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please continue this
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I just may
depends on how many people like it.
Very good story
Ee-yup
"Do you hear that Florence? That's the sound of the fourth wall... collapsing! Any last words?!"
"Just the one: tell-" me why damn-it!!
Fluttershy did not deserve that to say the least. If you did explain, then I missed it. I got the love part but it has to be more than that! Why her?!?!?! Great writing by the way. Just need to fix that kink or two like "haft to".
Continue this story. Good luck my dear Brony. Adieu~
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I'm a rare pegasista my dear, we're very fragile and dying out species from what I know. And since my bronies seem to want me to keep going I just may, I was planning for it to be a one shot, but people seem generally interested, so I may add more in depth to it all, though I haft to update another story and make a changling one. I need to get out of the habit of 'haft' also lol
*Readsw description*
Well now, I have no clue what I just read.
Not sure if want.
How dare you make me sad!!!
Good story.
Keep it up.
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A pegasister? I'm rather surprised that anymore from the ones I already know of exist! Huzzah! The fun has been doubled!
Well, if that's the case, you should start writing "have" and then "to". Or if you want, you could just start writing using "haf-ta". It's a small thing that most people would get turned away from a story with but it's a start when it comes to getting out of your habit. You just have to do it. You just haft to lol
Good luck my dear Pegasister. Adieu~
I just started reading but, "haft...haft...haft." It's spelled "have."
Fantastic! Please keep going!
Also,it's 'have to', not "haft to".
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Finished editing out 'haft' Sorry about that :'D
dafaq did I just read? Somehow you managed to instill the terror and horror of the situation without actually making logical sense. That was horribly well written and it really dark but despite knowing what happened (with a painful accuracy I might add), I have no clue what was going on! You managed to capture the uncertainty and fear fluttershy was feeling almost too well...
Just noticed that pinkie pie didn't seem to be mentioned, does that mean she's ok?
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and someone finally notices :D STAY TUNED. X3 I will mention her soon enough, but thank you for that comment! Means alot to me th
at I was able to do that, been thinking about not continuing the story x3
501340 Despite how chaotic it is, I can admire your writing style. It's really comes off as an emotional torrent which I can't say I've seen before. I won't lie though, it does have some comprehension issues so see if you can tweak it a little. While making it chaotic and confusing can really get across those feelings, it is also very... well... confusing. Try to clue your readers in on what the narrator knows a little better by mixing in little details that they are suppose to know unless you are saving it for a later revelation that you think people might predict too early with said info. Be very descriptive and dramatic if you want people to feel those emotions but try not to flood them with drama or else they will become desensitized to it and it will stop having the effect you want. A few paragraphs of mild detail gathering can be a good opportunity to rest both the reader (this can allow you to roughly summarize and elaborate on what happened so they don't end up lost and frustrated all the time) and your characters so they appear to be "normal" in the aspect that they need to recuperate after a trying ordeal. You seem to already know not to tell the reader what they should be feeling but instead immerse them in what the narrator is feeling and allow them to empathize so they can feel the emotions themselves, but I just felt like clarifying that anyway. I expect with a little work at it you could probably have people genuinely LOATHING the pony who put Fluttershy in such a state and feeling distraught as they/she realizes all the little things that her friends gave her that she would never again feel.
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I meant to make my story confusing, because in all honesty? I'm a very evil being ;3 I love making people confused lol. Though I do appreciate that because I'm sure that most of my stories are confusing, but next chapter to this? Oh yeah, you'll loath this alicorn :3. Or used to be alicorn.. n stuff... Yeah!
YAY! traumatic emotions!
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Le score! It should be updated tonight :3 along with my other story >.< i put that one off for like evvvveer. And the other story... I'm doing a lot tonight.. with new glasses D: Damn I hate these things.. head spinny.. anyways nuff about my babbling x3
>> Whore
Keep up the good work!
I'm a pegasister too, I just call myself a Brony. I'm waiting for an update by the way, it's maddening!