• Member Since 25th Sep, 2011
  • offline last seen 9 hours ago

Valtyra

Stories. Ponies. That's all. If you like my stuff, please follow! <3

Valtyra Joined 25th Sep, 2011 · Offline

Also LikedSimilarAuthor

Comments ( 4 )
acroamatis
acroamatis #1 · Jan 9th, 2015 · · ·
Reply

A fun bit of clop.

Could use some proofing (and additional polish), though, since in the first few paragraphs:
* the comma after "wife of" should not appear
* "wore of" in place of "wore off"
* Interchangeable use of "Cadance" (canon) and "Cadence" (wrong)
* Incorrect capitalization on proper names, nicknames, and following quoted phrases.

There are similar errors throughout, and it takes one out of the story a bit every time one occurs. I'd be happy to proof a few things for you, or you can find someone you know personally, but it definitely needs a second set of eyes.

Cheers!

Valtyra
Valtyra #2 · Jan 9th, 2015 · · ·
Reply

5484771

Cool, thanks. I don't really write enough to warrant a proof-reader... BUT, if you want to, we can message you anytime I have something ready?

Marioland1
Marioland1 #3 · Jan 10th, 2015 · · ·
Reply

A nice little short cloppy story. That's about all there is to it, and it shines in its simplicity.

iluvpotions
iluvpotions #4 · Apr 3rd, 2015 · · ·
Reply

Amazing! Okay, this was short, and I hope it continues, but I enjoyed it quite a lot. Please keep writing, and we'll keep reading :3

Login or register to comment

Stats

Page generated in 0.762 seconds
Total duration
878 users online
605,785 hits today, 2,673,812 yesterday

• Site Statistics

FIMFiction

My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024

• Privacy
• Cookies
• Staff
• Licenses

Follow & Support Us

Support us
SubStar Chat!
Discord Follow us
Twitter

MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®