This story is a sequel to Buck My Life
About a year has passed since the human-turned-pony named Jason arrived in Equestria. The events of the past still haunt him and two certain alicorn sisters have noticed. They believe it is time to give the self-appointed protector of their kingdom a new start. He is less than agreeable however and feels as though their 'gift' is nothing but a royal pain in the neck. Join him on his journey through life as he tries to cope with the ponies around him, daily life, and this change that could very well give him exactly what he needs.
Chapters (8)
je, "shove your hoof on Celestia royal 'bip!' it always funny when stories cover that with some interruption and Celestia as cryptic as always, I wonder what she wants? oh maybe a raise on your job and Twilight its tagging along so you can't resist. Je that clever troll
4939737 While I respect your opinion, I think I did well with the exposition. The point is that a long time has passed and things are a bit different. Rather than have multiple flashbacks scattered through the story I would like to get the main stuff out of the way then have it flow naturally explaining things through actions. The idea behind this will make much more sense (I hope) in the next chapter. Regardless, thanks for the input. It was much appreciated.
And a very good start to what I hope will be another great story from you.
It's good to see how things have changed, though I agree with Samaru that the exposition could have been a bit spread out to flow more naturally with the story. However, there isn't so much in this first chapter that it feels like it breaks story flow. In my opinion those tidbits of what Jason has done in the past year help emphasize the feeling of that time gap. And even so, they're still relevant to at least some of what's happening in the chapter -- like Jason recalling the current tension between himself and the rest of Twilight's family when Twilight squealed about going to Canterlot.
I loved the idea of Jason handling the Dragon Lords the way he did. It shows that he knows his own limits to an extent, and also can think outside the box to solve a problem. I don't think everyone would have guessed at the culprits being traitors, rather than fight the dragons head on. Also knowing that there are still things Jason can't beat outright through shows of strength is what keeps him and the story interesting.
And I, too, wonder what Celestia needs of Jason and Twilight~
Though I have my guesses and suspicions. 
And lastly, I know how and why Jason can be kept in line. Though I'm gonna wait and see if I'm right~
Great start and looking forward to more.
Hard to believe it's only been a year and a half since I read Buck My Life. It feels like it's been forever, and I had never thought that it'd get a sequel. I'm gonna re-read the first story to get back into the storyline and context before I read this one.
4941468 Awesome, and yes I know that it's kind of a rough start, but starting is always the hardest part and I do have plans to make it understandable as to why I compacted so much exposition into one chapter. (hint: I don't plan ending anytime soon.) I'm glad you like it so far, because it's all uphill from here... then down hill about five feet, then it levels off for a little while, then back up, then there's a few bumps followed by a right turn into a brick wall!
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Haven't read it yet, but, saw this:
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I think the Popular box is random, somehow. But, it was there. So, gratz!
Heh.
4942544 Well damn... I'm totally at a loss for what to say now so... have a Fluttershy?
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Gladly.
But where can I buy her food?
4947288 You can buy everything you could possibly need at your local Walmart!
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Ok, thanks for the info, gotta get a rabbit for flutters later...
4949034 Okay then... just remember not to feed her after midnight.
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Ookay, atleast I will actually remember not to unlike someMOVIE.
4949049 Good, we don't want her getting a stomach ache.
4943682 First off, hah, that's a sweet Flutter's image, deserves some HNNG's
Anyway. So, just read the first chapter. After reading the first lines, I actually went back and looked for a dark tag; because if that's somewhere it's headed, one might be needed at some point.
But that's not here nor now. This was a cute chapter, actually. Twilight seems so happy too see Jason again. And he's happy as well. Everyone and everything - except maybe Dash - is happy.
The writing and pace is good, in my opinion. While stuff happened quickly, it wasn't because the fic is rushed, but it felt like it was because that's what happened.
... Am I making sense? I don't know.
Well, it's a bit early to say stuff, but can't wait to see where this will go.
Thumb'd and fav'd!
4949127 All will be revealed in due time. Remember this is only the first chapter and we have many more to go because... i.imgur.com/701ymej.gif that's how I roll.
im loveing this just like the last on.
Ja mystery I loved when we don't know all the answers and we need to find out what its going on.
and if the changeling is as immature as it looks, Twilight must had try, to continue with the insult toward Jason to open up, false connection start with pretending you are on the same side.
And fear can be hide with trying to make everyone angry at you. So that was probably her game.
Well I don't think what its going to happen but so far I with Jason, maybe he can't be father material specially with the little patience he has…buuut then again I can be wrong
4970473 Sorry about that. I'm trying to set up everything and get a feel for the characters. It should be kinda like a movie where the important information is at the beginning and becomes more relevant as time progresses. As for the changeling, the personality will probably evolve and become more three dimensional as the story goes on. Right now you are only scratching the surface... and I hope you're ready to see how deep the rabbit hole goes. fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2014/250/a/8/morpheus_twilight_by_jasonthedemon-d7ye5tx.jpg
Not bad~ and it's interesting to see the twist in the plot now; Twilight and Jason have to be "parents" to what I assume is a young changeling royal. It'll be interesting to see how this is gonna possibly divide and "conquer" between Twilight and Jason. The former seems to want to raise the changeling, wanting to take on Celestia's challenge as she's always done; while the latter would prefer to not have anything to deal with the changeling beyond an informational interest.
Just a couple of repeat errors:
“Wow, I didn’t realize I was that tired.” Twilight said through a massive yawn.
Sounds better as:
“Wow, I didn’t realize that I was that tired,” Twilight said through a massive yawn.
The added "that" makes more sense, though I think that's more my preference. Though, replacing the period at the end with a comma is the grammatically correct way (or I think so, in American English, dunno about other variations) when it's an add-on like someone said, replied or spoke up, chimed in, et cetera.
“I don’t do that anymore… I learned from my mistakes and now I go to bed at one.” She said defensively.
And this one:
“I don’t do that anymore… I learned from my mistakes and now I go to bed at one,” she said defensively.
A comma and the de-capitalization of "she", because it's a continuation of the sentence. Exclamation (!) and question marks are fine left alone, but I've always seen periods replaced with commas unless the following sentence is an action within the story.
I'm not 100% sure if this is right, or if I explained it correctly, but that's how I've seen it done in professional novels that have been published. There's more than a few run-on sentences here, particularly in spoken dialogue.
Anyways, looking forward to the next!
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Well, I feel stupid now. Really there is no excuse for this. Re-revising in progress...
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It's all good, dude~ we all make mistakes and no one is perfect. 
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I like Baclox already.
5045115 Yes well... i.imgur.com/lzS5c.jpg
I like this :)
5061599 I aim to please. (And I shoot to kill...
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5080518 Its supposed to give you insight to her feeling like she can trust nobody and her ingrained hatred of all ponies. I admit it isn't the most stimulating chapter but would you rather have me just delete it? I can do that you know.
Ah…who is Damien?
Also…that changeling is really playing with fire, and…why is he exactly in trouble if he wake Twilight up? Seriously I'm con…oh, jejeje, Jason you clever guy, fake being mad, pretend you are in her little play…oh boy she doesn't had a chance
good luck in the hospital, just take your time recoverin
Sorry for delaying so long in reviewing; I've been working on my own stuff.
Anyways, I liked this chapter quite a bit. It was nice to get an inside-look into how Baclox (very neat name, by the way) was captured, as well as a brief and potentially rich glimpse into Changeling society and how things work for them. I like how much color was given to his personality with his dislike of ponies and their own society, even adding in the hypocrisy of how ponies are supposed to be kind and caring, then laugh at you; it, in my opinion, gives a great deal of three-dimension color to Baclox.
There's still some problems with the sentence structure.
Whenever a character says, asks, or replies to something and you use words like "ask", "replied", and "said", the punctuation mark within the sentence -- the period after 'dumber' -- should be a comma. It's fine if it's a question or exclamation mark. But also the word after the quotation mark should be lower-case -- unless it is a character's name or an "I". So, in the quote above, the period would be a comma and the "H" in "he" would be lower-case. I hope this helps.
Looking forward to reading the next one, which I will now since I'm behind.
I don't think you should delete it.
Personally I like seeing the point-of-view from another, even if it's the same exact scene. Seeing Boclax's opinion and feelings from his side is a nice treat, especially how he reads Jason when he comes in, then Twilight. The repeat snarking and internal monologue, in my opinion, adds support to his personality and how Boclax feels about ponies -- and of course the change he experiences when Twilight is honest and sincere with him. That, to me, screams about the beginnings of character development; pitting his old ways against new experiences from the other side of the fence.
5112134 Glad to have you back (when I don't get comments on a chapter I get paranoid and think I screwed up so bad nobody wants to talk to me
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The whole point of the two chapters was to do exactly what you said. They are a view 'through a changelings eyes'. It was all made so anyone reading could get a feel for the new character since it's apparent that she is going to be a large part of the story (yes, I did say 'she'... Baclox is a girl).
As for the problems you stated, it isn't all my fault. I do have an editor that is supposed to look out for this sort of thing. It isn't all his fault either, but with all the crap that has been going on recently I am lucky to be posting on a semi-regular basis. I guess you could say I'm going through a rough patch and perfect structure isn't one of my highest concerns as of now.
Anyways I'm glad you are liking it and I will be making things a bit more exciting soon.
Not a bad chapter, and I hope things go well for you in the hospital. Best of luck and here's hoping!
Loving Boclax's character and her mischievousness when it comes to messing with Jason -- stalking him and being all cryptic in the kitchen, then sneaking into bed disguised as him to be at Twilight's side; though I bet a big reason for that is to feed as well.
My only thing would be to use commas a little bit more. Several sentences in this chapter and previous have a problem of going on for too long without a break/pause. It feels a lot like rambling, and in a few areas it does not make sense.
Sir Jason, at the end, should have a comma just before Luna actually says his name, indicating it.
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I'm sorry... I'm doing the best I can.
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Hey now, we all know you are, and truth be told you're doing a fantastic job! 
Like I said before, no one is perfect; no one. Everyone makes mistakes; that is simple, undeniable fact. And the fact that you're trying and acknowledging it is improvement beyond the scope of many authors -- both on this site, others, and even professional writers. That devotion is very much appreciated. 
5125716 I only have one thing to say about that...
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In that order~ happy to help. 
I like this story VERY much. I read the first one,and loved it. Keep up the great work!
5132216 Thank you, and I will keep it up.
5132242 You're wlecome,and I hope you're health will improve soon.
5132263 Same here dude, it would be nice to feel semi-normal again.
5132315 I know that feel,bro. I know that feel.
5167036 That was actually intentional. I try to make it a point that I'm not one of those authors that ignores his audience. I think reading should be an experience where you can get involved. As an author, you are only good when others enjoy your work. Knowing this, I make an effort to get the audience in on the action on occasion as a 'thank you' of sorts. Also its something that one of my favorite books does often and I liked it, so I figured I'd take a little inspiration from that.
Wow, she is persistent…quick…use the 'I just remember my secret appointment with the princess, excuse'
Twilight can't say she cancel it because that is the point of being a secret, its fool proved
What, Spike can't go too? Aren't they a family?
5194379 Spike is probably still terrified of being anywhere near Skrillex.
5194384 That's still no reason to shaft him like they do in every other episode....
I hope you feel better soon. I can relate to some extent to having a chronic illness. I hope to see a new chapter sooner than later. Your writing is very good with good timing and description.
4971250 Dammit Zim! I told you not to go to that anime realm. But did you listen? No.
Who else has only seen the title and immediately thinks of blueblood