A Silent Sun

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When the Sun spoke, it's light filled the hearts of mortals across the world. Nevertheless, it grew silent, and darkness was allowed to roam free. In the broken remains of a shattered kingdom, the survivors of that darkness wage war in hopes of maintaining some semblance balance through power. However, at what cost will peace be bought, and what else might lurk in the shadows of a ruined world?

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Expositor by the Fire/Prologue · 27th Sep 2014 · 1,398 words
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Scootareader #1 · Sep 27th, 2014 · · · Expositor by the Fire/Prologue ·

But when it grew silent

But at what cost

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cthulhufhgan4 #2 · Sep 27th, 2014 · · · Expositor by the Fire/Prologue ·

5064432 I don't know, I think my use of that conjunction is all right in the context of a non-formal text. Then again, I could be completely wrong, in which case I'll just stop now and go hide in a cave somewhere before I further embarrass myself.

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cthulhufhgan4 #3 · Sep 27th, 2014 · · · Expositor by the Fire/Prologue ·

5064432 Other than that, did you like it?

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Scootareader #4 · Sep 27th, 2014 · · · Expositor by the Fire/Prologue ·

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The word "but" is a preposition, which is never proper English when used as the first word in a sentence.

One thing to note is that the same rules don't apply when writing speech, as that's all what the characters actually said and is not necessarily subject to the same grammar rules as things that aren't written specifically in-character.

Even when writing from POV, your character's thoughts are supposed to be conveyed clearly--and writing with proper grammar is about as clear as you can get. The only time you should see "But" is in speech.

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Scootareader #5 · Sep 27th, 2014 · · · Expositor by the Fire/Prologue ·

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Oh, was that a requirement to comment? Sorry, I haven't gotten to that point yet. It does sound interesting; I may check it out. It's short at this point, easy to get into.