Rainbow Dash, like many others, thought bat ponies were only a bedtime story to scare foals. After meeting the rather rude and fairly bitter Quick Silver, she wishes they had stayed that way. Tasked by Princess Celestia and Princess Luna, Rainbow must travel to one of the bat ponies villages in order to learn more about their culture and save them from prosecution from the Canterlot nobility. A simple mission made harder by their loyalty to Princess Luna, and their lack of guilt for their aid to Nightmare Moon so many centuries ago.
This was actually an idea I had ages ago during EQD's bat pony write off last year but never got around to writing due to overwhelming laziness. Bat ponies aren't out of style right?
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Of course Batponies are not out of style. They rule the night after all.
This seems interesting. Let's see where it goes...
Yay a batpony fic!
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Yes, I agree. Yay indeed. This would help me in my current fics in progress. It would help more if it would be updated soon, Mr./Ms. Author.
I'm looking forward to when it does.
Some specifics:
1. Possible Error: Not a very loud scream mind, but Rainbow figured pretty soon it’d be enough to wake up even her companion sitting in the seat across from her.
- Not a very loud scream mind you(?), but Rainbow figured pretty soon it’d be enough to wake up even her companion sitting in the seat across from her.
2. Rainbow assumed the reason her escort slept so much was because she was used to sleeping during the day. It made sense for a bat pony, after all.
- Ah!
3. “Hey! Rise and shine, leatherwings!”
- I totally heard this in RD's voice.
4. “Helmets of the Royal Guard are enchanted to change the appearance of the wearers coat. Uniformity to intimidate,” she answered curtly, before jamming her helmet back on. “You didn't think they only hired ponies that looked exactly alike to be in the Guard, did you?”
- Ooooh! I love this explanation. Totally makes sense.
5. Her mind was racing, coincidentally with thoughts of racing.
- *snicker*
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Edited! Thank you!
Yeah, I wasn't sure if that was proper or not, because mind, I say just "mind" all the time
And it is in fact Mr. Author
.....Red tape i going to get Humiliated and have his life saved multiple times...isnt he?
ah well, as long as he doesnt loose too many limbs i;s sure he will come around to the Chirowhatever's side...
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Ah, Mr. Author it is then.
Good story so far hope to see more soon
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Barding - armor for horses.
The things I learn by reading other's works.
Thanks.
Oh my, this is becoming one of those "Law & Order: Friendship is Magic" thing. Nice!
I hope you'll update soon. I can read this all day if all the chapters are posted. Are you done with the story and just updating on a regular basis. Or are you writing, editing, and then updating on the fly?
Just a question: Why Chiruus and not Equiroptera?
Possible technical errors:
If you, the Element of Loyalty, can learn about the Chiruus, why they do what they do and are what they are, you can make a case for their return to the Guard. Explain it to the nobility in a way they can understand. In a way you'd understood it yourself.
-If I am not mistaken, this is a double past tense. You only need one. If I remember my editor's lessons right, may I suggest "In a way you'd understand..."
Dash does realise she can just say "Lol, fuck dat shit, get ur pwetty pwincess student to do it. I'm out!" Den she cud fly out da wondow and inta tha sunset.
I present you with your first downvote, If you manage to change my outlook on this fic, I'll revert it back to an upvote. For now though, I'ma make like a tree and leaf-leave.
Can'y wait for an update
great chapter as always
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Oop, thanks for catching that, I'll fix it later tonight after I sleep off my shift from work.
And to answer your months old questions with a fairly obvious answer at this point, I am writing this on the fly :3
My life settled down now that I've moved and found a stable job, so I can actually work on this again, rest assured.
Oh, and Chiruus reminds me of Charon so that was a major factor.
6113190 Charon? Out of Underworld?
Bat ponies are still in
Still working on this? I was looking forward to it
When will you continue I want to read more
Well. If that's the case. Your screwed. The guard sucks.