Chapter 4: A New Adventure
As the chariot approached Canterlot castle Twilight could see there were allot of guards even more than at her brothers wedding. Once the chariot landed Flash and Twilight stepped off and were escorted inside. They were taken to a set of large bronze double doors. They pushed it open and found Celestia, Luna, and Cadence all siting at a large round table in the center of the room.
"Ah, Twilight I'm glad you could make it," Celestia greeted them.
"I'm glad I could make it but whats the emergency?" Twilight asked in concern. Twilight sat down at the table and Flash stood by the door."Is there a new threat to Canterlot?"
"Not just Canterlot but all of Equestria could be in great danger," Celestia looked serious." I have had a new vision, a vision that could determine the fate of Equestria for all eternity." Celestia paused a second and took a deep breath and sighed." The Black Crystal Heart has awaken." Twilight felt her fear consume her. She had heard stories of the Dark Crystal Heart, but that's all they were was stories. Flash saw the horrified look on Twilight's face, he wanted to comfort her but all he could do was watch. The princesses saw the Flash looking at Twilight with a concerned look o his face. They took note of this but pushed it to the back of there minds'.
"You may already know this but," Cadence chimed in." The Dark Crystal Heart or D.C.H, for short, can be used to release Sombra from his frozen prison."
"Indeed, but if we were to get the heart first then we could possibly cure him of his insanity." Celestia spoke." The D.C.H was created from the core of a fallen star like the real Crystal Heart, but the D.C.H was used for evil instead of balance. Eventually it was banished to a distant land were it was supposedly in eternal slumber."
"B-but what does this have to do with me?" Twilight asked.
"Because I saw you along with four others going to retrieve it. Not only that but I predict that you are the only one who can hold the heart with out it corrupting you. Twilight your magic is a perfect balance between dark and light allowing you to harness it." Celestia explained. Twilight's brain tried to register the information that was just dumped on her. She was being chosen to go to a distant land to retrieve an 'evil dark heart' that could destroy all of Equestria as she knew it. Not to mention the danger she would face while there.
"Who will be accompanying me?" She asked.
"You will be accompanied by your guard Flash Sentry, Zecora, a palace guard known as Blazing Sword, and an inventor by the name of Phoenix," As on cue the doors to the room swung open and three ponies walked in. The first one was a zebra mare Twilight knew as Zecora. Behind her was a gray unicorn guard with a silver colored mane and silver spear on fire as a cutie mark. Next walked in a white unicorn stallion, orange mane and tail with a gold streak through it. He had blue eyes and his cutie mark was a blue phoenix flying out of an orange and brown cloud with small stars. The tree ponies walked in and bowed to the princesses.
"Princess Twilight it's a pleasure to meat you, I'm Phoenix," The white stallion said. He then looked up and saw Flash. Phoenix gave him a quizzical look as thought he was studying him. He soon turned his attention back to Twilight.
"Now since every pony is hear lets start with some introductions," Celestia said." First you already know Zecora, her knowledge of mythical creatures should help you out greatly on your journey. Next is Blazing Sword,"Celestia gestured to the guard," He is a master at magical weapons, enchantments, and magical combat. Finally is Phoenix but I'll let him explain." Phoenix nodded with a nod and stepped a few feet from the others.
"Deactivate EM field!" He called. Suddenly the air around him and a titanium exo-suit. The hole thing covered his body except for his mouth, horn, mane, and tail. His cutie mark shined on the flank of his armor. Twilight's jaw hit the floor as she saw the titanium armor appeared. He gave a slight chuckle at the looks on the faces of the ponies staring at him in aw. Oh I almost forgot, activate flight!" He called again. Suddenly a pair of titanium wings and two thrusts on both side. This time every pony in the room had there jaw on the floor. He burst out laughing. " Ah, that's priceless," He wiped away a tear that fell below his visor.
"Ah hem," Celestia cleared her thought causing every pony to focus on her." Now that we got that out of the way lets get down to business." Celestia pulled out a scroll and unrolled it partially revealing a map of Equestria. But she unrolled it the rest of the way revealing a second continent.
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Twilight looked in aw at the map. She had never heard about this land before."Why have I never heard of this land before?" She asked
"This land is ancient very old,"Celestia responded." All information of this land has been lost to history."
"But then how did you fined this?" Flash piped up. He cringed realizing he wasn't given permission to speak."Oh, sorry princess."
"No need,"She smiled."That's a good question one that I should let Phoenix answer." She turned to the titanium pony. He nodded than turned to the others.
"I found it. I have an assortment of ancient texts and maps that I have found over my time. This is one of my most valuable items in my collection and is my favorite artifact."He explained." We'll be using this map on our journey to fined the D.C.H."
"But do we know were it is?" Twilight asked
"I'v been able to trace a dark magic signature coming from the heart of the continent which is were I suspect we will fined it."
"But how are we suppose to retrieve it?" Blazing asked."I thought the heart corrupts all who touch it."
"Not all..." Phoenix gestured to Twilight and ,for some reason, Flash.
"I thought only I could retrieve it?" Twilight questioned
"Oh did I gesture to Flash as well? Sorry, yes you are the only one."
"I have one more question though," Flash spoke." How long will we be gone?" Celestia pondered on this a moment, she hadn't thought about it yet.
"I'd say at least a few weeks, and you'll be leaving in three days," She concluded." I wish the best of luck to all of you."
"We will meet in Los Pegasus were we will board my bout and head for the other continent," Phoenix concluded. There was an exchange of looks around the room. Finally every pony nodded and the meeting was adjourned and they all left. Flash and Twilight returned to ponyville, it was quite the whole way back both of them not sure what to say.
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The chariot landed out side the library in ponyville, Flash and Twilight stepped of the chariot and went inside. Flash closed the door and turned around to see Twilight just standing looking down. Suddenly she collapsed and began to hyperventilate. Flash ran over to her and tried to support her.
"Twilight are you alright?" He asked in concern. She looked up at him with tears welling up.
"No!," She yelled." I'm not okay... I just got back from a parallel universe a few weeks ago, not long after my coronation, I'll be going to a mysterious continent to get a Dark Crystal Heart that only I can retrieve, my friends won't be able to help me, and I'm just scared Flash! I'm scared Flash, and I don't think I can do it I'm not capable." Twilight was now crying uncontrollably. Flash was shocked, she seamed so calm a few seconds ago and now she was having a panic attack. Flash quickly pulled her into a hug to comfort her as he proceeded to stroke her mane.
"Twilight that's not true."He scolded a bit. Twilight flinched at it a bit but kept crying." You'v done so meany things before, you even said it your self. You were able to become a princess, go to another dimension and back. You defeated the spirit of chaos, defeated King Sombra, and even Nightmare Moon! You have done more impossible tasks than any one could do in a million years. You have come so far Twilight don't forget that." Flash put her at arms length and continued." You are capable of so much more than you think you are special to me and every one else. Your like a shooting star, you shine so bright that you could brighten the darkest nights. You illuminate the lives of all though's around you." He paused a sec then spoke." You deserve so much more than you have, you always tell your self that you're not all that great but your wrong! You are amazing and don't you forget that ever!" He finished. Twilight couldn't believe what she was hearing. She had gotten praise before but the way Flash said it made her feel different. She never felt this way before. She started to cry again but they went tears of sadness but tiers of joy. Flash made her feel happy really cared about her. She quickly leaned foreword and kissed him on the lips. Flash wasn't expecting it at all but he returned it passionately. When they broke apart Twilight nestled her head into the crook of his neck.
"I love you Flash."
"I love you to Twily."
---To be Continued---
Interesting story. I like how Flash and Twilight will be spending some more time together. Interesting concept with the DHC. Good luck with the next chapter.
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Wow another encouraging comment that puts me at a grand total of I think 1!
Thanks I really was hoping this next chapter would get a positive response.
Why a down vote right after I post a new chapter?
Meany things?
Really good. i can`t stress that enough i loved the story line too it.
You need to work on your spelling...
(kinda hard to work out what you're trying to say)
Do you have an editor? Because, no offense, you're not showing it. It may surprise you, but there are some people who would down vote something due to bad grammar and spelling. Good grammar improves the readability.
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I know I'v bean trying to improve.
I like this chapter I hope u add more when u have the time
Sorry I had to change the tags because this is technically an alternate universe, my characters were wrong, and I plan to add a dark evil feel to the story.
I hope this doesn't anger any one. Also Phoenix in the story is my OC and I plan to type a back story for him in the future.
Man I think my grammar in this comment is really bad I need to work on it and I'm still practicing with Dragon software so it may be a while before it gets better. I'm sooooooooooooo sorry.
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Hay thanks, and I checked out you first story and it's doing allot better than mine in likes to dislikes ratio.
I have a secret weapon to completely fix the whole Flash Sentry wifu stealing problem for good.
1. castle,
2. a lot
3. guards,
4. brother's
Comma after "landed".
Space after door."
Space goes before this quotation mark, not after it.
Again, quotation marks go adjacent to the sentence being quoted, not the name of the speaker. Also, "awoken."
{that's all they were: stories.}
The comma should be a semicolon {;}.
1. The Flash is a superhero. Flash is the first name of your character.
2. {a concerned look on his face.}
Their minds. (No apostrophe)
1. Comma between "this" and "but", i.e. {already know this, but,}
2. Space before the quote and no space after, i.e. {Cadence chimed in. "The}
3. Dashes on either side of the qualifier, i.e. {The Dark Crystal Heart - or D.C.H. for short - can be}
Once more: quotation marks go adjacent to the quote.
"without". Also, we got us a Frodo-and-the-ring situation here. Assemble the Fellowship!
1. Comma after Twilight's name.
2. Comma after the word "light."
There a three of them. Not tree.
as though (no t)
1. here
2. let's
1. Do I need to say it again?
2. There should be a comma after "first".
3. The comma after Zecora's name should be a semicolon.
Space before Celestia's name. Also, he is a master of magical weapons, etc.
I'm sure you can tell what's wrong here.
To quote Microsoft Word, "Fragment (Consider revising)."
{It covered his whole body...}
*Appear
*awe
Again, there is no verb in this not-a-sentence-because-it-doesn't-have-a-verb. And I believe you mean thrusters.
*Their
1. Ahem is a word. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
2. {cleared her throat, causing}
3. The quotation mark after "her" should come before "Now" instead.
4.{Now that we've got that out of the way, let's get down to business.}
*awe
Space before the quote and a period at the end.
1. Remove "very old".
2. Space before Celestia's name.
3. Quotation mark before "All", not after "responded."
4. {information on this land}.
*find
Space before the quote, comma after "sorry", and capitalize "Princess".
Needs a space on either side of the qualifier (with the quotation marks adjacent to their quotes, please!), "she" should not be capitalized, and there should be a dash here: {That's a good question - one that I should let Phoenix answer.}
1. {One of the most valuable items in my collection}
2. The period after "artifact" should be a comma.
3. "He" should be "he".
4. Space on either side of the statement "he explained." (Again, {"}s go by the quote, not the identification of the speaker.)
5. *find.
*where, and period needed at the end.
There should be an "e" on the end of "I've" and a comma after "continent", "were" should be "where", and "fined" should be "find".
*supposed
And there should be a space after the words, "Blazing asked."
Transpose the comma and the space.
Requires ending period.
Transpose the third quotation mark and the adjacent space.
^Previous correction^
Not sure why you italicized Las/Los Pegasus. "were" should be "where". "bout" should be "boat".
1. Ponyville is a proper noun and should therefore be capitalized.
2. The comma should be a semicolon.
3. "quite" should be "quiet".
4. There should be a comma here: {the whole way back, both of them not sure what}
1. Outside is a word.
2. Ponyville should be capitalized.
3. The comma should be a semicolon or a period.
1. There should not be a comma after the exclamation point after No.
2. Transpose the third quotation mark and the adjacent space.
3. There should be a comma between "scared" and "Flash".
1. There should be a comma between "scared" and "Flash".
2. There should be a period after "it".
*seemed
Comma after Twilight's name and space before "He scolded a bit."
1. Transpose the quotation mark and the adjacent space.
2. *You've
3. "meany things" should be "many things".
4. Yourself is a word.
Comma after "far", semicolon after "Twilight".
1. Transpose the ... you know what to do.
2. Period after "think" and capitalize "You".
*You're
And the comma should be a semicolon.
Ah, homophones. "Though's" should be "those".
1. Not sure you want to use "sec" instead of "second".
2. Transpose the... you get the idea.
3. The comma should be a semicolon.
4. {but you're wrong} (Good job on getting it right the other time in this sentence, though!)
Comma after "again".
*weren't
The second time you say "tears," you misspelled it "tiers".
... wut?
Commas needed before the names, and "to" should be "too".
(When I say to transpose a quotation mark and the adjacent space, I mean swap them. i.e., {"How's it going? "Flash asked.} becomes {"How's it going?" Flash asked.}
Alright, one chapter to go!
If you want me to stop, tell me; I'll stop.