YAY! =D

COMMENT! =D

Oh, hello there. Dark, adventure, AU without the princesses, and a Discord that isn't just a less interesting Q? You have my attention.

This is amazing, mate. Your grammar and wording is astounding as well as setting up for an interesting Alternate Universe type fic.

If you hadn't noticed yourself, you just made it into EQ:D

So watch the influx of a 100+ viewers come rolling in soon.

Please continue. It's hard to find something worthwhile to follow now-a-days for me.

>>511216511216

Couldn't have done it without you. Much

>>552761552761

I'll try my best not to disappoint!

>>552845552845

Yay! Finally posted! Thanks for the kind words.

There's not quite enough here to form a solid opinion yet, but I will say this much; you've got me wanting to see what happens next, which is, I'd say, a very good sign. Your prose is excellent; I found myself having no trouble at all seeing what was happening in the story without ever feeling like it was being spelled out for me, which is another very good sign.

You've definitely gotten my attention and I look forward to seeing the next part.

shit just got srs

Congrats herpy!

Ooh! I'm excited to see where this goes and where all the other Mane 6 are. I'm assuming Rapidfire's "big sis" is Spitfire. Interesting. And I'm glad nobody died (yet).

>>553489553489

Eeyup, fair assessment. And thank you for the watch!

>>553773553773

Hey Choco! Thanks for all your help.

I'm really enjoying this so far, keep up the good work!

Sorry about the delayed update, assignments and Diablo 3 taking up all my time.

I hope to have the next chapter out in about two weeks, hope y'all enjoy this one!

The devious vs the delusional: what a spooky AU you have created there.

I'm really interested in the world you are building in this story; ponies in modern day metropolis is just a very intriguing concept. Can't wait to see how the other main characters slot into this world. The first couple of chapter are promising a thrilling experience (The first season of Heroes comes to mind, for some reason), so I'm definitely staying tuned for future chapter to see if you can deliver.

Keep up the good work.

>>643889643889

Not quite sure if 'spooky' is the feel I am going for, but I hope you're enjoying it nonetheless.

>>646519646519

Always so great to hear from readers! Glad you're liking it so far.

This place sounds like America- Overly Capitalist and corrupt.

I mean, that sets a great background for a story, and I'm not complaining.

I wonder what Twilight's doing...

Again, I sincerely apologize for the lack of updates. This is the first piece of writing I have ever done, so... I write very slowly.

Exams are over now, however! So hopefully I'll have more time to work on this.

Enjoyed the chapter, but I noticed that the chapter name is different in the index (Secrets and Lies) than it is at the top of the chapter (The Lull Before the Storm). I'm assuming that this isn't on purpose.

>>807370807370

Oh! Thanks for pointing that out. I copied the format over from the prologue and forgot to change the title, silly me. It's fixed now.

And happy to hear you enjoyed it!

Oh, and here's where finally Twilight comes in.

I was wondering when she would come up. I also wonder what does she do in this world? She can't be Celestia's protégé, since there's no Celestia.

Great chapter, btw

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>>808196808196

Eeyup, we finally have Twilight. Pinkie and Dash aren't far off either!

Glad you enjoyed it, mate.

>>806935806935 Work on it harder! This is very interesting so far, and I want to see where this goes

>>817477817477

I'll try my best! Although this flu ain't helping my productivity at all. Hopefully it doesn't last too long.