Loved it. The dialogue between Applejack and Rainbow Dash was perfect I always have a problem with making dialogues feel natural, but you managed to do it and portrayed their characters perfectly.

Also, it would be great to read a sequel

That was a fun story, and I like the characterization of Scootaloo.

Although I'm almost disappointed we didn't get to see Apple Bloom's reaction. I'd almost want to see a bonus chapter where - outside of school - Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle walk in on Scootaloo watching the video again and we get non-school-newspaper related reactions.

I expected Scoots to save a copy of it, something like that is hard to pass up.

4978887 Finally someone understands how fucking cliché, unoriginal, and generic all these porn fics are.

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And yet you took the time to stop what you were doing and posted a comment on one

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If you don't like them, you don't have to comment on them.

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And yet, something about it tells me there's a Diamond in the rough going to snag that file....

I have nothig to say, except: I love it, It made me laugh and I really want to see a sequel!

I'll be honest... I'm not a big Fan of any Lesbian-ships involving Rainbow (Just because she is a Tomboy with a rainbowcoloered Mane doesn't mean she's a Lesbian)

Like the AnY Pony said in his Shipping-Video: It would be so shocking for all the concerned Parents (or something... can't go and watch the Video now) if the so-called Lesbian turns out to be Straight and Rarity and/or Fluttershy, the more feminine Ones are the Lesbians... I actually ship those two... but with Flutters being the Lesbian and Rarity being bi (so that Spike still has a Chance with her... humanized or anthronized of course... no Doggy-love).

Also another Thing I don't like (which thankfuly gets averted in the End is the planned "Rainbow Dash is Awesome"-Article... seriously she doesn't need more of an Ego-boost *cough* Pinkie Pried *cough*

So just a thumb up from me... not a Fav, but definitly a Thumb up

Geeze, the commenters are picky today

The story was fun, short but sweet. I thought it was a bit different from your usual style, but I can't quite pinpoint what. Maybe because it's only lesbian, or maybe because I can't remember you ever writing Rainbow Dash before?

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Geeze, the commenters are picky today

 I know right? They probably didn't even read the story before mouthing off. I understand that not everyone likes clop or AppleDash, but to downvote or bash a story because of a particular pairing or genre without reading it is just dumb to me. However, if you read it and didn't like it that's a different story. Just my two cents.

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Well while I don't like this Pairing either, I at least read Story (except for the Clop... don't ask why) and I liked the set-up

And to be honest... I would have probably done the same with Rarity and Fluttershy

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Like I said, if you read the story and didn't like certian parts, that's fine, but you at least read it.. And I agree with you, AppleDash isn't my cup of tea either, but if it's written well enough, I can look past what I don't like and enjoy the story. Take Ranko's story, 'The Family That Plays Together, Lays Together'. Now I don't like futa, but she wrote that story and scene so well that I actually enjoyed the hell out of it, and I reread that story when I have time. Point is I gave it a chance, and I liked it, just like with this story.

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Now I don't like futa

I also don't like Futa, but this Story is in my Favorites-List... but than again only because I wanted to be informed, when Chap 2 will be released... which in my Eyes was kinda weird... Futacadence having Sex with her mareturned Husband

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Trust me, you'll enjoy that chapter

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I thought it was a bit different from your usual style, but I can't quite pinpoint what.

Probably because Rainbow and Applejack's exchange is more on the romantic side? My usual stuff has more comedy and crazy casual sex in it, rather than actual couples as in this case.

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Now I don't like futa, but she wrote that story and scene so well that I actually enjoyed the hell out of it, and I reread that story when I have time.

That's among the greatest compliments I can think of. People telling me that they don't like a particular fetish, but enjoying the story anyway.

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Personally I'm not an AppleDash shipper either. I probably would have never written them as a couple, if it hadn't been a commission. That probably is the main reason for the mixed reaction. It's been done to death, and there's nothing particularly new or fresh about my take on it.

I don't really mind the negative comments. It's just that 'I hate clop' or 'Not another AppleDash fic' isn't really helpful. It's not constructive criticism, so it doesn't help me improve in any way.

Well, looks like at least those who do like AppleDash, or are neutral on the matter, enjoyed it. Plus, I finally had an excuse to use my favorite piece of pony-related art for a cover. So I'm still gonna put this one in the win column.

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Also the most important Thing is that Jakob85 likes it

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Wouldn't have released it otherwise.

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Well there would be still the Option to not release is or not naming the Commissioner (by his/her Request)... not because the Story is bad, but because he/she wants all of it for him/herself

For example my good Friend Jadenkaiba on Deviantart did a Commission on a Naruto-Hentai. Only the first Pages got released... the Rest was Private (talk about trolling)

4980408 That bitch better not be in a sequel. I do...
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...nasty things to ponies like that.

sequel?

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I honestly enjoyed the story, even though I actively dislike the ship (in my personal opinion, while RD an AJ make great friends and friendly rivals, if they actually tried to be a couple they'd drive each other insane because they're both too stubborn. That and Rainbow has her over the top ambition whereas AJ's only ambition is to stay right where she is and be happy. That wouldn't mesh well).

The sex part was hot and well written, and they both felt in character. However, I felt myself more drawn to the interactions between the CMC and their impressions of what happened. That was of much more interest to me, and also done quite well.

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Probably because Rainbow and Applejack's exchange is more on the romantic side? My usual stuff has more comedy and crazy casual sex in it, rather than actual couples as in this case.

Yeah, maybe that's it. The sex bit was less comic than usual, I thought. Still good though

Yes. Just... yes. Yes!

All of my yes.

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So what? If it's well written and enjoyable, why should I care if there's a ton of other similarly themed stories out there?

And if you feel there's too many clopfics out there, what reason do you have to voice an opinion on it on someone else's story? That's what your blog is for.

The amount of picky commenters is too damn high!

Anyway, the story was fun and well written. Short, sweet, and 'to the point.' It was also good to see Scootaloo do the right thing and take the moral high ground. And I think we all know what's she's going to do with that video...

I like the story but your concern for them being aged up is completely unnecessary

(Obviously hasn't read the site rules)

This was glorious.
Beautiful.
I don't particularly care if some people think it's been done to death, and I care even less that it was simply a commision.
Well done.
~(OvO)~

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The way you phrased your initial comment implied it.

CheeriMac in Chapter 2

Now that's a Shipping I gonna enjoy

When it comes to hidden cameras, and you having connected to it, you should definitely save it to a flash drive for later celebrations!

Nice chapter, but there's a minor thing you may want to edit.

It wasn't just the felling of having her inner folds caressed, the very sound of the motion got her more excited by the minute.

That should be "feeling".

WOAH there horsey!:
too much clop