Ryuu and Q have a long history--spanning some 3000 years. Their last encounter was on a planet called Pern--but that's a story for another place and time. This is their First meeting! And neither was prepared for it happening in Equestria!
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"The Black Wizard", or Discord, whichever is the name, being the one who made Trevar what he is. Now THAT is an interesting idea. Totally didn't see it coming. As always, keep going!
Glad you're enjoying it.
As for the "running gag", I'm afraid you're a little on the wrong track for that one. Although, I originally wanted to use the StarGate to get Ryuu's character to Equestria. However, Ryuu had his own StarGate crossover story and he convinced me to not involve Cheyenne Mountain--in fact, it was that other Allec Trevar whom the Black Wizard was looking in on who got to mix it up with Col. O'Neill on his home world (but I was glad to be able to throw in a not-so subtle reference).
No, the "running gag" is one that can be solved by paying attention to the titles of those chapters, and refers to another show from the 1960's that was one of his favorites. That you had gotten the Prisoner so easily and quickly, I was surprised that you haven't figured it out yet. I'll let you know by PM if you haven't gotten it by next week ;)
Cheers
This story is interesting, not gonna lie. But I can’t follow it easily. That’s not to say it’s hard to tell what’s going on but more that things are said or mentioned that don’t really make sense unless you have knowledge beforehand.
This is a story based off other stories, correct? I believe I’ve said this in an earlier comment on this story that you can’t expect people to know about the story, which it seems like you’re doing.
I don’t know who Allec Trevar, Pardus, Panthera or that other guy with his wolves are. I don’t know who “they” are, I don’t know the mechanics behind the supposed technology - which we haven’t seen much of despite the description suggesting otherwise - that they have and I don’t know how they’re doing anything that they’re doing.
I come into this story with only the knowledge given in the description and the knowledge of My Little Pony as per the fact this is an MLP website. So, understand my confusion, when the story throws us in and expects us to know about their telepathy, telekinesis, anti-grav units, cloaking technology, supposed dragon transformations etcetera etcetera.
Though, that’s not my main issue with this, no, I have a lot of other issues.
The description seemed to suggest that there’d be technology and transformations involved in this story, yet the only technology we see is the Warp Drives, Pardus and Panthera, and the only transformations we’ve seen is in this chapter and it’s only singular.
The story seems to put way too much emphasis on accents and the way certain characters speak to the point of overdoing it. First one was Luna, extremely overdone archaic dialect to the point of incomprehensibility. Applejack’s accent became more and more pronounced as the story continued to the point certain words were accented in ways not even a stereotypically western person would say it. Rainbow Dash - only a recent thing - after her fiasco in the upper atmosphere suddenly gained an accent that is so OTT its cringy to the extreme and makes her sound like - to be blunt - a retarded rich kid.
There seems to be so much thrown in together in this story it’s a mess and a half. It goes slow at some points only to speed up at others, and it makes the overall confusion even worse. There’s so much scientific talk you kind-of just have to skim over certain parts else you’ll be stuck re-reading them once or twice. Etcetera, etcetera.
It all comes together to make a confusing mess, and while the name of the story blatantly points out it’s going to be weird there’s such a thing as too much and OTT.
This is where I hop off, despite wanting to read more, it’s just too confusing to properly enjoy.