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    • Ace Combat: The Equestrian War
      Based on Namco's Ace Combat series of video games. No fighters or missiles, personal close combat.

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    The Griffin Kingdom prepares an invasion on Equestria and when the Wonderbolts are incapacitated by two griffin aces, a group of pegasus ponies, assembled by Firefly, becomes the land's main aerial defense force, supporting each other in the hardest of times. It's a story of revenge, friendship, sadness, struggles and sacrifices, a war which will change the lives of many a pony and griffon...

    Status: COMPLETE.

    All that remains are corrections of a few grammar mistakes and walls of text, for which I apologize ^ ^"

    This is the first story of the mini-series "Ace Combat: Equestria Chronicles". The story takes place some time after the second season of the show.

    It is not a direct adaptation of any Ace Combat game, but it contains many references to the series, as well as to MLP: FiM itself.

    Links to GDocs versions can be found here:

    http://www.equestriaforums.com/index.php/topic,1874.0.html

    The "sad" parts occur every now and then, especially after chapter 9.

    All chapters in this fic, except for chapter 15, contain links leading to themes from Ace Combat series. It's used to create an atmosphere. Use "Open in new tab" to listen to these themes. Expect ponified AC characters to appear ;)

    A sequel will appear in the future :)

    First Published
    7th May 2012
    Last Modified
    27th Aug 2012

    Comments ( 179 )

    #1 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    Dude, Ace Combat 4 is my favorite game of all time. I'll read this when I get the chance!

    #2 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #3 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>554513 Seems based off Ace combat 5 Though

    #4 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>554626

    Yeah, I meant to add that I enjoyed the whole series, but AC4 was my favorite. Still going to read it!

    #5 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    good to see this here! read some of the gdocs version but couldn't get into it having never played Ace combat

    #6 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    Usually i'm not into Ace combat - MLP Crossovers, But this is surprisingly well written. (And I'm not sure if you are directly following the plot of Ace combat 5)

    #7 · Chapter 2 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Lemme guess, the ultimate solution is a nuke

    #8 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    Ahh, so many references so far. Liking this story, must wait and see what happens!

    #9 · Chapter 4 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    Dark pasts shalt soon be revaled. Can't wait.:yay:

    #10 · Chapter 5 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I have to point out, there are quite a few grammatical errors. It doesn't change the fact that this is an awesome story, it might to the grammar nazis (and I hate when the comments are nothing but grammar nazis). Do you have a proof-reader going over your stories? Just saying, others find more mistakes than the writers (especaily grammar nazis, damn grammar nazis spamming the comments section with obnoxious grammar error corrects. (Damnit, now i'm ranting) I don't like grammar nazis)

    #11 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>555369 Nope. Ace combat law dictates nukes are taboo. A weapon of mass destruction has to be cool (Giant cannons, big lasers etc.) and hard to destroy, but there must only be 1 or 2.

    Remember:

    Nukes = bad

    War every 3 years = good

    #12 · Chapter 6 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>556991

    Yes but i do remember, something about a nuclear missle launching satalite that was also flying straight into a highly poulated area that was about to get destroyed. Maybe its just my imagination :trollestia:

    #13 · Chapter 5 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>555850

    I don't like grammar nazis either, but I can't help making some mistakes. English is only my second language ^ ^"

    Still, I'm glad to hear you think the story's cool.

    #14 · Chapter 8 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    There better not be a "coming home" chapter. I'm going to say it now. There better NOT. BE. A "COMING HOME" chapter.

    #15 · Chapter 10 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You know, 10 chapters in and i see no refrence to gilda. I mean she has to be mention evntually!

    #16 · Chapter 11 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Now that i read this chapter, perhaps i spoke to soon last time :twilightoops:

    I had a feeling Gilda would be the "Cpt. Hamilton" of this story

    #17 · Chapter 11 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>561454

    Not exactly Capt. Hamilton, but a different pilot from a different game...

    #18 · Chapter 12 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Wait... I've seen you from Youtube before. You were commenting on how you were gonna make a MLP fanfic crossover with Ace Combat and its true.

    #19 · Chapter 12 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Youtube account: SonicTheHedgehog17??:trixieshiftright:

    #20 · Chapter 12 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>562868

    Yes, that would be me. :twilightsheepish:

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YES YES YES YES YES YES EYS YES SEYE YES YES YES!

    I DONT CARE THAT THAT'S PURE GIBBERISH. Someone crossed over my favorite show with my favorite series of all time in my favorite world of Strangereal!

    I have to say, although the wording for the intro is a bit weird, I like it. Waldreich Mountains did me in, methinks. :)

    Can't wait to read more!

    #22 · Chapter 13 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well, im glad Mobius isn't going to be a "pop-in-and-out-whenever-he-damn-well-pleases" character anymore

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 54w, 20h ago · · ·
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    >>569612

    Thanks for kind words, though the story happens in Equestria, not Strangereal.

    But you'll see some ponified AC characters in future chapters ;)

    #24 · Chapter 14 · 54w, 10h ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp: Oh shit... we got problems!

    #25 · Chapter 14 · 54w, 3h ago · · ·
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    LA LA LA LA! Listen to our beautiful voice! This is AWACS Oka Nieba. That would mean "Sky Eye" in your language. I have a message from your boss, I'll patch it in.

    Ace Combat 5 ftw :ajsmug:

    #26 · Chapter 14 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>575791

    I've actually made a full reference to AC 04 in there... but I suppose AC5 could work, too :twilightsheepish:

    #27 · Chapter 6 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>555194

    The fic has numerous references to the series, but is not based on any game.

    #28 · Chapter 15 · 53w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    Damn you and your cliff hangers! That is the worst possible way to leave us on a cliffhanger.

    #29 · Chapter 15 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>579546

    Sorry, but otherwise the story would've been too predictable :pinkiecrazy:

    And no condolences for the poor ponies? I've actually suffered a mild depression while writing this chapter...

    #30 · Chapter 15 · 53w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>581178

    Well to be honest, i dont like posting comments with 19 emotes of rarity crying, but i felt pain.

    Manly tears, they were shed

    #31 · Chapter 16 · 53w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Cue the epic music

    #32 · Chapter 16 · 53w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You need to play "The Unsung War" somewhere in here, like the final battle or something.

    #33 · Chapter 16 · 53w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>586395

    Just wait for chapter 17 and you'll get one :raritywink:

    #34 · Chapter 16 · 53w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>588361

    I have plans to put it somewhere (with a link to a PMV I've made before I've begun writing this fic) :twilightsheepish:

    #35 · Chapter 17 · 53w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Faving and reading this later...and it's probably already been mentioned, but if this referencing The Unsung War....do we get a Razgriz mention in this? :rainbowdetermined2:

    #36 · Chapter 17 · 53w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>595859

    Razgriz is partially mentioned in the opening lines to the chapter... and there will be a reference to them in any of the last three chapters.

    If this fic will be successful, I might condier writing a sequel :twilightsmile:

    #37 · Chapter 17 · 53w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>595905  Sweet! *makes time to read this*

    :pinkiehappy:

    #38 · Chapter 17 · 53w, 2d ago · · ·
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    ATTENTION CITIZENS OF GRYPHUS!!!!

    A RING OF STEEL SURROUNDS YOUR ROTTEN CITY

    WE WILL CRUSH ALL WHO RESIST THE WILL OF THE EAF

    ABANDON YOUR POSTS

    ABANDON YOUR HOMES

    ABANDON, ALL, HOPE.

    URAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    oh wait, wrong game:facehoof:

    #39 · Chapter 6 · 53w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>576839

    You call it Ice Cage...but you don't play the song that goes along with it...or any of the briefing music...:pinkiesad2::fluttercry:

    Good story, but that little quirk irritates me.  :unsuresweetie:

    Silver out!

    #40 · Chapter 1 · 53w, 1d ago · 1 · 1 ·
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    >>572349

    Chopper better be in this! :trixieshiftright:

    :twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #41 · Chapter 1 · 52w, 5d ago · · ·
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    "Hyper Drive"'s in my head whenever I think about this fic.

    Wha's Hyper Drive, you may ask? It's the English opening song for Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's.

    #42 · Chapter 3 · 52w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I seriously hoped you'd correct some spelling errors. For one, one of the lines had too many commas. Two, many of the words' tenses were wrong. I am disappoint.

    #43 · Chapter 3 · 52w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>615626

    Forgive me, English isn't my first language. ^ ^"

    #44 · Chapter 17 · 52w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >> PolishValsion

    Something's telling me that if the Razgriz are going to appear, that might not end well for the royal sisters. :twilightoops:

    #45 · Chapter 17 · 52w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>627030

    You'll just have to wait and see :unsuresweetie:

    #46 · Chapter 17 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>627205

    Do you know where is polish version of this? because I found only 8 chapters on FGE.


    Ps. z nicku wnioskuje że z polski jesteś. zgadłem? to ty to piszesz czy tłumaczysz. czy jeszcze inaczej to wygląda? bo ja już nie rozumiem.

    #47 · Chapter 17 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>648693

    Yes, I'm both the creator and translator.

    There are currently 8 chapters translated into Polish language. I'll start translating chapter 9 after the 8th one will appear on the blog :pinkiehappy:

    #48 · Chapter 17 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>649107

    what blog? you crate this in English and then translate into polish? sorry for my asking but I am so confused:derpyderp1:. from where you are?

    #49 · Chapter 17 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>649275

    Blog = For Glorious Equestria

    Yes, I'm from Poland. First I write in English, then translate to Polish

    (I tak, jestem z Polski. Najpierw piszę po angielsku a potem tłumaczę na polski.)

    #50 · Chapter 1 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Finally getting around to reading this!!

    :pinkiehappy:

    Also found this.... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8dCmaFJPfJw

    So awesome!

    #51 · Chapter 2 · 51w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    Hrm, it's moving kinda fast, but I'm liking the premise...and Firefly returning is just badass :rainbowdetermined2:

    Onwards!

    #52 · Chapter 18 · 51w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    Wow now thats a way to end a chapter! Can't wait for the final battle!

    I'm also quiet happy that my little prediction about Razgriz and the royal sisters was wrong. You see I did some research a while back about Celestia and Luna and it turned out that, as far as I know, they were inspired by the mounts of the norse gods Dagr (Day) and Nótt (Night), respectively known as Skinfaxi and Hrímfaxi.

    #53 · Chapter 18 · 51w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>652945

    I know what you're trying to say... those submarines from AC5, right?

    #54 · Chapter 6 · 51w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>603033

    Fixed, Ice Cage BGM was now added :twilightsmile:

    #55 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Edge and Kid are now in this eh? Where the hell is Chopper!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage:

    Aw well, good story anyways! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #56 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I like how this correlates to the mission where Wardog is looking for Nagase. Was that mission what this chapter is based off of? :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #57 · Chapter 6 · 51w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>658842

    Excellent! Much better! :twilightsmile::yay:

    I like how Ice Cage fits perfectly into this chapter and also how you do this:

    "It takes courage to venture into enemy territory

    But doing so without help spells certain doom.

    When a friend is captured, a rescue is enacted.

    Those who are loyal never abandon others in need."

    at the beginning of each chapter. Really sets the Ace Combat tone to it. :pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #58 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 20h ago · · ·
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    >>670729

    Partially, but I wanted to have a fight in a snowy scenery, considering the time of year :raritywink:

    #59 · Chapter 7 · 51w, 7h ago · · ·
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    Hmm...Mobius is a mystery...:duck:

    Silver out!

    #60 · Chapter 8 · 51w, 7h ago · · ·
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    Into The Dusk was a good song to use for the emotional story that Firefly told.

    I love how epic and emotional you make your story. However, it would do good to put a little more description into the actual fighting. Also, I'm wondering why Mobius is here...or where he's from.

    I know English isn't your first language but the grammar is a little quirky. Don't get me wrong, this story is awesome and beautiful at the same time, but seriously man...

    Can I preread for you? You're worth my time. :twilightsmile:

    Maybe you should write a prequel explaining his story and maybe how he ended up in Equestria if you don't explain it here.

    Also, this line struck my heart:

    “Don’t worry about me. We’ll return... and we’ll take back our shattered skies." :fluttercry::pinkiesad2:

    Silver out!

    #61 · Chapter 9 · 51w, 7h ago · · ·
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       “One eye is there to watch over my daughter and see her grow. The other is to protect Equestria from danger and ensure that Dinky can live in it. That’s my resolve.”

    Almost made me cry. :pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2::fluttercry::fluttercry:

    Poetic much Derpy?

    Also, that is a good morale boosting song.

    Silver out!

    #62 · Chapter 3 · 51w, 3h ago · · ·
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    So a bit of character building for Firefly... IDK this seems great but the non-action sequences seem a bit clipped and the action sequences seem a bit brief as well. You could use a lot more detail I know, though to be honest It does make perfect sense if this isn't your first language.

    #63 · Chapter 8 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>677479

    Your help will be most appreciated, comrade :twilightsmile:

    And thank you for kind words.

    #64 · Chapter 10 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Very good chapter here. Did one of the pony squadrons lose somebody in the battle?

    AHHH! :raritydespair::raritydespair:

    That song! How dare you!

    That beautiful song was played in the mission where Chopper died! UGGHH!! Too painful! :twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

    Anyways, this is great. The superweapon is gone now and Mobius seems to be of good support. Although, they still have Black Star and his squadrons to worry about. :unsuresweetie:

    It's good that Fluttershy got over killing Razor. The psychological effects could have been devastating.

    This story is gripping and is packing with great writing skills and a story that is interesting.

    Good work once again! :twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #65 · Chapter 11 · 50w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    That was a good song and a good chapter. :pinkiehappy:

    I can't believe Rainbow fell for that though, it was such an easy trick to see through. :facehoof::facehoof:

    Medley will probably be out of the mix for a while.

    Dash's scream at the end there did make me feel sorry for her though. :pinkiesad2:

    Hopefully she can recover quickly. :unsuresweetie:

    Much worse?

    That can't be good! :twilightoops:

    Good chapter man! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #66 · Chapter 12 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Wow, I could have sworn Rainbow would have attempted suicide by the way she was acting and thinking. :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

    Anyways, this seems like an important strategic battle. :twilightsmile:

    Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #67 · Chapter 13 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I'm glad Mobius and those other 2 were able to help. And they talk! Yes! :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiegasp::yay:

    “Scythe... you can rest alongside your comrades, now.”

    A sweet line, and it shows respect for the enemy. :twilightsmile:

    Good, looks like the battle is won. Is it time for an Equestrian counterstrike yet? Maybe, they should give the Griffins a taste of their own medicine and tample on their homeland. :twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

    Silver out!

    #68 · Chapter 14 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Good chapter! Cloudsdale is back! ...But we're losing Canterlot! AHHHH!!!! :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

    Keep it up! :twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #69 · Chapter 12 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>682288

    If you were tricked by someone you considered a good friend and that person additionally tried to kill one of your new friends, wouldn't you be devastated? And considering Rainbow represents Loyalty... the hurt has been doubled (such a bad pun :unsuresweetie:)

    #70 · Chapter 18 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>684128

    I understand that, but she still should have listened to Medley.

    Oh well, what can you do? :twilightblush:

    I'm gonna read chapter 15 now! :pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #71 · Chapter 15 · 50w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    Jesus dude...

    So much death and sadness in this one.

    Dammit, I liked Blueberry!

    Carrot's down, and now Shamrock is pouring out his soul too? Holy shit man, it's no wonder that even Mobius showed emotion here. :pinkiegasp:

    This chapter is probably one of the saddest ones, and that's saying something, because the entire story has been a tear-jerker and a heart-twister. :pinkiesad2:

    You write emotions and dialouge really well. :twilightsmile:

    Shit man! Everypony is either getting dropped left and right or they're breaking down. That's understandable though, ponies not used to war having to deal with this bullshit? Understandable. :fluttercry:

    Maybe things are still salvageable...although I'm concerned about the griffins...they're too quiet right now...are they planning yet another offensive?

    I mean Canterlot was their third time they tried to push! They gotta be running out of steam! :twilightangry2:

    Poor Blueberry got mutilated...she was an awesome minor character...you're tempting me to make the Griffins victims of genocide in my crossover! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

    Rolling along! :twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #72 · Chapter 15 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>685555

    Well, now you know what happens when depression helps you write.

    Besides, a dramatic bomb of a sort was needed.

    But yeah... I kinda got misty-eyed when writing about Carrot's death... :raritycry:

    #73 · Chapter 16 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Good chapter, I wonder what happened to Edge? :rainbowhuh:

    Also, Firefly better get ready for the fight with Black Star. :pinkiegasp:

    Who the hell is Phalanx?! I don't remember that guy! :twilightangry2::flutterrage:

    Maybe there'll be a rebellion in the Griffin Kingdom once the Griffin populace learns the truth...:rainbowderp:

    Silver out!

    #74 · Chapter 16 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>685728

    Phalanx is the leader of the Royal Guards, he was mentioned in chapter 2 by Luna.

    #75 · Chapter 18 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>685727

    Same with me when I read it dude...:fluttercry:

    Silver out!

    #76 · Chapter 18 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>685729

    Oh ok, that makes sense! Good Guard name too! :pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #77 · Chapter 17 · 50w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    Having basked in the moonlit glow,

    And empowered by the rising sun,

    With friends by their side, the heroines take flight.

    Behold Mirage, their wings ablaze in majestic light!

    Reminds of the AC5 ones about the Razgriz. :twilightsmile:

    Continuing to read the chapter now! :twilightsheepish:

    ...Canterlot is back and Equestria is appearing to be recaptured. Good, and vengeance was served here for Blueberry and Carrot Top. Night Raven was an insane prick, killing for fun and even when Fluttershy kills him, he's like: "Ugh... good... kill... Well fought.....” Well the bastard deserved it. :rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile:

    A really good chapter man! Your good at capturing the essence of everything and the world-building is well done also. Your writing allows me to visualize the fighting well. And also the further I get into your story, the less grammar mistakes I find. Describing the action is another thing you improved on.

    I commend you!

    Good Job! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    Silver out!

    #78 · Chapter 17 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>686039

    I believe there is a proper term for Night Raven's actions... Blood Knight.

    The fact he congratulated Fluttershy after the fight was due to fact he met his match in a sort of "rude awakening".

    "The Liberation of Gracemeria" helped during the first part, all the way until Fluttershy-Night Raven fight, I believe :rainbowdetermined2:

    There's also a small shout-out to Ace Combat 2, have you noticed it?

    And thank you for kind words again. I'm kind of flattered. :twilightblush:

    #79 · Chapter 18 · 50w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    Well, I see the Razgriz were mentioned. Also, I can't wait for the final battle.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3BLVs8yygbg

    Gale should have briefed them like this. This briefing is actually similar to The Valley of Kings because of the large number of forces fighting. :pinkiehappy:

    Well, this is how it's gonna end. Good thing Mirage has a lot of support...they'll need it.

    Damn...Mirage is such a freakin' cool squadron name! :rainbowlaugh:

    Silver out!

    #80 · Chapter 19 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Okaaaaaaaaaaay. Time to kill Gilda. Kill her to death!!!

    #81 · Chapter 19 · 48w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    I almost fell out of my chair when I saw the update, and then 11k words! :derpyderp2: :rainbowderp:

    Also by the insanely high amount of ACX quotes I assume you liked every minute of that game.

    Now lets head for the final, one last battle of two former Friends. There is only one sentence to fit this:

    "Yo, buddy... still alive?"

    :flutterrage:

    PS: Assuming that you haven't done it yet, I wish you all the worlds luck for completting "End of Deception II" and "OP X" on ACE.

    #82 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    "ultimate solution"

    That is forboding as fuck. The last time someone enacted an ultimate solution, a few million people died.

    #83 · Chapter 19 · 48w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    ‘burst missile’

    So it's a fortress version of the Scinfaxi huh?

    Tunnel? Why in every Ace Combat do you have to fly INTO something?

    Also, tunnel= AC5 :pinkiehappy:

    “No matter! I’m not through yet! You’re going to fly straight into your deaths!”

    -Hamilton, AC5 :pinkiehappy:

    “Well, he’s always been pretty serious, heh."

    Bartlett, AC5 :pinkiehappy:

        “But... you know, now that I think about it... I can’t help, but feel sorry for the griffin soldiers. They were fighting for the wrong cause... failed to see they were nothing, but unwitting pawns in Red Cyclone’s malicious game...”

    End of AC X, Eugene talking to Southern Cross :pinkiehappy:

    "Initially frozen, all those in the air and on the ground slowly started cheering louder and louder until they all finally bursted into an explosive delight. Griffins and ponies alike were roaring with joy, but none of them were cheering as loud as the pegasi from the Mirage squadron and Rainbow’s best friends.

            “Rainbow! You’re the best!”, Medley screamed.

    “Way to go, Rainbow! Firefly!”, Cloud Kicker made an air flip from exhilaration.

    “Wow! That was just...I can’t even describe it!”, Lightning Bolt was nearly speechless.

    “Rainbow! She did it! WOOO!”, Fluttershy and Derpy were dancing together.

    “That was beyond awesome! You rock, Dashie!”, Pinkie Pie yelled at the top of her lungs.

    “YEEHAAW! Way to go, sugarcube!”, Applejack cheered.

    “That’s going out in style!”, Rarity commented.

    “Alright, Rainbow Dash! Great job!”, Twilight kept jumping in place.

    Other pegasi, unicorns and earth ponies were either clapping their hooves, giving each others high-wings or stomping the ground. Even the griffins started applauding for the two ponies. Firefly and Rainbow Dash heard everything while floating in the air, panting from the great exertion they’ve just went under. But the looks on their faces were that of delight as well."

    I cheered with them. :twilightsmile::yay:

    This story really gets you into it, just like a real Ace Combat game. Congratulations! :yay::yay:

        “Negative... but something tells me it’s not friendly... and it’s heading toward Rainbow and Firefly”, Sky Eye turned his attention to both mares. “Warning! Unknown contact approaching at high speed! Break! Break!”

    Rainbow Dash was surprised to hear the call. But Firefly was vigilant. Without a second thought, she pushed the blue pegasus away.

            “WATCH OUT, RAINBOW DASH...!”

    Barely a split second later, Firefly was struck by the unknown attacker. She squeaked “Oh...”, almost like it surprised her and started falling down, unable to regain altitude...

            “FIREFLYYY!!!”

    Rainbow’s ear-splitting scream ripped through the sky. Everyone noticed what has happened, but the shock was too severe for anyone to move and prevent the pegasus’ fall. Firefly crashed onto a nearby peak, hitting it with her right wing before tumbling down. She lied motionlessly on the ground.

    Gale and Sky Eye tried to figure out who was responsible for the attack, but it happened too fast for them to register anything that would help identify the assailant.

    Who could have been fast enough to deal such a powerful, almost invisible blow... to knock Firefly down with just

    a single hit...? The increasing panic did not allowed Rainbow to gather her thoughts.

            “Firefly... no... Please, don’t be dead... Don’t be dead... If she’s dead, it’s my fault...”

    Firefly, please DON'T share Chopper's fate! It was painful enough the first time! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

    This is probably the best chapter you've written yet. It's such an underrated story. It's well written, the emotional aspect is one the best I've seen recently and I've seen a lot. I applaud you! All I want left is a little closure now. :twilightsmile::fluttershysad::twilightsmile:

    :heart::heart:

    Silver out!

    #84 · Chapter 19 · 48w, 15h ago · · ·
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    >>782354

    Oh come on, man... you're making me blush. :twilightblush:

    But thank you for kind words.

    Also, notice how the whole Fortress is a mix of various superweapons:

    - based on Fortress Intolerance from AC2

    - has three power generators, similar to Megalith (AC04)

    - the anti-air defense of Chandelier (AC6)

    - burst missiles and tunnel flight (AC5)

    I can only hope you'll like the final duel just as much. :rainbowdetermined2:

    #85 · Chapter 20 · 45w, 4d ago · 1 · ·
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    A cliffhanger huh?

    “Those who survive a long time on the battlefield start to think they’re invincible. I bet you do, too, Dash”,

    "you not feel this bond between us? You and I are opposite sides of the same coin. We are naturally born warriors.”

    AC ZERO for both of those!

    Great fight! That's how you end a war right there! :pinkiehappy:

    Will there be an Epilogue? :twilightsmile:

    Silver out!

    #86 · Chapter 20 · 45w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>877769

    Of course there will be, within a month or so :twilightblush:

    #87 · Chapter 20 · 45w, 3d ago · 1 · ·
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    At least Firefly fared better than PJ :fluttershysad:

    Excelent job combining stuff from AC games with your story!

    #88 · Chapter 20 · 44w, 1d ago · · ·
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    not really Lunar vs solar story but meh... it's well written so I'll let it stay in the group.

    #89 · Chapter 11 · 43w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>562659 it has to be pixy!

    #90 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well, this is nice. I sort of still feel bad for Derpy's losses but she seems to have gotten her life back on track.

    #91 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    *slow claps*

    You sir, did an amazing job. This story.... I can't even describe how I feel about It. An unforgettable ride full of ups and lows between joy and sorrow.

    I the name of all Austrian Bronies and Ace Combat Fliers I salute you!

    *salute*

    PS: During the scene at the cemetery I had this as background music. Although its not AC it fitted the scenery so well that it truly broke my hart. I was crying my eyes out for around 10 Minutes before I could read on.

    #92 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1011485

    Thank you for nice words.

    It's possible a sequel may come up in later part of the year. :rainbowdetermined2:

    #93 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1011502

    Awesome, I shall wait patiently an keep an eye on my notifications.

    #94 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Your final chapter... Almost feels kinda sad, huh?

    #95 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1011564

    But I am happy that it ends with a hopeful note. :ajsmug:

    #96 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Great story, great writing.

    could use some work on grammar & English stuff.

    A sequel would be well received and read by me.

    #97 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 19h ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1012409

    Yup. Just in case you didn't catch it, that was a reference to AC5 before you take off to destroy the SOLG. The air traffic controller tells you, "Your final sortie... Almost feels kinda sad, huh?" But yeah, great story from start to finish. And like vipershark0 said, if you decide to make a sequel, I will read it for sure.

    #98 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 13h ago · · ·
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    >>1016608

    Ah, I see. Clever.

    If Silverstein will aid me in pre-read, I'll be sure to edit the parts with any mistakes.

    Thanks for the support. *salute*

    #99 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 9h ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1018110

    I'll get on that. Sorry I've been slacking. I've been working on my own projects and the Air Force has been pounding me with training assignments. :twilightoops:

    ...Pure beauty, every scene, every line.

    The cemetery scene was very sad, but I was glad that Blueberry was given a memorial. The concert was very impressive, did you write all those songs? I saw the linking PMV and watched it with that scene, excellent work!

    But MY GOD!!! Nothing tops the 'Journey Home' scene where Firefly, after all this time, finally ends her JOURNEY and goes HOME. It's profound how her life story fits that song perfectly. I wonder if you were planning that the whole time.

    This ending is just filled with so much happiness and emotion, compared to the depression and emotion of the rest of the story. It just gives you that reassuring feeling that their struggles are finally over.

    THIS is how you write an epilogue!!

    I've seen so many great stories ruined by a crappy epilogue but you sir, decided to make it just as epic as the rest of your story!!

    I mean, closure, remembrance of all those lost comrades, Rainbow fulfilling her dream, SELF-WRITTEN SONGS, Firefly's 'Journey Home', plot-holes non-existent, Griffons making peace, Firefly's parents finally able to give her face-time, and everything about this story just comes full-circle and happiness is restored.

    All that's missing is the explanation of what happened to Edge.

    In the possible sequel maybe?

    I AM PISSED that this story doesn't have more views!

    It certainly deserves them!

    Let it be known that I'm going to refer this story to my friends and whoever else will listen to me.

    You can write. Yes, I'll get to work and polish out the grammar and you just focus on...whatever it is you do to craft masterpieces like this!

    I am pissed beyond comprehension that mainstream writers just make balls of crap and they get like 500 likes in an hour and a work of art like this gets totally ignored. Just goes to show you, just like the AC games that have a select number of dedicated fans and not a lot of the population gets to experience it, your story is no different.

    I bet everybody here that read the story the entire way through was touched or emotional conflicted in one way or another. Yes, it's THAT good.

    Your making me scared to write my own AC crossover, I don't think I can measure up...at least not with my current capabilities.

    Between you and Brotato (If you don't know who he is, he wrote an AC crossover too, except he included jets but I'd say he's a close second to you) you guys totally blew me away!  

    Oh and one more thing...

    I'd like to present you with this:

    "My friend, you are the ONLY writer on this site that has EVER finished his AC crossover!

    Congratulations!" :twilightsmile:


    ^^^^^^^^^^The pegasi fastened her eyes on Firefly. She grinned. They smiled as well. It could mean only one thing.

            “I’m staying. This is my home, after all. I may not have found a place here yet... but I’ll find it eventually.”

    But Rainbow Dash put her hooves on Firefly’s shoulders, giving her a most sincere smile.

            “Why don’t you live with me? My house is big enough for the two of us.”

    Firefly’s expression was that of utter disbelief.

    “Besides, you can help me as a weather patrol pony. We’d had twice less work to finish together. And...”

    Rainbow suddenly hugged Firefly. She still appeared to be stunned by Rainbow’s words.

            “Y’know... back when you helped me against the Talon squadron... I had a feeling that we share a lot of things in common.”

    Lightning Bolt looked at the two ponies.

            “It’s true. You’re both brave, fast, confident... somewhat reckless”, she finished, giggling.

            “Hey... now that you’ve mentioned it... They even look similar! Like twins!”, Derpy exclaimed, when her crossed eyes rested on Rainbow and Firefly.

            “Except for the fact Rainbow is more colorful”, Medley chuckled.

    Rainbow looked into Firefly’s eyes.

            “Firefly... It may seem kind of awkward to you, but... I grew attached to you. You’re like... like an older sister I never had! It would be awesome if would decide to-”

            “Not another word!”, Firefly said loudly, interrupting Rainbow’s sentence.

    The two stared briefly at each other. Firefly lowered her sight for a second. When she looked at Rainbow again, the pink pegasus could feel her eyes were watering.

            “... Yes.”

    Rainbow seemed positively surprised. But Firefly smiled at her through tears.

            “I want to stay with you, Rainbow Dash!”

    The two pegasi embraced. Their friends watched the scene with expressions of genuine happiness.

            “Now I know what my dad was trying to tell me...” Firefly said in a low voice. “You and I, Rainbow... You are my family. You all are. My friends are my family... Now I understand. I’ve been running away from this the whole time. But no more. Rainbow Dash... I would be very happy to be your twin sister.”^^^^^^^^^^

    This scene and...

      ^^^^^^^^^^^“You said this was the best day of your life... I think I can say the same. I never felt so happy before... Thank you, Rainbow. Thank you for everything.”

            “Hey, that’s what friends... and sisters are for, right?”, Dash said, baring her teeth in joy.

    “Yeah... you’re right... Good night, Rainbow Dash.”

            “Good night, Firefly.”

    As the two pegasi drifted to sleep, the sun slowly rose on the horizon.

            “Mom... Dad... I’m home. I’m finally home. My journey is finished. And I am not alone”, Firefly thought as she slowly fell asleep beside the pony she would now call her sister.

    The sun shined brightly on the Equestrian sky, giving a start for a brand new day.^^^^^^^^^^

    This one, nearly ripped my heart in half.

    Especially:   “Mom... Dad... I’m home. I’m finally home. My journey is finished. And I am not alone”

    This line ALMOST made me cry. And that's big because I have NEVER cried for a fic before! Came close a few times but never! This fic had actually made me shed a few tears (here and when Blueberry and Carrot Top died) and for that, I thank you for writing this.

    I wish there was more I could say, but as usual, I am at a loss for words.

    You've done it friend, mission accomplished. :pinkiesmile:

    Silver out!

    #100 · Chapter 21 · 42w, 2h ago · · ·
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    >>1019835

    Wow... thanks for so much praise. I don't know if I deserve it :twilightblush:

    And yes, I had the epilogue planned for a while. Though the songs are actually based on the following titles:

    - "When We Stand Together" - Nickelback

    - "The Wind of Hope" - Andru Donals & Eugenia Vlaslova

    - "Take My Breath Away" - Berlin

    - "The Unsung War" - Ace Combat 5

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