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Playful and hot! Thank you.
I may not have been first, but I am the longest. Suck it!
5502903
You're welcome!
Oh, before I forget, 5502904 , you asked in the thread for feedback. So, lemme be the first to give some.
Now, is this, "Third Times a Charm" or "Dreams Really do Come True?" Given the repeated actions that are both real and in Twilight's dream in the previous non-mature prompts, I suppose it's a bit of both? The fantasy role play aspect of the fic feels very in character for these two, given their canonical past, and Twi subbing for Tia is pretty much a given. The standard roles they play work well when turned toward the erotic. That's why the StudentxTeacher angle is so frequently used in Twilestia.
Even though the trope is common, you used it well here and played up the right strengths of that power/authority dynamic and the two respective characters' most recognizable traits. The exploration into the - I don't want to really call it mild sadomasochism, it's more sensation/sensitivity play that re-enforces the domination aspect - is a good choice and builds on the momentum you establish at the start. The only part of it that stuck out to me was Twilight realistically not orgasming from the paddling. But that's a good thing, because far too often we see it leading to the climax by itself. While that's certainly possible, for most folks, it's just simply not going to happen. So kuddos there on surprising me!
Overall, the pacing is good, if a touch quick, but hey...that's a prompt for you. It's a very good prompt though and I'm super glad you wrote this. If we could give awards of a prompt that can carry a collab a long way, this one would win it so far. The other prompts have been good too, but this is an exemplar of a mature prompt done right and done well.
Ooh boy....
Huh. Didn't even notice this particular collab existed until just now. I'll be checking it out now, but I gotta say, it looks pretty good so far.
Very nice, good job!