Diamond Tiara finally gets what's coming to her, but Apple Bloom never wanted for it to turn out like this...
Watch as Diamond Tiara rethinks her life and decides what is actually important.
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SeaBreeze?
this was freaking awesome.
/out of five.
the writing itself left a lot to be desired, and cretain bits could use some expansion, but the ideas shine through like a sumer's day or a cloudless night. I approve.
For the bits that need edititng, expand on silver spoon's motive, please. also, cut out about half the accent marks- it impedes comprehension. Nicely done overall though!
Interesting. I guess I like.
A few little bits of editing would help, but it's nothing too distracting, and it's a fairly unique idea (well, I had the same sort of idea for one of my stories, but I just haven't gotten round to writing it yet).
Good stuff. I look forward to any future ventures into the fic-writing world you make.
Great job!
Aww that was cute
Rated + fav
btw, when Diamond Tiara came in with her father, you wrote that AB and Diamond Tiara were together instead of AB and Silver Spoon
Very good until 'a single tear'. That's firmly on Orwell's list of dying phrases that should be avoided out of fear of sounding trite and hackneyed. Otherwise, me gusta, a very sweet story.
530048 SeaBreeze is a random pony that I found on a list of characters from various generations xD
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Darn it, Orwell is one of my favorite authors! How could I have done that?! xD
530431 thats weird cuz SeaBreeze is also the name of my OC
"No Silver Spoon, I don't think we did enough. Everypony needs to see that I am just better than them and that they should kneel down before me..." Diamond Tiara said smugly.
Nnnnot very.... well phrased there. Not the sort of phrasing a bully brat would use. It's a little too self-honest. "She needed to be put in her place" maybe....
This...is...so...cute!!! My heart exploded twice during this. But, could be better with expansion.
/) /) /) /) <<<4 hooves out of 5 for you!
This is good.
A few errors here and there but otherwise everything is good.
What happened to Sweetie Belle? She wasn't paired up with anybody... Other than that not bad. Your story was good. I just don't like CMC stories as much as Mane 6 but still not bad. Still gets a thumbs up and a fave.
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I am pretty sure somewhere in there I wrote that they sat there not saying anything, and I just figured in my mind that it meant Cheerilee read off other pairings. Guess I didn't put much thought into that
531794 Well I understand, Sweetie Belle did not play any role in the story.
541215 LOL Yeah I guess she didn't :(
Cool story, bro. Still hate Tiara, but cool story. There's just one teeny tiny problem
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THEY USE GLUE IN PONYVILLE?!!
GLUE IS MADE FROM HORSE HOOVES!! AND THEY USE IT IN PONYVILLE?!!
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Again, cool story bro!
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It's magical white adhesive, but the human mind is not advanced enough to comprehend the real name of it, so it is called "glue," the only actual word the human mind can understand.
Good story, needs a little expansion (as other people said), but really moving.
I like stories about Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, I've never thought they were really bad ponies, just rich and presomptuous ponies.
One thing bugged me though : when Cheerilee listed the pairings, everyone was paired up with someone they didn't hang out with except for... Snips and Snails. Either you forgot, either Cheerilee doesn't give a fuck about them XD
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Haha, that was just me coming up with the first pairings that came to mind, also, it's not Cheerilee who doesn't give a fuck, it's me! :P
Sorry for the late response, and thanks for your feedback! :)
564389
Actually... Glue from hooves is only one type of glue. And not particularly good, by modern standards.
It`s entirely possible that ponies use glue devolved from plant resin or synthetics.
Hell, one can glue things up with soap.
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Soap?
Soap?
FUCKING BUBBLES!!
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It`s been used to put on billboard notices before. Just wet a bar of soap a LITTLE, and rub it all over the paper you`re gluing on. It will stick in place pretty well, once dry - and as an added bonus, will be easy to remove once no longer necessary.