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  • E Tonight I Shall Be Laughter

    Princess Luna decides to work on her Element of Laughter. Captain Bucephalus gives chase.
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  • E Pumpkin Cake and the Storm Giant

    On a blustery night, the Cake Twins embark on an epic quest for the legendary Plate of Cookies!
    5,787 words · 3,173 views  ·  352  ·  3
  • E Short Cakes

    The Cake twins discover Ponyville.
    5,885 words · 3,684 views  ·  332  ·  3
  • E Gummy Tries All Day Long

    Gummy struggles to reach the Ponyville River. All of Ponyville tries to stop him.
    5,873 words · 2,420 views  ·  266  ·  2
  • E The Cake Twins' Surprise Party

    Pumpkin Cake plans a surprise birthday party for her brother. Which is challenging, considering that they are twins.
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  • T It Is My Fate To Enter Every Door

    Blythe Hyacinth Pie goes to visit her family, in Tartarus.
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  • E Hearth's Warming Eve: A Princess Promenade

    Ponyville Playhouse presents a bold, new interpretation of Hearth's Warming Eve. Music! Adventure! Intrigue! And a few surprises!
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  • T The Rummy Business of Old Blooey

    What ho! Big doin's on the night of the Grand Galloping Gala!
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  • 8w, 2d
    Shadow Day, Revisited; The Boneyard, Expanded

    I've been stuck on "Shadow Day" for quite awhile, to the point where the rest of my writing has stopped. For this reason, I have reluctantly revoked the story until I can develop a good resolution for it.

    Part of the problem is the Breezies. My original resolution involved re-introducing the Breezies into the MLP universe and I was knocked a-kilter when the series decided to do this without consulting me first. (This is the second time the series has made me abandon a story; I was happily working on a story about a solitary shapechanger, and then the series introduced a whole race of shapechangers. And, try as I might, I couldn't figure out a good way to distinguish my character, the Munkydo, from the Changelings.) I kind of trapped myself by publishing the "Stormy Weather" bits; try as I might, I couldn't figure out a way to get to my desired ending without the Breezies. (Although, Diamond Tiara, Ponyville's new expert on the wonders of methane, had this idea for a stinky fuel-air bomb...)

    A second part of the problem, which many of the kind respondents have noted, is that "Shadow Day" started wandering all over the place. Frankly, I kind of fell in love with the idea of mixing and matching the characters and their roles and I enjoyed trying different things out. This was fun for me, but I don't think it was much fun for the reader. I want to re-focus the story on the four main characters, Twilight, the Mayor, the Mayor's secretary and Pinkie. Each of them has something to teach the other and I don't want that little story lost amidst the sturm und drang of Ponyville battling a Storm Giant.

    I hesitated over the "revoke" button for quite awhile, because I feel it is unfair to the many good respondents that shared their encouragement and thoughtful criticisms with me. But I also feel I owe them a better story than the mess o' pottage that I have produced so far, so I hope they will forgive me.

    From this point on, I will only publish completed stories. No reader, I think, needs to waste time on some half-baked tale when there are plenty of other tasty treats available.

    While I am working on other things, one project that I keep in front of me is a re-write of "The Boneyard." I originally wrote this for a competition and, as many of my respondents have noted, the story suffers for my attempts to compress the story below a word limit. I'd like to slow the pace of the opening down a bit, spend some more time describing the setting and the characters, particularly the revenants. I want to include a scene I wrote about the impact the of Come to Life spell in Equestria, but had to cut for length. "The Boneyard" is my "Earth Ponies are magic" story and I hope, with a bit more work, to help you feel what I felt, when I realized that Earth Ponies, across the span of eons, still see each other as family.

    11 comments · 127 views
  • 20w, 5d
    Bad Gateway 1

    I'm sorry I've been away for awhile. Personal issues. Let's move on.

    I'm kind of stumped about where to go with "Shadow Day." The story spun out of my control at some point, I think because I was confused about where the series was headed. (I really thought that Twilight would end Season Four much like she began. I never imagined her being punched through a mountain!) I think I need to make this story much smaller, and focus just on Twilight, Pinkie, Marigold and Fletcher. While I like the bits about Filthy Rich and his daughter, Diamond Tiara, and adore the scene with Tank, I think this story needs to be pruned a lot.

    I'm pleased that the end of Season Four validates (or, at least, doesn't contradict) my story, "The Tree That Blooms in Darkness."

    That said, while I puzzle over what to do with "Shadow Day," I'm now working on "Bad Gateway," a sequel to "Tonight I Shall Be Laughter." Yes, the title was inspired by an error message I've sometimes observed here on FIMFiction. "Bad Gateway" is about Captain Bucephalus struggling to command the odd lot of ponies assigned to him by the generals of the Royal Guard: a couple of Pegasus ponies, some eccentric Unicorns and the Cheese Family, who rival the Apples in their fecundity.

    8 comments · 157 views
  • 38w, 2d
    The Fox and Hound

    This evening, I decided to fix up some issues with my story, It Is My Fate To Enter Every Door.

    Okay, fine. Pinkie Pie has an older sister. I fudged my story to admit that.*

    Per Benman's suggestion, I've rearranged the opening, so that Emma's story comes to the fore.

    Most importantly, I've added a scene with Vixen the Clever and her nemesis, Laelaps the Hunter. The business with Vixen follows the pattern of mortals dealing with fay spirits. The story of Laelaps is softer; I liked the idea that Laelaps is fond of Vixen, despite her treachery.

    *Fudged again: Matilda Victoria Pie: Maud. I like that the daughters of Clydesdale Pie have these odd, grandiose names. Is it his influence, or hers?

    7 comments · 217 views
  • 39w, 6d
    ISTJ

    I guess at some point in your working life, you will encounter the Myers-Briggs personality profile. This is a kind of four-by-four Sorting Hat that will reveal which of the sixteen houses you belong to.

    I'm an ISTJ. Which, in English, translates to "minion." I am the orc laborer beneath the White Tower, forging swords. I am the contractor on the Death Star, working for benefits. I am one of those ridiculous rubber-suited guys trashed by Mr. Incredible, who were only working for the weekend and free beer.

    As I was sitting through my last lecture about Myers-Briggs, I entertained myself by sorting the Mane Six by temperament. Most were easy-peasy:

    Rainbow Dash: Artisan. Stimulus-seeker, duh!

    Twilight Sparkle: Rational. Knowledge-seeker. She lives in a library!

    Applejack: Guardian. Security-seeker. AJ epitomizes the Guardian type.

    Fluttershy: Idealist. Identity-seeker. How many times have we seen Fluttershy struggle to re-invent herself through her caring for her friends and critters?

    The last two have puzzled me.

    Pinkie Pie. You might assume she is an Artisan. But she lives not for herself, but for other ponies' smiles. I judge her a Champion, a subset of Artisan. The idea that Pinkie is introverted may seem counter-intuitive, but we have seen ("Party of One") that she has a rich inner life.

    Rarity. You could make the slam-dunk of Aritisan and call it a day, but I'm not so sure. I see her as INFJ: introverted, intuitive, feeling and judgmental. It might surprise you that I think of Rarity as introverted, but look at the facts: come rain or shine, good fortune or ill, she works in solitude in her shop and holds to her inner vision. She is a Counselor, I reckon.

    The Myers-Briggs test is not destiny, of course. But thinking about it might give you some insight into a character that you thought you understood. And, if you take the test yourself, some insight into your own thinking.

    7 comments · 214 views
  • 41w, 6d
    Party Canon

    A confession: as a teenager, I adored The Man from U.N.C.L.E. novels. Do not be surprised if this means nothing to you. You are young and these are stories from another age. The Invisibility Affair! If you had an invisibility cloak, of course you would drape it on a zeppelin! That's just what supervillains do!

    James Blish, an author I had admired for his Cities in Flight novels, wrote the earliest Star Trek adaptations which, to be honest, were little more than transcriptions of episodes. Later writers of Star Trek, in this forbidden zone between the original series and its sequels, were happy to flesh out the odd corners of the universe. (How Much For Just the Planet?)

    Alan Dean Foster wrote Splinter of the Mind's Eye, the first Star Wars novel. I'm still a little uncertain about the relationship between Foster and Lucas. There are elements of Splinter that only bore fruit in Revenge of the Sith, years and years later.

    All of these guys had it easy. They were writers for series that were complete or, in Foster's case, in the gap between the first film and its sequel.

    And, here I am, writing My Little Pony fanfiction, an ongoing series, and contemplating an upcoming episode title: It Ain't Easy Being Breezies.

    I have written one story that featured the Breezies, in G3 Equestria. In a couple of incomplete fanfics, not posted here, I've hinted that the Breezies and Derpy are good friends.

    I had this idea, in Shadow Day, that Derpy at last saves the day by convincing her tiny, Breezy friends to turn their monstrous storm castles away from Ponyville. I never imagined that the Breezies, or anything like them, would appear in Season Four. I'm not sure where to go with my story now.

    This is our fate, I guess, as fanfic writers. We have to roll with the punches. Hey! Once, I was writing this great story about a shape-changing creature entering Ponyville. The plight of the shape-changer was moving me to tears. And then, of course, we learned about the Changelings, an entire race of shape-changers. Sigh. My story was tossed into the bit-bucket, never to be seen again.

    Sorry. This is basically a rant. I need to resolve Shadow Day without the Breezies. I've got this idea about Diamond Tiara and methane. I hope it works out.

    UPDATE: Nuts to it. I'm going with the Breezies. "Ready, Whoopsie Daisy?" "After you, Trough Aloft." "Ha ha ha! No, after you, Sky Blink." They nod. "Then, it's settled. Together, it is!"

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The Mayor of Ponyville welcomes a new, glorious day in Ponyville. Her clerk deals with the day-to-day business of the town. After a thousand years, ponies will join together to welcome Luna's night. The celebration, and after. Bring muffins!

First Published
29th Apr 2012
Last Modified
9th Jun 2012

Per the suggestion of earlier readers, I've collected the story into two chapters, before the celebration and after.

"Marigold" is, of course, my own name for Madam Mayor. Oddly, no character by this name appears in the MLP:FIM wiki.

Voice casting: the part of Fletcher Veterinary is played by Alan Rickman. The part of Josh Pie is played by John Goodman. The part of Bean Counter is played by Rowan Atkinson.

Songs: I cheated, of course, by writing parodies of "The Smile Song" and "The Heart Carol." They turned out pretty good, I thought.

And, yes, the story has callbacks to my earlier story, "Tonight I Shall Be Laughter," reflecting changes in the canon. The more I write about Her, the more I love Princess Luna.

*manly tears*

Would that I could thumb-up this story more than just once.

A story with no real villains, no real conflict, just a bunch of ponies who love their lives and live them joyously. Who love each other, realize this fact, and express it openly. It was wonderful watching them do that. Thank you.

Most excellent! Now to make some Peppermint Divinities.

"Teeny tiny riot".  Over a dessert.  I love it!  It seems to perfectly capture the spirit of Ponyville.

If it weren't for the issue of getting the internal monologues conveyed to the watcher, this should be an episode.

I do think that it would be nice for Bucephalus to visit Fletcher, even if Luna doesn't go along.  It's always nice to receive the praise and regards of others in the same line of work.

Oh, and, a sequel 10 years down the line with Pinkie Pie as the new mayor and Fletcher as her secretary would be put on the top of my reading priority stack.

You know, I've read better written and funnier and more touching pony fics, but I can't remember one that has been more joyful. Facedeer has it right, above: this is a wonderful story, and a real delight to read. :pinkiesmile:

Fletcher Veterinary is fabulous, easily the best thing in this. I'm not sure I won't print out his verbal takedown of Counter and get it framed.

Marvellous, a triumph. Fletcher Vet for best pony.

The spirit of everything's in this story, and it all works. Also funny as anything.

This has charm in abundance.

And there is obviously some vast merit to the "Third princess" story.

Frankly, I like it a hella lot.

My Celestia, this chapter was amazing...

First off, my favorite quotes:

“Fletcher, over the years, had come to hear her offer a gosh! and a darn! and even, in extremity, a shucks!”

I like this sort of characterization. :D

“Madam Mayor then emitted a sound that Fletcher dutifully noted as Squee!”

D'aawww...

“Spike awoke to the warm, comforting smell of smoke.”

That made me laugh. XD

“Hurricane’s Apologia (Sorry about the Windigoes, Dudes) and Puddinghead’s twelve-volume Stuff I Did, So There”

That also made me laugh.

“Cinnamon and charcoal! Not many cooks can get that balance right. And is there a hint of sulfur, too? Exquisite! Yum!” He treated himself to a fourth cookie.”

And again I laughed.

The scene with the Josh Pie was incredible captivating.  very fun and interesting to read.

The Derpy Mail song was so cute!  And I found "Derpy's sister, Ditzy" very cool.

The Night Carol was awesome!  The lyrics felt quite natural as I imagined them in my head to the original melody.

And the final scene in Marigolds house was so neat!  I love how you write Princess Luna.  Well done!

Once more, fantastic story!  This goes down as one of my favorite fics of all time, for sure!

Sorry, everypony: a minor edit. I suddenly realized that Twist could not have been in the Unicorn Cooking Contest: she's not a unicorn! Um, duh! :twistnerd: So I brought in Dinky Doo as emergency relief character. Thanks, Dinky; you're a pal!

Yeah, Fletcher's owning of Counter was pure gold. :twilightblush:

Another excellent chapter. :pinkiehappy: As others said, such... joy and wonderment here. Perfectly Ponyville!

I liked this, it fit the canon Ponyville so well, what with all the happy ponies and amusing personalities that have more depth than one might expect.

This story should have ten times the views, and ten times the 'likes'. Truly, it is a lovely and thoughtful piece.

:pinkiehappy:

If we ever get a "a day in the life of madam mayor" episode, this is story will be the measure to which it will be compared.

And so nice to see Cap. Bucephalus again.

I found this on my "read later" list today, and I have no memory of putting it there. It didn't seem like much of a story, but I trusted past me's judgement and started reading.

It was very worth it. You know a story is well written when all that has happened is that a character has woken up gone to the bathroom and eaten breakfast, and you're grinning widely.

I got the impression that Marigold is mayor while Fletcher runs the city, even if I never saw any proof of that. They seemed like that type of characters.

Also love the crowd reactions ("APPLAUSE?") and the songs. Overall, great story.

I just wanted to say that Marigold was an inspired choice of name for Mayor Mare.

Also Lyra probably relied on Bon Bon for confectionary lessons. That hardly seems fair!

#20 · 120w, 1d ago · 1 · 1 · The Celebration ·

But... this can't be!  Is this truly a MLP:FiM fanfic?

A story where no giant, indestructible monsters invaded?  No eldrich horrors escaped from dark dimensions and sent Equestria into a spiral of death and despair?  Neither Princess going insane and becoming a bloodthirsty tyrant?  The whole planet didn't spiral into some dystopian future? TWILIGHT DIDN'T MESS UP ANY SPELLS AND ACCIDENTALLY DESTROY PONYVILLE?!  Ok, she blew it with the cookies, but that wasn't a spell!  No pony got cancer or some other fatal illness, nor did they die from some tragic accident!  There was no Scootabuse!  Lyra wasn't craving hands!  No movies were parodied or crossed-over!  There wasn't any shipping!  AND NO HUMANS APPEARED FROM RANDOM DIMENSIONAL PORTALS!!!

This CAN'T be a fanfic!  This... this is madness!  :rainbowderp:

*Madness?  This isn't madness!  THIS... IS... PONYVILLE!!*  :flutterrage:

In all, a delightful little story, very heartwarming and the very essence of the show.  :twilightsmile:

My previous head-cannon personality for Mayor Mare was somewhere between Diamond Joe Quimby and Mom of "Mom's Old Fashioned X" from Futurama.

Somehow, you've fixed that...

I have mixed feelings about this story. I have to admit that the first chapter seemed long and boring to me. It may be because you completely failed to sell your characterization of Marigold to me. I'm sorry, I just felt it shallow and irritating. It may be my personal opinion or a bias of some kind, but simply put she felt silly to me; irresponsible even. Not someone you would like to have for the mayor. :pinkiesad2: On the other hand, I absolutely loved Fletcher and how caring and serious and precise he was all the time. :twilightsmile: Again, I can't really tell why such contrasting opinion about the characters, but it's probably thanks to this contrast that Ponyville works for now--what Marigold lacks gets filled in by Fletcher.

Either way, because I read the story on the train, where I had nothing better to do, I managed to force my way through the first chapter. I won't lie to you here--if I read the story at home I might have dropped it in the middle. But fortunately I didn't. Because the celebration itself is simply amazing. Old Pie's story--so heartwarming and moving. Derpy's song--so light and delicate (and the hidden propaganda for her being the best pony--amazing!). Fluttershy's song--it actually watered my eyes a little, it was just so full of emotion. :fluttercry: Really, the second chapter rocked and I'm yet again clueless why my opinions on both chapters contrast so much. :facehoof: I would love to give a more constructive feedback, but that's probably the best I can do. :pinkiesad2:

As a side note, it was great to see Bucephallus (sorry, couldn't resist :rainbowlaugh:) and Crescent Cookie again. To be honest, if it weren't for them, I would completely miss the fact that it was a story by you. :pinkiesad2: I now realize the title was a reference too, but I usually load several fics on my ebook reader and read them on the train to/from work, so the information about the author and his other fics gets buried somewhere deep in the directory tree. :rainbowlaugh:

Also, I very much support Pinkie's candidacy for the Mayor of Ponyville. :pinkiehappy: I'm not sure why, seeing as I complained that Marigold seemed silly and irresponsible. Probably because Pinkie Pie is the best pony. :pinkiecrazy:

To sum it up, I'm glad I managed to force my way through the first chapter (once again, I'm terribly sorry I'm not able to pinpoint why I disliked it so much, regardless of the Fletcher character I actually liked) and got to the celebration itself. It was well worth it in the end. :yay:

>>1033703

I appreciate your input.

This story began in a discussion at another site: "how does Madam Mayor manage all these silly ponies, anyway?"

We don't know much about Madam Mayor, although "Winter Wrap-Up" gives some hints. She has, perhaps too much, confidence in her public speaking ability and, probably, too little organizational skill. (The Winter Wrap-Up was a mess, not just this year, but in prior years. Thank goddess for Twilight!)

So I imagined Marigold as a somewhat-hapless administrator, who struggles to keep on top of things in Ponyville.

Marigold and Fletcher, you see, complement each other. Marigold has great social skills and big ideas. Fletcher is detail-oriented but not very approachable. Marigold can rouse the populace with her speeches, but fades on details; Fletcher is very organized, but his personality is a bit off-putting.

In the first chapter, I tried to paint Marigold as somewhat inept. (She constantly quotes affirmations to herself to boost her spirits and dresses to bolster her image as "important.") And Fletcher is capable, but not very friendly. (He shows nothing but kindness to Granny Smith, but is reluctant to express this overtly.)

In the second chapter, they flip, somewhat. Marigold proposes the celebration, particularly the Sing-A-Long to Luna's Night. This would never have occurred to Fletcher. Here, you see her strength and his weakness. And, later, after the Sing-A-Long, you see that even he is reluctantly drawn into the community that loves in abstract.

Ponyville muddles along, with her well-intended but somewhat clueless Mayor, and her severe but kindly administrator. And I think that's not so bad.

And I am completely sincere when I suggest that Madam Mayor would support Pinkie Pie for mayor. :pinkiegasp: Although the rest of the Mane Six have their strengths, Pinkie is the most gregarious, and that's 9/10's of the battle.

“Princess Celestia’s Sun shines upon all ponies, the good and the less-so. Princess Luna’s Moon and Stars comfort us all in the night, when the dark fears enter our hearts. We are all treasured in their eyes.

“Who are you, sir, to question their wisdom?

“Where were you, sir, when Equestria was made?”

Oh yeah, that's very nicely written. :twilightsmile:

As delightful a story as Short Cakes was, excellent story all around.

This is one few stories on FimFiction I re-read just for hell of it.

This was very enjoyable to read :twilightsmile: A nice, simple story of ponies living their lives. It made me smile :pinkiesmile:

I think that Mayor Mare has one or two issues; nothing really severe but she's obviously feeling the stress and also seems to feel the need to be somepony she isn't.  Of course, what is the life of a politician but to be a role, to be defined first by your appearance to the uninformed? Still, she's a kind pony at heart, especially when you consider her treatment of poor Derpy.

The Derpy version of "Smile, Smile" gets this story put on my favourites list.  Period.  End of story.

A lovely story with every pony in-character.  I particularly liked the thought of Luna attending in disguise and Bean Counter not even being able to impress his own boss with his ideas.  Sometimes ambition and a desire for empire blinds you.

Mayor Pinkie? Well, I suppose I can see it...

Bean Counter wore two stiff, hide-bound cases in place of saddlebags.

I suppose he killed the original owner with nothing more than his piercing glare?

sefisticated and well wrighten, love Derpys scene, she really was sweetly wrighten. (full review at finish)

Deep, yet short and sweet.

I am text less this is wonderful.

Excellent details here and there and yet delivered in so few word a real wonder.

no complaints or recommendation possible it ended about right too (even if a part of me wants more).

It was a great feel good slice of life (comedy elements but if it deserved the tag...well I smiled).

This is a wonderful story of the part of life we rarely see in the fandom.  We get characters that we rarely talk about (such as the Mayor) with flaws but are still effective along with a great OC.  We could use more of this (which thankfully you have with your Shadow Day story).

Pinkie for Mayor!  Great idea I love it.  I especially like how everybody at first laughs and then later comes to terms with it as possibly being a good idea (over the course of several stories).

i will remember fondly the wise words you have imparted upon my and those in my position. "My name is Butthead."

gold. pure gold:pinkiehappy:

Aw, what a sweet and simple story, so charming... so why am I crying???

A true slice-of-life masterpiece. Josh continues to be one of my favorite characters in your universe, Mayor Marigold was really wonderful, and Luna and her dialogue absolutely inspired. Thank you for writing it!

Fletcher is badass in his own way. I love it.

This is wonderful! <3

Also, I love your idea of her actual name being Marigold. Can I yoink that for my headcanon please?

This is truly a stunning piece. You always manage to surprise me with how beautiful and touching your fics can be. I always think that each one I read is your best work and then I read another and think, no this is the best. Yet then I go and reread them and think the same yet again.

Fletcher I won't deny made me d'aw at the end of the first chapter. Seeing his gentle strength and kindness was wonderful and I loved his back and forth with Granny Smith.

Marigold too was adorable. I loved her child's crown in the mirror and her incredible fountain of ideas when planning. he was beautiful and so graceful and sweet with Luna as well.

My only criticism (and it's indeed minor) was with Joshua Apple's story. The lack of quotation marks around the audiences pieces kept confusing me as I wasn't sure if it was meant to be them speaking or perhaps in his head:twilightsheepish: I'm too much a slave to the English nuances.

Again, truly wonderful and Joshua's story especially was stunning. I fear I lack the vocabulary to properly express my love of this fic but hopefully this comment can suffice til I learn the method of telepathy.:pinkiesmile:

“I think Pinkie Pie would be a good Mayor.”

:pinkiegasp: Me!?:pinkiehappy: Thank you mayor mare!

Absolutely beautiful.

Oh maaaan. This hit me right in my eloquence. It is such a great balance of heartwarming, cheerful, and sincere! :yay:

Also, Luna disguising herself, poorly. That alone is worth the price of admission. :twilightsmile:

  

>>5150273

"Luna in disguise" was a popular trope, prior to "Luna Eclipsed." I'm afraid I made mock of it in my story, "Tonight I Shall Be Laughter" and re-used the idea here.

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