As soon as Spike began to grow his wings he has been training with Rainbowdash growing fond of the pegasus so as their time together begins to increase they slowly realize ho much closer they've grown.
The entire description is a run-on sentence, and I see at least one spacing issue at the end and a typo after it. I don't feel compelled to read this.
My advice is, go to a proofreading group (the site has tons) and try to get someone from there to beta your story.
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I see many errors but much potenshail. You might need and editor or not rushing it.
Thanks
No two ways about it, this really needs the attention of a thorough editor.
The entire description is a run-on sentence, and I see at least one spacing issue at the end and a typo after it. I don't feel compelled to read this.
My advice is, go to a proofreading group (the site has tons) and try to get someone from there to beta your story.
BTW, if you want to reply to someone, there's that >> button on the top right of their comment. Clicking on it will add a tag that will notify the person when your response is posted.
You misspelled Twilight.
I had went through and fixed any errors I saw if you guys see any tell me.
Captilization here and there. Spacing as well. Just double check it.
A very small amount of character emotion here, however it is merely the first chapter. There are some grammatical errors as well like:
I think you need an 'and' in between older and taller.
Ill continue, but I'm leaning more towards stopping so far. Hopefully my mind will be changed next chapter.