
Well, it is just the retellin' of the episode. Way too long retelling as well. Hopefully it gets better... *on to ch 2*
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It is a retelling, with their perspectives, and it sets up thoughts and feelings of the characters. You don't have to like it, but I thought it necessary for the plot, and setting up the chapters to come.
It's...beautiful
A/N: Just did quick edits of RainbowDash to Rainbow Dash and AppleJack to Applejack.
Indentation at the start of each paragraph, you should try it
As no doubt has been said before, the formatting needs a bit of work. I'm so used to paragraphs having a blank line between them that it threw me off, though I suppose it wasn't a major issue. The style and tone are also lacking flair to pull the reader in, but overall I thought this was okay, except for the second-to-last sentence at the end of the first segment suddenly turning to first person. Will continue reading.
I'm watching because I'm curios.
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Ya know what? Yeah, I like the looks of this.
Let's read this Bitch!