Alexander was a pokemon breeder specialised in Eevees now after Arcus in his infinite wisdom made him a Eevee and separated from his pokemon partners and his Eevee's he was raising. Now he has to find his teams... And on the way take in any and all lost and alone Eevees he finds..... Oh and be the most badass and epic Eevee he can. Not hard when Arceus left him his hat and jacket the latter of witch had a hidden pocket of TMs which he missed a few, the pokemon good ether let him keep or missed missed them.... (No mons perfect) He maybe a Eevee but he still was the Demon of Orre, and no pokemon will bully him even if he is a Eevee he is still a Orre trainer.
Chapters (4)
There's really no nice way to say this, so I'm just gonna say it. Your summary has horrible grammar.
5357456 yeah I forgot to get it checked.
Correct me if I'm wrong.... but isn't Nidoking ground type... and therefore immune to Electric based attacks like Thunder? The end looked better, though most of it looks rushed.
5357959 um it's poison type I think and pikachu dropped one in the opening of the first movie with thunder bolt.
5357990 - Nidoking is Poison/Ground, thus immune to Electric attacks. The anime's facts are inconsistent and shouldn't really be used as a guideline, especially since Ash's Pikachu is hacked to all hell.
5357934 Also, I think you misspelled Destruction in the title, but it could also be distraction. Not really sure.
5358067 kindle auto correct strikes again.
5358046 oh thanks never bothered with the nido family in game beyond blaster mega punch or Saturn shadow ball. And one shot killing them. I can change it tho flame thrower or ice fang should do the job right? I'm rusty on element charts.
arceus.... not arcus, but arceus
5358184 never actually seen him to be honest.
I agree the weaponizeation of cuteness should be outlawed and the penelty for useing cuteness as a weapoml is de-cuteifacation
A couple of things to say here: First, have you gotten permission from Zeus to do the whole "Arceus missed these TM's for some (totally not DeusEx) reason?" Second, "A Brave New World" has the TM's trainers had that they were compatible with being uploaded to their brains during the transit, so you might use that instead. Third, you really need a proofreader.
Remember that Twilight Sparkle has a basement full of evolution stones.
On 'watch later' for now, I'll check it later
5358596 I did get permission, and I did get a proof reader.... But I guess I should find a better one.
5358654 don't need them Eevees are more dangerous cause there normal types and the can learn a stupid amount of moves. Besides there a good ways away from ponyville.
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Probably not a good idea to break into her basement anyway.
5359666 never said a thing about a basement?
Okay. Time to beat a dead horse. You should go to Proof Island with a bag of master balls and catch yourself a team of proofreaders. Then, you need to make your description more appealing by learning proper grammar and fixing all mistakes (you changed which to witch. Last time I've checked, there is no mention of a witch Pokemon here.) Finally, you need to be sure your fic fits the canon or else Zeus will smite you. Literally.
It's dangerous to go alone, take this : BerryOnlineWall.exe, the best anti-hate wall in the industry.
5359858 I'm not going alone I have a proof reader apparently he sucks at it and I'm going to tell him so. So I need to find a new one and I asked permission before I started writing this even asked what ponies had not been used so stop jumping to goddess damn circulation you bunch if grammar nozties! Every story I write I get hate fully flamed and little to no constructive advice. So if you don't like the story for the story then say that if you are just going nit pic at garmmar of some one with fucking aspurgers a mental diorder then shut up and get lost I'm fucking sick of you people harassing me evry time I write something here. This anger happened on DA or writing.com! So go pick on some one heasl cause you know what I don't give a goddess damn flying fuck what you all think. I write the story cause I want to. I asked permission from the setting owner and got the go-ahead it's in review to see if it's made cannon or not and I used ponies no one has touched. So get off my back and shut the hell up.
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Then, no offence, but maybe, just maybe, you are not cut to be a writer.
I mean, you are blaming your proofreader for something as mundane as a description, you called me a grammar nozties, the problem also touches your pacing, which is YOUR problem and for someone who doesn't give a flying fuck, you certainly wrote quite the long comment about how much you don't care.
I'm not normally one to say mean stuff like that, but I think you should try something else. And for someone who has asperger syndrome (which is related to speech, motor functions and compulsive disorder, a bit far fetched to relate it to writing), you should try to just... Calm down and do something else.
Also, if you are lying and using asperger as an excuse for a lack of talent, you just insulted my uncle and you should just... Do your research and stop blowing your fuse.
5360660 I have it and have never been treated didn't know it till after I graduated high school so I'm basically the result of what is at its worst I have no knowledge of grammar cause my school just never taught it, and may spelling is cause I spell how the word sounds cause I can't remember how there spelled. Also sorry to blow up like that at you but it is only on this site that people get on me about this stuff and I have been having one of those days that it just doesn't pay to be alive.
And no I won't stop writing or drawing I don't care if the world hates my work but I do it to express my self and you have no right to say should stop.
As to pacing I see nothing wrong with it so if you don't like it Don't read it. It's that simple. I don't care what people think about my work but I want to share it's so I am.
5360660 how's he/she supposed to get better at writing?
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First, try to take critisism and work with it instead on exploding like a 5 year old who is being told CoD sucks.
Second, stop making excuses. You have [insert sickness here]? Bravo, but people will have the same standards whether or not you have it.
Third, even if it's not your story, comments and descriptions are the line that separates your story from the world. If that line is filled with mistakes, people will be turned away. Make sure that what people see first is enough for them to come to you.
Fourth, it is not the proofreader's fault. Think about it. If a mistake is there, it means that you have made it. If the proofreader missed it, it means that he is human. You are not paying him, so he is there of his own will. Placing him as a scapegoat is extremely mean and might cause other (better) proofreader to never work with you.
5393372 yes, I realize that. But still, how is someone supposed to get better? Byaking mistakes. And I wasn't taking sides... Both sides are at fault.
Well I finally got around to reading this.
All I can say is
5477849 thanks and when my editor gets back to me I'll have the next chapter up. If you liked this story please him my other works a shot.
Just felt like letting you know that eevee can't do all of those moves
5607334 my games out of date. Also Eevee had the highest number of tm options I ever seen next to mew
5607358 i can only go by what i find on bulbapeidia
5607364 I was using selibi.net the Japanese site about all pokemon games even the ones we don't have.
5607369 still a good read. Update?
5607373 my editor is mia and I can't get a new one I have two chapters done but no editor.
5607377 i could give it a shot. No promises on how good I'll be.
5607385 Ok it also give you a sneak peek at the story so ok. I'll pm the next chapter to you.
5607412 have you read my story(s) ?
Gonna wait till the movie I'm watching is over. It's the cocoon of destruction.
5607433 Ok that I sent you was the second chapter.
UPDATE!!
5610602 lol
We need art of this and fast!!!
5611838 I'm on disability I'm broke but if some one dose draw it pm me with it and I'll use it as the cover.
AAWWWW!
Oh well, gotta do what you gotta do
i thought this was cancelled! <reads new chapter> massive number of typos still but...still shows promise!
7256188 it is and that's not finished I just well lost the spark for it.
Re-read this love it but it’s dead so it doesn’t matter.
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sorry
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Nah it's okay that just how some stories go sometimes with the author losing their motivation to continue it.
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I know I'm trying to finish the other stories I have just need to some c4 for the writers block... or a new season of Iron blood orphans or something.