A brony who loves to watch the show and entertain others like himself
It's amazing what a bad event can do to someone. It might turn out to be the start of something great in that person's life. Set in a time span of 3 years, this story of life, romance, and comedy follows the life of a young male student as he coups with life in high school
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your story is really short you know
but i really like it keep up the good work
yeah, I'm still working on it
I'm sorry for the people that downvote this and not give an explanation for what was wrong. As far as I could tell it was just a few places where you forgot to put in a name and some minor grammar errors. Keep up the good work!
5222155 Thanks for the feedback. It was my first story, so there was likely to be some errors.
Huh. Wonder why this story had so many downvotes. Truth be told, when I saw all the thumbs down, I was almost discouraged from reading. But I gathered my nerve, kept an open mind and read it anyway. Turns out it was a great read, albeit hardly the best.
First and most importantly, the literary structure. It's readable and comprehensible, with any possible errors barely noticeable. The pacing feels a bit too fast, though, and time skips are a bit too much. I personally would've liked to see how Sunrise came to be accepted by the other Glee club members, as well as his development of character into a more decent person. Still, it's not that big of a deal.
Secondly is the character interactions and personalities. It's always appealing for me to see hardened villains turn to the good side - a reason why I like Sunset Shimmer so much. Seeing Sunrise go down that path garnered him points, but the transition felt too fast. Where's the detail of the obstacles he has to go through, such as how he handles his old bullying self and the school's grudge against him? Furthermore, where are Aria Blaze and Adagio during all this? They're mentioned in passing, but not much else.
5283077 sorry about that, this was my first story. Nevertheless, thanks for the feedback; I rarely get feedback on why this story gets down voted.
5283077 Also, thanks for keeping an open mind instead of ignoring it because of what others thought about it.
5285017 No prob!
I'm having trouble writing something clever
So here's a wingding of 9/11
Nevermind I can't find it
5950388 where did you get this?
5950560 I made it.
5951668 cool
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6645385 WTF, man?!