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Belendu Armshire


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(The prologue will be a scientific entry dictated by overseers. That will be explained more in the chapter. Also i will upload a cover picture as soon as i find on that i think suits the story well. If any of you are artistically inclined and want to send me a picture or if you find one, please contact me. I would be more than happy to use one of your pictures if i like it.)
Follow the journals of one Belendu Armshire. A genetic experiment created in the year 2350. His original design was for the purpose of being a living weapon. Made as a sort of 'Super soldier' though that term is used loosely seeing as it is cliche and overused. He will go through much strife and pain, though it will not be in vain. He will get that what he most desires though it will come at a hefty price that he may or may not want to pay.
(Don't really know what else to say without spoilers so please enjoy the story and please comment, telling me what you liked/disliked about it. And if you liked it, consider giving me a thumbs up and fav it really helps :) So without further ado, welcome to the land of Equestria as thought by me.)
(Disclaimer. I do not own any of the identities of the ponies or places named within Equestria. Those belong to Hasbro and their associates and i take no ownership.)
(A lot of my influence will most likely come from 'Diaries of a Madman' by whatmustido. So I would just like to personally thank him for the great story he/she has written and should continue writing it.)

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 12 )

Sweet baby Luna that's a big text wall.

4880801
Yeah sorry about that. This is my first real story i'm writing so its not going to be very good, though i hope to get better and edit it in the future.

4880839

Well if you would like any editing or proof reading help I'd be happy to do so.

4880846
That sounds great! Ive got a doctors appointment today so i wont be able to do anything, but in a couple hours ill be free

An interesting start. Definitely going to follow along to see how it goes. Nice too see you might already have gotten some editing help. There is a lot of formatting to be done, especially around the dialog.

Good shit, mate. Minor error spotted though, at the 1030 log, you miswrote "Etc" as Ect. Sorry, just a little thing that happened to nag at me. I'm looking forward to more!

Alrighty, lad. This is the chapter that sealed the deal. I am most definitely in for the long haul. :moustache:

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Hey! Glad to hear it! :D As of this comment im in the process of writing the next chapter. With how short they are compared to other stories you can expect it by the end of the day

4936855 Lovely, thank you for your devotion. I really want to see this story progress into becoming an amazing tale. If you ever need help with pre-reading or any editing I'm here. I could use the practice for my sophmore Eng Literature class and I would love help improve upon an already good story.

"Scratchies now! Pleaseeeee" She gave me the saddest puppy eyes I think ill ever see. With a small sigh I raised my hand to behind her ears and started scratching gently, sending her into the drooling coma of scratchitude.

He's gonna wake up one day chained to a bed forced to give scratches:unsuresweetie:

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