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tursi


I'm not a writer, so output is slow. But it has been judged adequate, so that's good for something, eh? ;)

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After Nightmare Moon is defeated by the Elements of Harmony she finds herself banished to the sun-baked plains of the African savannah, a place that she learns is ruled by lions with their own rudimentary society. Teaming up with the lion next-in-line to rule, she lends her aid and secures the throne for him.

But what other magic dwells in these strange lands, and what place is there for an alicorn cast out of her world? What magic might the Elements of Harmony have actually set into motion here?

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tall, black unicorn, clad in blue armorĀ 

do you mean alicorn.

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"Unicorn" was intentional.. it's a cross-over story and "alicorn" is a fandom word (well, it's a real word, but in real life it means the material a unicorn's horn is made from). I introduce the word and use it later, but I decided since the show itself didn't use it until much later, I was fine to go this way. :)

Thanks for reading!

This has potential. Tracking.

So there was a review, and while not a direct reply to it, I wanted to comment on one of the biggest observations IN the review...

I've been thinking about it a long time, and it involves why I didn't cover Scar reconciling with Sarabi. In fairness, I did try coming at that from a couple of different angles. None of them flowed well, and I always intended this as a quick exercise, just to get the idea down on paper. I eventually took it out and felt that it did NOT damage the flow of the story too badly, especially as simple a story as this one.

I've rethought it a lot since reading the review, and I still stand by that position. I don't think reconciliation was possible. It might have been interesting to spell that out, but it would have cast a shadow on the rest of the story. I went the Simba's Pride approach - Sarabi was just not there anymore.

Anyway, just wanted to comment on that. ;)

There, I fixed the food complaint ;)

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