A mysterious stallion appears out of nowhere, he laid there battered and beaten upon being found by the Main 6, who was this stallion, how was he still alive even with all these wounds, how will he affect the events that are yet to come.
5596988 Depends on what you mean, I made my OC a few years back by basing him off different generic things in media, unnecessarily large sword, long hair, oblivious to certain things. Just separate traits from different things i guess, other than that not much of a reference unless you can explain what you meant.
5597401 It's always nice to see people like you on this site, I'll give you a heads up or just keep in check should be up tomorrow if i get enough sleep.
I am working on the third chapter right now, the reason its taking so long is cause im also working on art for it. So I won't be much longer cause its just a single picture.
I'm sorry that the next chapter isn't out, but I've had a long day, arguing with ten people at once takes a lot out of you, I'm gonna go to bed and when i wake up whenever whether it be at 5 or 10, I'll continue working on the chapter, again I'm sorry
To answer you authors note since no one else has replied I think he should be paired with Princess Luna and or Princess Celestia. The reason I say this is because it is obvious that he is different from regular ponies so he might catch the attention of some divine beings.
5608681 Interesting idea, I was gonna have the princesses show up in the next chapter so i guess a spark could start, but question is, which princess is better suited for our dark hero
5608694 I'm just going off of speculation since we don't really have a back story for Axle I'm thinking that he has an even in his life that he regrets deeply and maybe him and Princess Luna can have that in common. (I will admit I tend to favor Princess Luna over Princess Celestia so I am a bit biased.)
5608857 Axel's back story will be explained over the span of the story, and yes he does have A lot of regrets so you are right that it could work because of that, although if you compare the twos regrets, Axel would win because his regrets span all the way back to his childhood, but if you want to find out what they are, you just need to keep on reading, the chapter I'm working on is almost ready to be published.
5608879 and I look forward to reading the rest of the story and I hope you decide to put him with Princess Luna but in the end it is your story and you will decide who he is put with
5608967 You might just get your wish, It was either going to be Luna or Rainbow Dash, but then i realized Rainbow Dash was too sporty, and in reality Axel is lazy when there isn't fighting or adventuring to be done
Hmm small critique... The whole travel scene is way to "here, suddenly there, back at the library in the blink of an eye" a soft break with detailed filler helps , yes filler. Just creative details to make it less like there just teleporting (yes I know twilight is there) everywhere. Other then that, a few small errors here and there not really worth mentioning , tis been a decent chapter all in all . I'll be watching and waiting patiently to see how this all unfolds and begins to develops, still having a difficult time connecting with the main character with what little we know about him. Any how, this is Mane Medic logging out.
5609257 Well word of warning then the chapter I'm working on now sorta has that whole instant traversing thing but for a reason, your just gonna have to read the chapter once I'm done with it, and uh It's got a fight scene in it which I'm not too good with yet, so a little help may be needed on improving for the next one if you will.
This was awesome hey wat is the reference if there is one or if its ur oc or something.
5596988
Depends on what you mean, I made my OC a few years back by basing him off different generic things in media, unnecessarily large sword, long hair, oblivious to certain things. Just separate traits from different things i guess, other than that not much of a reference unless you can explain what you meant.
5597159 what I meant was is this one of the characters that you made or is it from a game or show
5597170
Oh..woops well hes actually a character i made up a few years back
5597184 oh ok thank you for telling me
5597213
Your welcome , and uh sorry about the slight confusion
5597232 oh its okay im sorry for not replying right away im on a different page aswell reading
5597292
It's alright I'm planning the next chapter out as we speak
5597298
5597302
I won't spoil anything about it though it wouldn't be right now would it
5597306 I just can not wait
5597321
I'm sure your not the only one who can't wait
5597332 well just keep at it and keep improving aswell. I can say for most that its really good. one of the best ive read so far.
5597372
why thank you that means a lot to me
5597387 let me know when you finish cause I I will stop what I am doing to read it even if im in the middle of class its that good
5597401
It's always nice to see people like you on this site, I'll give you a heads up or just keep in check should be up tomorrow if i get enough sleep.
5597408 ok thanks and stupid autocorrect on my phone
5597419
Your welcome, and don't worry auto correct screws with the best of us
5597431 make sure to get some sleep
5597441
You can count on that
5597454 do you have a xbox 360 because I was wandering if you do I could send you a friend request
5597461
I do but my gold is expired at the moment
5597469 I can still friend you and we can talk in private chat if you have a mic or kinect
5597475
Alright, but for now i'm gonna head to bed, I'm dead tired and could use a few hours of sleep before working on the next chapter
5597482 ok good night and same here
To my readers,
I am working on the third chapter right now, the reason its taking so long is cause im also working on art for it. So I won't be much longer cause its just a single picture.
To my readers,
I'm sorry that the next chapter isn't out, but I've had a long day, arguing with ten people at once takes a lot out of you, I'm gonna go to bed and when i wake up whenever whether it be at 5 or 10, I'll continue working on the chapter, again I'm sorry
To answer you authors note since no one else has replied I think he should be paired with Princess Luna and or Princess Celestia. The reason I say this is because it is obvious that he is different from regular ponies so he might catch the attention of some divine beings.
5608681
Interesting idea, I was gonna have the princesses show up in the next chapter so i guess a spark could start, but question is, which princess is better suited for our dark hero
5608694 I'm just going off of speculation since we don't really have a back story for Axle I'm thinking that he has an even in his life that he regrets deeply and maybe him and Princess Luna can have that in common. (I will admit I tend to favor Princess Luna over Princess Celestia so I am a bit biased.)
5608857
Axel's back story will be explained over the span of the story, and yes he does have A lot of regrets so you are right that it could work because of that, although if you compare the twos regrets, Axel would win because his regrets span all the way back to his childhood, but if you want to find out what they are, you just need to keep on reading, the chapter I'm working on is almost ready to be published.
5608879 and I look forward to reading the rest of the story and I hope you decide to put him with Princess Luna but in the end it is your story and you will decide who he is put with
5608967
You might just get your wish, It was either going to be Luna or Rainbow Dash, but then i realized Rainbow Dash was too sporty, and in reality Axel is lazy when there isn't fighting or adventuring to be done
Hmm small critique... The whole travel scene is way to "here, suddenly there, back at the library in the blink of an eye" a soft break with detailed filler helps , yes filler. Just creative details to make it less like there just teleporting (yes I know twilight is there) everywhere. Other then that, a few small errors here and there not really worth mentioning , tis been a decent chapter all in all . I'll be watching and waiting patiently to see how this all unfolds and begins to develops, still having a difficult time connecting with the main character with what little we know about him. Any how, this is Mane Medic logging out.
Mane Medic
5609257
Well word of warning then the chapter I'm working on now sorta has that whole instant traversing thing but for a reason, your just gonna have to read the chapter once I'm done with it, and uh It's got a fight scene in it which I'm not too good with yet, so a little help may be needed on improving for the next one if you will.
5608982 Yay!
5609292
That was the loudest yay ever lol
5609295 I would of yay'd louder but they still haven't put in a Luna emoticon
5609332
Tis a true shame
5609337 I know who his mother is but I won't spoil anything