Lullay (verb): To calm, to make peace. Military (command): to stay arms, to disarm.
1,000 years ago, Princess Celestia had to make the single hardest decision of her life: harmony or family? Luna was given every chance to listen to reason, but still she persisted, forcing her sister to unleash the Elements against her to preserve their kingdom. Luna now wears black spots on her cutie mark, a stain left on her soul from the spirit of the Nightmare. But what was Celestia's penance?
Having to live with what she'd done. The brunt of that force came at the worst possible time: the first night after Luna left.
This is a pretty simple "Celestia struggles with banishing Luna" fic I found sitting in my GDocs that seemed alright, so I rolled with it. There are many like it, but this one is mine. Preread and edited by iisaw. Comments are worth more to me than anything, though I certainly appreciate favorites and likes as well. Have at me, friends!
Not bad ^^
5344168 but not good?
That was really good! No one ever writes about the feelings right after and the first night alone...
It was well written and I liked the diary part and the insight of Luna's feelings along with Celestia's
Thanks for the read~
5344449 you're more than welcom. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
5344197 It's good, but maybe there're a few gramatical errors. I don't know, English isn't my first language ^^U Also, I saw a lot of stories around this topic.
But your idea of using the diary is really good
And, like 5344449 said, it's not normal that someone write something that take place the day after the banishment.
5344658 I try. English is my first, but certainly not my strongest, language. Thanks for reading, though!
5344660 You're welcome
This was enjoyable. I don't know exactly why but I like how you portrayed the mood of the first night. I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but I fully intend to use this mood as a sort of, inspiration, for a future story of my own.
5345066 No, why would I take anyone admitting to belligerent plagiarism the wrong way?
I'm just messing with you. I really don't care. In fact, you have my blessing.
beautiful
really good
5345522 why thank you.
This is really beautiful. I don't see why it doesn't have more views.
5444306 im not a terribly popular author. I appreciate the compliment, though! Thanks for your support!
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5444345
"This is good"
"I wonder why this isn't popular"
"It has not been placed correctly"
"I must correct this!!"
"quickly place it in all the major groups!!!"
I don't understand either
will work on this:)
this is my thought process
this has been rectified
Short and sweet, with a good voice for Celestia, and nice nods to the song.