Ever since humans began settling down in Equestria, Celestia has been pushing to merge both societies to learn from one another. For college sophomore Walter Barnes, this little "push" has caused more chaos than harmony.
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Thanks for the quick update. Damn, is Dash really flirty in this one if she already kissed the protagonist after just two chapters of screentime.
Damn that was quick! Not a bad thing but WOW!
I was kind've sleepy when I wrote this, sorry XD
....Welp that escaladed quickly...Yep '-'
i bet thats not the only thing that tastes sweet... im going to go into my corner now
5392700 No just No.
I know where you got that picture, you dirty, dirty author.
This is a real cool story so far, I really like the setup you have going, and i look forward to see how this will play out with the other five roomates
5394954 I don't, I just found it on google o.o never really checked out the artist's DA yet, since my internet time is scarce
5395631 Ah, well, I don't think you'll find the full picture on DA. It's rather... explicit.
This story is blowing up a lot more than I expected o.o
5398865 Because we all love thing about School c; I think i am joking more then i tought
5396031 *Do right-click on the image then search for the image* O_O MY EYE AAH
More Please!
over 1000 views!? Holy shit!
The beginning of this chapter felt a bit off to me... but overall, it's pretty awesome! I love ALL ponies but I just can't wait to see how it turns out with Fluttershy..
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just wait man its coming
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Ok, so several things are bothering me about this story.
1: Literally not a single person has brought up the oddity that this guy is in the same dorm as six females, and even if the dorms are co-ed (to such a degree as it is here) there is no mention of this.
2: The girls have gotten too comfortable with living together with a total stranger of the opposite sex, especially Fluttershy who is notoriously bad with strangers.
3: There's no way a guy who was overweight and had low stamina is going to be able to lift 450 with such confidence, if at all, in the span of 1-2 weeks unless he was already doing some other form of exercise which was not mentioned directly. Now if he had somehow been in shape from working on the farm as previously mentioned I doubt that he would have had low stamina.
4. This situation in whole is generic and so far hasn't introduced anything unique that would make it more interesting. And if this is supposed to be shameless clop, even those have some standards in terms of plot.
5. This character feels very Gary Stu-ish in general.
There's more I could mention but they would be more about my personal preferences that would matter little in terms of criticism, so for now I'll try reading a few more chapters to try and figure out why this story has such a highly positive vote percentage.
Apologies: Taste the Rainbow.
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Well, gravity could be lower there.
But yeah, now that you've mentioned it, highly agree with you. I feel like I've started watching Rosario and Vampire, but I've hopped into it at the middle of the series (and the main male guy isn't a wimp).
I'm digging this story so far. The characterization is nice and the bond between Dash and Walter is lovely.