Don't feel insulted or anything, but I spent most of this visualizing one of my head characters (Chaos) secretly taping this, in order to post online and sell to perverts online. You know, for money, I also think this is funny for some reason.
Oh the joys and memories of that first time. There's nothing quite like remembering that god awful, clumsy, awkward first sexual experience. This was actually really well portrayed in my opinion. Well done.
this is good, bt weir, good and weird, i like this, I am not sure if i understand the end of the chapter, but i think i do.
Maugh wanna raugh? nahh i don´t care. I be honest, i droped the story at the point she left, but i found it again and decided to take a second look. For a moment i feared it would turn out like another fanfic i had read, but i think it turned out just right. if i would be there i would be probably more angry than them about being looked in, well i just don´t know if i like that Mare. I like her but i don´t like how she act with her gossip mode, somehow worse then Rarity if i understood her personality right. I just hope she don´t start to be someone who want to force them to much or something like this.
Sorry i can´t describe it better tonight, don´t know the right words right now.
4982637 Texus...I could probably figure that out better if you just typed in your first language. Your English structure needs a lot of work, and while I understand what you're saying, the language barrier makes it difficult.
4982706 How Henry and Rouge were portrayed in the scene was kind of off to me. Like Henry was playing the creepy, rape-faced dom, while Rouge played the uncertain, nervous wreck of a sub that would soon be the victim of said rape, having only her body speak for her instead of her brain and reasoning. Completely different compared to what we have seen of them so far, and though this was Rouge's first time, and Henry's first with a pony, yes, it was awkward, but probably more so than what it needs to be intended.
Then once Henry pulled himself out of Rouge, not only blue-balled, but also looked like he just realized he had just raped his lover, both made a COMPLETE 180 where Rouge became the... Slightly more confident, devious dom, and Henry turned into the pathetic, self-loathing sub before they finished their first session, with the former leaving with a... Cum soaked tail? I mean I'm confused to how that happened, did she give him a tail job while on top of him or something?
This is just my view, but it's just how they changed their usual behaviors so quickly that makes this scenario seem unrealistic in a way. It just doesn't seem like something you see for first timers, but then again, I guess everyone has a different story of how their first time went, and I can't be the judge of that because I haven't gone that far with anyone yet.
4982704 i now that i don´t have the best grammar, but i don´t really have the time to learn the half day i have for my freetime, to learn grammar. I don´t think it is that easy. As long as i write simple sentences it should be right. I mean i don´t know what could be wrong at what i had written right now.
I know what you mean, but i don´t be able to see my own mistakes, because i don´t really can say what is right and really wrong. Sometimes it just feel like i had written it false.
What i mean is, that i probably would not like it, if that Mare is going to to intervene more then she should. If they solve their little problem she should not try much more things like this.
4982798 >Rape-faced He wasn't really. He was constantly asking "Are you okay? How are you? You alright?" And Rouge was just going through the nervousness of letting someone else take over for her, being the sub and letting the more experienced person take charge.
The end was just a hug, Henry's pecker caught under her butt, then between her butt. She got that taste of control back, and enjoyed a quick little bout of "Oh I get why you did that, it does feel good!"
No hymen breakage. Do ponies even have those?
All of my yes. Kudos.
... Um... Okay, it was kind of hot, but kind of confusing.
AWKWARD MOTH PONY SEX
4981051
Horses do. Moths... don't know, but doubtful
Can't control my horny level.
One word to express my love for this chapter.
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Don't feel insulted or anything, but I spent most of this visualizing one of my head characters (Chaos) secretly taping this, in order to post online and sell to perverts online. You know, for money, I also think this is funny for some reason.
Oh the joys and memories of that first time. There's nothing quite like remembering that god awful, clumsy, awkward first sexual experience. This was actually really well portrayed in my opinion. Well done.
This is GOLD! Sorry, i mean COTTON!
this is good, bt weir, good and weird, i like this, I am not sure if i understand the end of the chapter, but i think i do.
Maugh wanna raugh? nahh i don´t care. I be honest, i droped the story at the point she left, but i found it again and decided to take a second look. For a moment i feared it would turn out like another fanfic i had read, but i think it turned out just right. if i would be there i would be probably more angry than them about being looked in, well i just don´t know if i like that Mare. I like her but i don´t like how she act with her gossip mode, somehow worse then Rarity if i understood her personality right. I just hope she don´t start to be someone who want to force them to much or something like this.
Sorry i can´t describe it better tonight, don´t know the right words right now.
4982637
Texus...I could probably figure that out better if you just typed in your first language. Your English structure needs a lot of work, and while I understand what you're saying, the language barrier makes it difficult.
4981092
How so?
Saint scares me. A lot.
Very well written chapter, you captured the experience pretty accurately.
Methinks you know well the awkwardness that a first time creates.
Nice job lol i give this chapter five Pinkies.
4982706 How Henry and Rouge were portrayed in the scene was kind of off to me. Like Henry was playing the creepy, rape-faced dom, while Rouge played the uncertain, nervous wreck of a sub that would soon be the victim of said rape, having only her body speak for her instead of her brain and reasoning. Completely different compared to what we have seen of them so far, and though this was Rouge's first time, and Henry's first with a pony, yes, it was awkward, but probably more so than what it needs to be intended.
Then once Henry pulled himself out of Rouge, not only blue-balled, but also looked like he just realized he had just raped his lover, both made a COMPLETE 180 where Rouge became the... Slightly more confident, devious dom, and Henry turned into the pathetic, self-loathing sub before they finished their first session, with the former leaving with a... Cum soaked tail? I mean I'm confused to how that happened, did she give him a tail job while on top of him or something?
This is just my view, but it's just how they changed their usual behaviors so quickly that makes this scenario seem unrealistic in a way. It just doesn't seem like something you see for first timers, but then again, I guess everyone has a different story of how their first time went, and I can't be the judge of that because I haven't gone that far with anyone yet.
4982704 i now that i don´t have the best grammar, but i don´t really have the time to learn the half day i have for my freetime, to learn grammar. I don´t think it is that easy. As long as i write simple sentences it should be right. I mean i don´t know what could be wrong at what i had written right now.
I know what you mean, but i don´t be able to see my own mistakes, because i don´t really can say what is right and really wrong. Sometimes it just feel like i had written it false.
What i mean is, that i probably would not like it, if that Mare is going to to intervene more then she should. If they solve their little problem she should not try much more things like this.
4982798
>Rape-faced
He wasn't really. He was constantly asking "Are you okay? How are you? You alright?"
And Rouge was just going through the nervousness of letting someone else take over for her, being the sub and letting the more experienced person take charge.
The end was just a hug, Henry's pecker caught under her butt, then between her butt. She got that taste of control back, and enjoyed a quick little bout of "Oh I get why you did that, it does feel good!"
4982890 Huh, well alright then.
Annnnd Funny Sex for the win!
Great chapter!
that's why I let you love to Prance! | leave for Prance, or something, all I can really do is guess
Well done good sir, well done!
wow, awkward funny sex hehe. um why is he worried about a condom though? doesn't she need to be in heat?
this is the first story i've read with a mothpony, love the concept, by the way this is like a puppy love romance i love it
stay classy
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Moths lay eggs that will be fertilized. No hymen since the eggs get laid for fertilization.
Yes