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Smash Fortune


Smash!!!!! Ahhhh!!!

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After seeing the Cutie Mark Crusaders in another spectacular failed attempt in their quest to find their Cutie Marks, Pipsqueak turns to Pinkie Pie for advice on how to help them. Inspired by one of his heroes, the Mysterious Mare-Do-Well, he creates his own secret identity: The Heroic Foal Wonder! Results of his heroics are less than spectactular.

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I like the feel of the story. :scootangel:

Good laughs are promised in this fic! :rainbowlaugh:

Also, some orthographic mistakes:

As she leaned down to say high to the young foal, Pinkie bounced over. (hi)

Sure am!” Pinkie interjected. “Why just yesterday-” (Sure I am!)

Also dat Pinkie:

“What if I helped them find their Cutie Mark?”
Pinkie's eager voice broke Twilight's moment of awkward silence as she searched for a reply. “That's a great idea! Did they lose them?” :rainbowlaugh:

Thanks, Foresaken. I fixed those things you mentioned and appreciate all the feedback!

Wow. I really like where this is going. You captured the characters of Pinkie and Twilight perfectly. You have earned a watch from me. I love a good comedy fic and we don't see enough Pip. Keep it up :twilightsmile:

I'll be waiting for more! :pinkiehappy:

Excellent Pinkie Pie :pinkiehappy:
Love your interpretation of Pip
Excellent grasp of the mindset of a child.
Keep up the good work, sir.:rainbowdetermined2:

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