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Two Moons Working Together

After Trixie and Twilight's battle with the amulet, Trixie has been trying to find a town who does not think shes a fraud. But one trip on a root later and she has found a pony who can help her.

Chapters (2)

An Unlikely Friendship · 12th Feb 2015 · 1,267 words
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Growth Spells and Catching Up With Old Friends · 1st Apr 2016 · 2,121 words
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Comment posted by RariDash deleted Feb 18th, 2015

Sweets82

Sweets82 #2 · Feb 18th, 2015 · · · An Unlikely Friendship ·

Nice story! Although I felt like it was a bit fast, you should do it a bit longer like 2,000 words.
~Azalea

RariDash

RariDash #3 · Feb 18th, 2015 · · · An Unlikely Friendship ·

Yes it was fast due to me writing it on my tablet instead of my computer. The second chapter will have hours dedicated to it. Although dont be expecting it soon as i need more time to plan it and balance my school work.

Sweets82

Sweets82 #4 · Feb 18th, 2015 · · · An Unlikely Friendship ·

5641754 I understand. No need to worry, your just like me
~Azalea

Cheer

Cheer #5 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · · An Unlikely Friendship ·

5641741 I have to agree here. Everything feels way too rushed and far too forced. There doesn't feel like there's anything natural in there meeting or anything.

Aside from the rush/force feel I would recommend double spacing things. Otherwise it feels like a wall of text

Comment posted by RariDash deleted Apr 1st, 2016

RariDash

RariDash #7 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · · Growth Spells and Catching Up With Old Friends ·

7083487 Yeah sorry.
The first chapters were really rushed due to a lot happening irl.
I'm working on that now though.
I may revamp the previous chapters over the summer when I have the most time.

RariDash

RariDash #8 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · · Growth Spells and Catching Up With Old Friends ·

Notice: The second chapter, "What Trixie Didn't Know" was deleted due to the fact that it made absolutely no sense after revamping the 1st chapter and because it was completely pointless to begin with.
More chapters will be coming soon.