I just injured myself punching a boulder

MLP pony hooves are weird. On the one hand we as authors try to never forget that they're basically made of a really thick version of what makes fingernails. They're keratin and not soft by any means. On the other hand, we like to imagine that they can be quite soft if the scene warrants it.

Just one of those fandom things.

not a mare going through perfectly normal heat phase!

Real horse heat doesn't quite work like it tends to amongst the MLP fandom...but I actually like the way the fandom handles it. Each author has their own reasons for why, of course, but for me it's because I'm a big sci-fi geek and I just find it fun to write about something humans don't really have a concept of but which for MLP ponies is just an everyday, often forgettable fact of life. The just-slightly-alien perspective is fun to write.

sweeping past a surprised and confused Pokey as she began taking her clothes off, floating the socks off her legs one by one, followed soon by the dress.

More hilariousness: for humans, this would be super awkward.

“What? I’m the only one who’s had that nightmare of the cacti hordes gaining sentience and seeking to take over the world?”

Thanks, Cheerilee, you just made me remember my least favorite level of Final Fantasy: Crystal Chronicles - the Killing Desert Of Killer Cacti That Killed You.

A spell that’d either suppress her heart,

Think you meant "heat" here. There's a few spelling mistakes here and there but this is the only one that really leaped out.

“If anypony might know a spell to help with this, it’d be Luna.”

Dear Trixie - No. That is to say, I in fact know several spells. One does not live forty thousand years without a goodly bit of experimentation in just about every field, and magic is no different. Having said that, no, I will not teach you a spell to make a copy of yourself willing to have sex with Raindrops. That will just end up leading to pain and tears down the road. Probably you will each learn a valuable lesson about yourselves in the process before the episode ends ambiguously. Well, that's not going to happen. You're going to actually deal with this problem. No shortcuts.

Junebug

Shutterburg, actually

Aw, I really feel for Trixie and RD here. You did a great job with getting the reader to empathize with both sides of their issue. Getting ready for the feels to come when they realize what the other was really going through all this time (possibly at the "climax" of the story? )

The only big problem i have with this story is that sex isn't involved, no actual mention of body parts or even vulgar words. It should be teen since its hinting. Otherwise it should contain roughly any of that so it could be a mature story

It's probably for the best that Equestria doesn't have the Internet, otherwise Raindrops and Trixie might both start looking up stuff online to try to find solutions to their current troubles.

No, the Great and Powerful Trixie does NOT want a bigger penis!

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But if she gives her bank account number to a prince in Neighrobi...

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MLP pony hooves are weird. On the one hand we as authors try to never forget that they're basically made of a really thick version of what makes fingernails. They're keratin and not soft by any means. On the other hand, we like to imagine that they can be quite soft if the scene warrants it.

Sort of comes with the nature of the cartoon, where physical traits aren't pinned down by the laws of physics and logic all the time. I like to think a pony's emotional state actually has a physical effect on their body's overall hardness, including the hooves.

Real horse heat doesn't quite work like it tends to amongst the MLP fandom...but I actually like the way the fandom handles it. Each author has their own reasons for why, of course, but for me it's because I'm a big sci-fi geek and I just find it fun to write about something humans don't really have a concept of but which for MLP ponies is just an everyday, often forgettable fact of life. The just-slightly-alien perspective is fun to write.

I admit I have no idea how a horse's actual estrus cycle works. I'm just working off of how it seemed to be for Trixie in your story, where it just overclocks the libido, cranking up sex drive to eleven.

Shutterburg, actually

Ah, got it fixed. Heh, its kind of unfortunate, but Raindrops' parents haven't shown up enough for me to really be able to remember names or appearances.

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A fair point, and all I can say is that I tagged this story as I have because I may well be getting more explicit with this the further the story goes. Its just a matter of covering my bases so I don't have to worry about changing the tags later.

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Or worse, she finds the piles of clopfiction that Lyra has written over the years.

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Thanks.

start to massage Trixie’s back, losing those delicate muscles underneath velvety fur
No thinking of those incredibly socks Trixie had
struck one of several boulders
I, you’re Dedicated and Dutiful Trixie
Trixie, its not that simple
Raindrops said sharply,flatly, and in a tone
I’ll see how i feel by then
not a mare going through perfectly normal heat phase
she was relatively young compared ot her friends
Raindrops hd been right
you see its that time
Maybe once a week would do he trick
The word slide like a hot arrow straight to her heart
gasping not just in pleasure but in relife
through she’d stopped reading it and mentally inserting herself and Trixie into the narrative

1. Start to massage Trixie’s back, loosening those delicate muscles underneath her velvety fur.
2. Incredible.
3. Struck one of the several boulders.
4. Your.
5. It's.
6. Forgot your spacing here.
7. Forgot to capitalise.
8. Not a mare going through a perfectly normal heat phase.
9. To.
10. Had.
11. It's.
12. The.
13. Slid.
14. Relief.
15. Though, Inserted.

And her mother never found those books because...? I assume it's either she knows but does nothing or she doesn't know because Raindrops just makes her own room and etc.

Hmm... If Trixie is disgusted by the word and act of sex, what does she think of Sexy? Arguably one thing can lead to another but still end up in Sex Base. Now that just sounded weird.

Kinda surprised about the titles some of Equestria's books have. Eldritch Knight? Makes me think of Chuthulu or something.

I suddenly wonder what would happen if Raindrops and Trixie got mindswapped? Both would be super out of their element. And Trixie might end up destroying Raindrops liver with her stress drinking. Probably. Moght be stopped by her own body inhabited by Raindrops though. Gahh, why do I go off on tangents?