One night, while one your way to get an ingredient for a potion, you were separated from Twilight and lost in the Everfree Forest. But when you found yourself , your world was changed forever with you met [i]
So, honest thoughts... I don't like how timid this guy has become, and it's unfortunately something that many human self-inserts fall prey to. Even if they start out as semi-unique, they devolve into shaky bitches whenever the romance plot advances. Now, you can fix this, because he didn't start out this way, and I hope you do, because I gotta say it's really taking me out of the story.
I hope you didn't continue with this Sifu nonsense much further than this chapter. You really over did it here. Yes Sifu, No Sifu, What should I do Sifu.
I really hope you toned it down later on, because in my opinion this really can damage this story. I don't read these, I convert them to Audio Books and listen to them as I go through out my day. To be honest the Sifu stuff began sounding to me like that annoying kid in the store going; "Mommy, mommy, mommy, mommy." I found myself fast forwarding through entire paragraphs.
Don't get me wrong, I like this story and Im still listening to it. Im just saying that you took the groveling karate kid schtick too far here.
I wish I could have Pinkie around to take care of my brain freeze when I've had it. That hurts like nothing else.
Looking Forward To Chapter 4!
So, honest thoughts... I don't like how timid this guy has become, and it's unfortunately something that many human self-inserts fall prey to. Even if they start out as semi-unique, they devolve into shaky bitches whenever the romance plot advances. Now, you can fix this, because he didn't start out this way, and I hope you do, because I gotta say it's really taking me out of the story.
That was a sweet and awesome read.that fight seane was awesome,And him and Zecora are cute together.I wonder thowe who does FlutterShy love ?
After reading this I imagined Fluttershy singing Can't fight the moonlight.
Nice Abraham Lincoln vampire hunter reference there
I hope you didn't continue with this Sifu nonsense much further than this chapter. You really over did it here. Yes Sifu, No Sifu, What should I do Sifu.
I really hope you toned it down later on, because in my opinion this really can damage this story. I don't read these, I convert them to Audio Books and listen to them as I go through out my day. To be honest the Sifu stuff began sounding to me like that annoying kid in the store going; "Mommy, mommy, mommy, mommy." I found myself fast forwarding through entire paragraphs.
Don't get me wrong, I like this story and Im still listening to it. Im just saying that you took the groveling karate kid schtick too far here.
The Monk