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Time Agent pony


Time agent is the name, time travel and writing Fimfictions is the game

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While pursing Michael Morningstar, Ben 10 and his partner Rook are sucked into the land of Equestria. With Ben and his partner finding refuge with the mane six and the princesses, an old enemy of Equestria require Morningstar's help to take over the land. Can both Ben, his partner and the mane six stop the combined power of King Sombra and Michael Morningstar?

(All art in this Fimfic is owned by their respected makers)

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 47 )

Not bad. I see your fic has been inspired using some dialogue form my Justice League fic.

A nice meet and greet with Ben, Rook, and the Girls

Hope Ben and Rook will be prepared to face their old enemies, especially the girls.

Now the girls have alien powers. This is something to keep a watch on.

5959515 I needed somewhere to start from :raritywink:

Rook does not use contractions in the show.

Great story. "You do know how to type sentances, right?" I said, my OCD kicking in. "Plus, you seem to end all dialogue with a comma. Sometimes it's needed, but it's sort of abused." I then thought about the commas that appeared out of quotation. "By the way, 'wired' like everypony is having a sugar rush or 'weird' like 'odd' or 'you don't normally see that'? I think it would be a weird situation for Ben to meet magical ponies."

I hate to be a critic after being a grammar nazi, buuut...

1. Shining Armor lives in the Crystal Empire. Why is he Captain of the Canterlot guards?
2. Rook has family in danger? When?

This was neat. And I liked the including of some MLP alien fanart

6069601 thanks your support has been noted :raritywink:

Comment posted by Time Agent pony deleted Jun 13th, 2015
Comment posted by Time Agent pony deleted Jun 14th, 2015

6088506 thanks it means a lot me and don't worry a sequel is on the way :raritywink:

This was good needs more art and a sequel
If you make one can you let me know, I don't think I'll see it in the front page:twilightoops:

6541924 thanks I would be glad of the help :raritywink:

6548536 would help but can't draw to save anything:applecry::twilightoops:

6548891 It's OK I can't draw anything to save the universe :raritywink:

6541924 I am writing a sequel, it is still in the works:raritywink:

6562274 great let me know when it's posted please:scootangel:

my only promble with this story i think u should given ben a Ultimatrix

"You're going back behind bars" Rook said.
I think you mean behind glass:moustache:

IS THERE GOING TO BE A SEQUEL!!!

"Sounds like a wired place." Rainbow admitted
indeed, my multi-colored friend, though the electrical bills are rather taxing on this 'wired' community

The three fillies approached him, "Thanks for saving us, Sir." Applebloom thanked him,

"Where'd that stinky bug thing go?" asked Sweetie Belle, looking around for a sign of Stinkfly, "We wanted to thank him",

so Applebloom is thanking Ben but from their POV, Stinkfly is the one that saved them, why is Applebloom thanking Ben? and why keep the omnitrix a secret from them? surely after 1-2 seasons ben has kicked the habit of needing to keep the omnitrix a secret.

6867609 I may have made a mistake in writing this line, but it is good that the CMC thank Ben, thank you for your comment good sir :raritywink:

I really want to see ben and rd race

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something to keep a watch on

:facehoof: :ajbemused: seriously? THAT'S the joke you make?

Wow never thought I would see this. I read Ben 10 and mlp fiction now I see them combined plus my fave series' are being used Omniverse and friendship is magic.

Applejack looked a little bit different to the others. These differences were: an extra pair of front legs, an extra pair of eyes and she had grown more muscular.

Why WHY! THE HORROR THE HORROR! IT'S TIME TA STOP!

DL2

"You never told us that your aliens had ultimate forms!?" Rainbowstone said,

Didn't Ben talk about the Ultramatrix and the fact he can evolve his aliens to their ultimate forms a chapter or two ago? I'm pretty sure he did. Sounds more like Rainbow forgot about it.

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Technically, Ben told them about the Omnitrix, since in Onmiverse he has the new Omnitrix, not the Ultimatrix:twilightsmile:

9874964
you dummy, thats four arms

Did…did you actually reference Dusk’s Dawn?

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I'm afraid I don't understand:rainbowhuh: I don't think so:twilightsheepish:

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