Twilight decides to end her own life when she is pushed too far and everypony tries to grapple with the loss of one of their best friends.
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4905509 This story is for myself, not for you. Thumbs it down if you want.
4907205
Well said man
This story is actually pretty realistic.
5065113
Thank you so much. I wrote this after one of my best friends ended her life. It was a really good way for me to release all of my pent up... feelings.
I think that while its a intersting idea, I also think its weak in two areas:
1) Devlopment, I think you lacked a strong enough devlopment to point A to B. It seems a large jump for Twilight to commit succide, and their was little talk about her freinds anguish that its seems short. Especially as their is no mention of Spike in the end. I suggest you show progression and flush out the charcters more between chapters. Maybe several chapters of epliogue to explain their slow descent after Twilight's sucide.
2) Twilight seeming OC in her logic. I know she is prone to making something bigger, but Twilight charcter is also shown to be 'If you realized there is a problem, go fix it.' So her snapping and just staying indoors instead of going out to try to fix it would be more in charcter, which would flush it out and give a stronger reason of her going to her suicide logic if Rainbow Dash just flew away, not brothering to listen to Twilight and Pinkie Pie fliniched when Twilight trys to confront her.
5295506
Yeah I get it. I wrote this when a friend of mine had committed suicide. I wasn't paying the most attention to detail, but I do agree that the plot itself was kinda weak. It's also my first attempt at any sort of fanfiction. I can only hope to do better next time.