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Bluespectre
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Bluespectre
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liek if u cri evrytim.
Also, the chapter names should be capitalized more.
I had done with the original, still trying to get my head around the way the system works here. Thanks for the feedback !
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5535925 Thanks, amendments made !
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I loved this story, would read the sequal , and will read it if it is a planned project of yours.
5594860 Thanks for reading and i'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Book two is well underway and will be published in its entirety when finished and proof read etc. About 100 pages done so far.
5595429 SWEET! Can't wait for the second book to come out. I like that you are making the entire thing before posting, because if you had been posting it in parts in the first book, there would have been A LOT of cliffhanger, am i right?
5595454 Probably! The cliffhangers weren't particularly deliberate, they just sort of happened that way as i wrote and the story unfolded. Still, sometimes you just read something you wrote and think...yeah! Thats a good place to wrap that chapter up.
I love reading stories on Fimfiction, some of which have given me a lot of inspiration, but it drives me nuts when i get to a good bit and have to wait months for the next instalment. Theres always the chance the author will give up on the story too. Personally, I find finishing the work before publishing it allows me to go back and edit earlier chapters in case something isnt quite right.
I'm enjoying writing Fairlights story and I've been spending weekends and evenings until the small hours on this as i want readers to enjoy it as much as me. I hope its worth the wait
Thanks again!
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You are welcome, and I will be sure to spread the word about this, because this REALY deserves to get some attention.
As the old saying goes, "There are things that go 'bump' in the night. I'm the one that scares the piss out of them!"
Or something like that.
Dundee gender testing.
Question, though, Wasn't Fair given a dagger by one of the Host? What happened to it?
5722564 Hi, Thanks for reading ! Spoiler Warning! Hover mouse over to view : Fairlights physical body is still in the mortal realm and as such, any physical items he has in the Wither world were left behind when his spirit was sent back. The dagger re-appears in book three, but i dont want to give away too much as it's still in production.
Hope you enjoy book two
Like what I see so far going to give your story a try.
All the thumbs down almost scared me away, whats with that anyway? so far it does not seem to warrant so many thumbs down, with almost no comments.
6083500 I've contracted a bad case of 'Haters' i'm afraid. As soon as i put up a story now, its immediately hit with the "thumbs down no comment" virus. Book two was swamped with a load of thumbs-down less than an hour after i put it up ! Honestly, if people don't like something, i wish they'd either go away and read something else, or leave a reason why they didn't like it. The thumbs down thing really gets my goat as its used more as a stick to hit people with by trolls and such like rather than a useful function for readers. As a writer, i nearly gave up when i finished book one and lost heart with book two due to this kind of thing until i decided, no, to hell with them. If i enjoy writing it and so long as someone enjoys it, i'll keep going.
I wonder if the down voting is partly because there are some adult scenes in it and violence to some degree? Whether it is or not, I think its a lot less disturbing than some of the stories i've seen such as 'cupcakes'. I found it sickening personally (I don't like horror), but i didn't give it a thumbs down, what was the point? But still, horses for courses, i suppose. I'd like to think my writing style and technique improves as i go, this is the first i've written in a very long time after all. I've read all the books through several times and my favourites are book three and four (Four not edited yet). I'll admit there may be some punctuation errors here and there, but getting an editor is like finding hens teeth, so i hope you'll overlook the odd thing i've missed.
I hope you enjoy Fairlight, but please do leave any thoughts, suggestions or feedback (Positive or negative). Its always very welcome and helps me get better, hopefully!
And of course, thank you so much for commenting on the story in the first place!
Kindest Regards,
Blue Spectre
Hm, interesting so far.... tho it could have used a better format. Like, a better separation of the dialogs and I'm seeing some phrases that simply are cut in the middle only to start on the line under it for no reason.
I liked that when it came to the violence scenes on the first chapter you didn't go into much detail, especially on the 'rape' part. Knowing that it happen may be important to the story but... too much emphasis on it is rather bothersome. Especially when is a story that is NOT a clop-fic...
I'll continue reading tomorrow!
6355779 Hope you enjoy the story! This is the first story I wrote, so I hope you can forgive any grammatical 'blips'. I did change the style as I went, so hopefully it won't interfere with your enjoyment of the story. I understand what you're saying about the opening scene, but you're right, it is central to at least the first three stories.
Thanks again for reading!
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
So.... this great war they spoke of was Celestia Vs Nightmare Moon. It kind of make sense that it was an actual war rather than a simple sister fight. Tsk. Lets get to the next chapter!
Holy cow
Nothing more that I can say here... just... wow
Oh... ok, so he is not Starswirl...
damn itAside from some strange 'glitches' on the format of the text (like line suddenly breaking in paragraphs and what not) and the way you placed the dialogs (some times I got a bit confused as to who was speaking what) this story was AWESOME!
I wonder how it only got this amount of 'likes'!
I'm jumping to read the rest, but now... must rest
Thank you so much for this one awesome story!
6366802 Hi, thanks for the feedback! I've read through Fairlight again and i've noticed my writing style has changed a lot since then, so i think i'll revisit it at some point and address the grammatical issues. It made me cringe a bit in places!
Book Two, which should have a name really (!) looks a lot more into who Fairlight is and his relationships with other ponies, including his past and his interactions with the princesses. It addresses issues, particularly emotional ones which i feel add a lot to Fairlights personality and how he reacts to his situation in the world.
As the story develops, particularly with book three and four, you'll understand more of how and why he feels and acts the way he does, however one of the things i try to get across is that Fairlight isn't perfect. Book three and four have a lot more in the way of 'action' and there's a lot more Starswirl in the fourth book.
I'll leave the rest for you to discover and see what you think. I'm very grateful for your insights and hope you enjoy it. Please let me know what you think, and even if you don't like it, it helps me to develop.
For interest, i'm writing a new story presently although i may well complete it before posting this time! Oh, and if you like Starswirl, he will be featuring a lot in the new story as its a tie in with When the Snow Melts (By popular demand!).
Thanks again,
Bluespectre
This has the crossover tag but no indication of what it’s a crossover with.
6460084 Hi, It's a tie in with the original FiM series, but it also runs alongside When the Snow Melts.
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It’s the lacklustre editing. There are more than a few paragraphs which are broken, there’s the lack of title case on chapter names, and there’s some grammatical issues as well. The author’s note probably doesn’t help any — there is something about the way it’s phrased that sets off my “waste of time‐o‐meter” which combined with the down‐votes, the lacklustre editing, and the trippy, disjointed feel of the first chapter probably has most folks heading for the hills.
Having read about 100,000‐odd words of one of the author’s other stories I know that, despite needing an editor worth a damn, this is probably worth it; there’s some of the magic that drew me into that one (albeit only after I slogged through the trippiness) so I’m still willing to give this a chance despite my misgivings, but I strongly doubt anyone new to Bluespectre’s writing would give it a shot based off the first impression this chapter gives.
6526870 I can't disagree with you, i'm not very happy with the layout myself and it needs re-addressing. I think you'll find the writing gets steadily better after book one, but I totally agree, it really needs heavily editing. I will do to it after i've finished the new book i'm writing which ties in with When the Snow Melts. My plan is to remove a lot of the adult content to make is accessible (and visible) to a wider audience as well.
The editor's notes will disappear too!
Thanks for your comments, the feedback is always very welcome.
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Guess that means I should save a copy of this before it gets neutered then.
6529355 I'm going to edit the original but keep the adult content. If Fimfiction will allow it, i'd like to produce another version that's more 'teen' orientated.
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FiM Fiction won’t allow it (it’s against the rules); you’ll have to either replace the original entirely or replace its content (keeping all existing comments, votes, and favourites) and append the original as chapters 38–75. Honestly, I’m not sure there’s enough of a story with everything “questionable” excised — and Fairlight going all Wendigo from anything less than what happened to his wife would seem overblown.
6530348 Thanks for the heads up. Not to worry though, I'll get busy with the editing when i can and leave the content as it stands.
You have my attention...
Is Fairlight an idiot? If some random individual suddenly walked up to me and demanded I cooperate, I would ask for specifics and I'd be damned if I was just going to do what they said, if they were unwilling to tell me anything.
Strip him of his memories, after everything he's been through? Wow, those afterlifr Alicorns are a bunch of heartless cunts eh? They take away his wife and his little girl but, nope, that's not enough. If I were him, I'd figure out how to destroy those afterlife Alicorns. Payback is a bitch, mother fucker.
Well, at least SOME of them are decent fellows. This chapter makes me happy. Even though the situation could have ended very differently, I think this was the absolute best possible outcome.
Must have one HELL of a deep voice to make a mistake like THAT!
Yeah, arrest the guy for no given reason. Makes perfect sense. Tell the chief to 'stand down' and let the nut jobs murder them. Completely logical. I would have told them the same thing.
So... it's kind of like a gender-reversed, ponified version of the Twilight story? (Please don't kill me for such blasphemy)
Glad to see that Thorn made it. Surprised to see him there, but then again, time moves differently in the Withers.
Why does this have so few likes?!
This is an amazing read.
That's right fairlight! Channel your inner liam neeson.
Man... This is obviously a setup. The agency is working with the foreigners. This is getting intense.
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to be fair, he was still in shock from the emotional whiplash of being fired from his dream job for no better reason than the blame game.
truely the greatest of war cries!
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for your first story? it's a masterpiece. otherwise, it's simply a very good story in it's own right
9778020 Meh. Honestly I don't give a damn about the story. I stopped reading eventually. I will not state my personal reasons because it might end up influencing you. If you enjoy it then I have no right to tell you my own reasons why I do not. If you really want the reasons then P.M. me. If not then don't give it another thought.