Drago, the God Killer, and Universe jumper, comes to an Equestria where an old god will give him something he has not had in a long time. A challenge. (Not a hate fic).
Pretty good. As much as i want to get the fight over with, my advise to you would to revise the chapters, and take your time, build the suspense, let it go a few more chapters with Drago playing the ponies for fools, and then let the fight start. Also, you said Drago protected innocents, but didn't you say in the story that he went around killing ponies for fun or something?
4998342 Got it. Thanks man. Also, you're right about the ponies thing, but tell the truth, most of the time, they strike first. And in Drago's eyes, you strike him, you go down.
4998721 Unless, it's a misunderstanding that makes sense. But attacking him simply because he looks threatening and not giving him a chance to explain after, yeah.
Pretty good. As much as i want to get the fight over with, my advise to you would to revise the chapters, and take your time, build the suspense, let it go a few more chapters with Drago playing the ponies for fools, and then let the fight start. Also, you said Drago protected innocents, but didn't you say in the story that he went around killing ponies for fun or something?
Oh, also, having two different characters talk in the same paragraph is confusing. You should start a new paragraph when someone new talks.
4998342 Got it. Thanks man. Also, you're right about the ponies thing, but tell the truth, most of the time, they strike first. And in Drago's eyes, you strike him, you go down.
4998721 No Problem
4998721 Unless, it's a misunderstanding that makes sense. But attacking him simply because he looks threatening and not giving him a chance to explain after, yeah.