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Hearth's Warming Special, and Balloon Holiday Contest contestant

Today is the Hearth's warming day, where ponies celebrate the end of the year and unification of the ponies's race. But today is also when Twilight Sparkle learns something important.

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Pause

Pause #1 · Dec 22nd, 2014 · · ·

Cute story though it might be considered a "Teen" story rather than "Everyone" considering a couple innuendos and mentions of more teen/adult situations.

Dash The Stampede

Dash The Stampede #2 · Dec 22nd, 2014 · · ·

Don't forget to add this to the Contest folder :V

SoothingCoffee

SoothingCoffee #3 · Dec 22nd, 2014 · · ·

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Wait, I forgot I wrote the innuendo... thanks

Dash The Stampede

Dash The Stampede #4 · Jan 19th, 2015 · · ·

Noice. I liked it, and you took it in a different direction than I thought you would.

The pacing was great, and you made a nice fluffy scene where I wasn't thinking there'd be one. The grammar could use a touch up, though I think it reads hilariously well as-is. I was laughing at all the little asides and jokes throughout, that's my kind of humor, subtle yet in your face.

Covered the sentiment of spending time with others and of giving the gift of companionship well, though I wonder why a book related to the 'sutra' would conjure up a friend for, like, children >.>

Still, it was funny, and cute at the right places. Just toss it by an editor next go, and it'll be really fine :D

Stay tuned for the results soon :V

Trickilee