One night, while one your way to get an ingredient for a potion, you were separated from Twilight and lost in the Everfree Forest. But when you found yourself , your world was changed forever with you met [i]
Heh, dude, the idea for the story is really good, but the delivery of it is....seriously rushed. You could have made 10-14 chapters of the story, involving some funny shenanigans, character development and editing before the things that happened in this chapter. The thing is that it's rushed too fast, it's nothing like a story should be. Whoop, I'm friends with Zecora, then woops, 3 months passed, then whoop etc... You might want to think on this. I'm not saying that it's bad, no. I'm just saying that it could be a lot better.
"... an accent that tall?"
I assume something like 'an ascent that tall' ?
6748903 Ugh...I feel stupid
Thanks for that
Heh, dude, the idea for the story is really good, but the delivery of it is....seriously rushed. You could have made 10-14 chapters of the story, involving some funny shenanigans, character development and editing before the things that happened in this chapter. The thing is that it's rushed too fast, it's nothing like a story should be. Whoop, I'm friends with Zecora, then woops, 3 months passed, then whoop etc... You might want to think on this. I'm not saying that it's bad, no. I'm just saying that it could be a lot better.
6752292 Thanks I'll definitely consider that
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You have stopped the sexy time, I shall have my revenge
Just kidding keep up the good work.
That was such a sweet and cute read .